初中英语作文怎么讲评【一】
Last autumn we took a trip to Qianshan by bus. It is about thirty miles from the city. We planned to put up in a hotel there in order to watch the sun rise the next morning.
As soon as we got there, we began to climb up the mountains. How great the sight is! We felt as if we had entered amother world full of beauty, peaeefulness and loveliness. There are hundreds of mountains, one after another. there are magnificent cliffs, one above another. We climbed up vigorously and breathed the fresh air greedily. As the sun was going down, we descended to a little hotel at the foot of the hill, where we had a big dinner, and then went to bed early so as to regain the energy ior the expedition next morning.
Before daybreak, we reached the peak of the highest mountain after a hard groping and climbing in the dark. Unaware of the cold wind, we stood motionlessly, with our eyes fixing at the hr end of the east. Suddenly thin ravs of red hue spread across the sky. As the redness deepened, some mysterious clouds moved across thc sky, dividing heaven from the earth. Just at this moment, up from the brightening far east rose the sun. It was so red and yet so tender that we could gaze at it with naked eyes. and a slight applause from us. the amazed spectators, rang through the peak. Up, up it rose, adding to itself strength and glory at every step. It dazzled with vigour, driving away darkness, cold, and misery from the earth, and bring light, warmth, and happiness to men.
We were completely amazed at the wonder and the greatness of nature. We jumped and shouted like innocent children and we bathed in the first rays of the sun with the peak till it was time for our return.
千山秋游
去年秋天我们乘公共汽车去千山游玩了一次。它距城市大约三十英里。为了第二天早晨看日出，我们计划住在那儿的旅馆里。
我们一到那里就开始爬山。那里的景色太美了!我们感到好像进入了另一个世界，一个充满美丽、和平和可爱的世界。那里有数百座山峰鳞次栉比：有壮观的悬崖层出不穷。我们精力充沛地向上攀登，贪婪地呼吸着新鲜空气。当太阳下落时，我们来到山下的一家小旅店，在那里美美地吃了一顿晚饭，然后早早地上床睡觉，以便恢复精力第二天早晨远征。
天亮前，我们经过在黑暗中艰难地摸索和爬行到达了最高的山峰。我们一动不动地站在那里，双眼凝视着远处的`东方，连寒风也没觉察到。突然间，薄薄的红光在天空中散开，随着红色加深，一些神奇的云朵在天空四散，把天地分开。正在这时，太阳从远处东方的光亮处升起。它是那样红，然而又那么娇嫩以致我们可以用肉眼来观察它。从我们吃惊的观赏者中发出的一阵轻微的欢呼划过山峰，太阳升得越来越高了，每升一步都给它本身增加了力量和光辉。它炫耀着威力，驱走了黑暗、寒冷和大地的苦难，并给人们带来光明、温暖和幸福。
这一奇观和大自然的伟大使我们完全惊愕了。我们像天真的孩子一样跳着、喊着，和山峰一起沐浴在太阳的晨曦中，流连忘返。
初中英语作文怎么讲评【二】
Last Saturday,with all my classmates and teachers,I went on a trip to the nature park .We departed from school at about half past seven and spent about 40 minutes travelling to our destination.When we first entered into the park,all of us were shocked by the natural beauty and the hamonized ecosystem of the park.Then,happily we were playing games on the sand; swimming in the pool and taking with our friends on the grassplot.After lunch break,our programs were continued with an contest of story narating held and each of us was immerging within the funny stories We left the part at about 5 o'clock,and unitl now,most of us are still haunted by the beautiful memory of that trip.
初中英语作文怎么讲评【三】
--姐，天气凉了，可增添了衣裳？
生：一句问候情意深长，余味无穷。
师：好。看来关于文章结尾的评价我也没有更多的话要说了。下面请大家接着谈谈关于写人记叙文结尾要注意的方面，可以结合一些典型范例来谈。
生１：要能呼应开头，总结全文，揭示主题。
生２：要能抒发真情，感染读者。
生３：最好能令人回味，发人深思。
生４：结束语应像豹尾，简短有力。
生５：我还是觉得臧克家《老哥哥》一文的结尾值得我们学习：“又是秋天了。秋风最能吹倒老年人！我已经能赚银币了，老哥哥还能等得及接受吗？”
师：大家做了非常好的总结，关于结尾的要求我也进一步用四个字来概括一下（板书）：揭旨升华。“揭旨”就是揭示主题；“升华”是指使情感、境界能进入更高层次，耐人咀嚼回味。为了便于大家理解，我将写人记叙文的要求最后浓缩成五个字（板书）：格、事、脉、戏、情。“格”就是写人记叙文（其实所有文章都这样）要中间大两头小的格式，也就是说是起、承、转、合的基本模式；“事”就是要有特定的事情，具体的描述；“脉”就是血脉相连，所写的事与事之间有内在联系。这三个字体现了文章的基本要求。“戏”就是记事富有戏剧性，有跌宕起伏、扣人心弦的情节；“情”就是字里行间饱蘸感情，用真情撞击读者心扉。
