用外貌动作写一个人的作文【一】
“You always say that I am naive. In your eyes, I am always the little girl who will never grow up”. This is my favorite song and also the sound from the bottom of my heart. You made me feel so lucky to be your child. But I find our hearts getting further apart as time goes by.
You strictly forbid me to do entertaining activities even if I finished my homework, such as watching TV or playing computer games. Based on this, I couldn’t get any grade less than A. It is said that genius only means hard-working all one’s life. But I think combining exertion is the best way for learning.
The most important thing to me was that I feel frustrated for having few friends to confide in due to your strict rules. I can’t have a play date, participate in a school play or even choose my own extracurricular activities. Who will accept such a boring and troublesome person? I am just an ordinary girl who can’t stand loneliness, so I always feel contradictory.
On the one hand, I’m grateful to have you in my life, to disappoint you was the least I would do. On the other hand, what you asked for me made me felt like a puppet rather than a real person. I appreciated your efforts to pull me away from a self-indulgent life, but your obsessively extravagant strictness has pushed me into an isolated and insensible one. I need a little freedom so that I will concentrate on something I really interested in.
Father and mother, these words were hid in my deep heart for a long time. I love you, and I believe if you change some harsh rules. I will have a wonderful life.
Best wishes.
Yours, daughter
用外貌动作写一个人的作文【二】
Dear Frank,
How is everything going? I have been in America for a month as an exchange student. I am now staying at Mrs. White’s. She is said to be in her forties but looks very young and attractive. She is of normal height, with a slender figure, blond hair and big blue eyes.
Mrs. White shows a keen interest in everything about China, especially its culture and places of interest. She has a large collection of items that have to do with China, such as books videos, tea, artworks, and so on. She asks me so many questions about my country that sometimes I have to consult my friends to give satisfactory answers.
Mrs. White is kind and outgoing and she usually wears a smile on her face. We are getting along very well with each other. She takes me out to local places every weekend and if you come here, I will be your guide.
Look forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
用外貌动作写一个人的作文【三】
浓浓碘酒香
我（加“像往常一样”）走进了乱成一团的教室，开始和同桌眉飞色舞地神侃。忽然，同桌说嗅到了一股很奇怪的味道。果不其然，我一向迟钝的鼻子也受到了“侵袭”。【一个“眉飞色舞”的神态描写，足以说明学生浑然不觉自己身在教室。】
我（加“皱了皱眉”）向门口望去。“嘿，是史老师！”眼尖的同桌说，“哎，怎么跛了呢？”只见史老师一瘸一拐（改为“一只脚悬空，用另一只脚蹦着”）走了进来，然后（改为“气喘吁吁地”）说：“下楼梯太急，不小心把脚崴了一下，不过请大家放心，耽误不了上课。”【一个“哎”字显现出了学生的调皮，不懂事。】
“老师，你不要紧吧？”一个声音打破了沉默。不懂事的我们已经习惯了用“你”这个称呼。史老师坐了下来，（加“硬咧了咧嘴”）说（改为“笑”）道：“你们不怕碘酒难闻就行了。”【“硬咧了咧嘴”，加得好，足可见老师的痛苦与坚强。】
她让我们轮流向她提问题。“老师，我的问题是——”看着她脚踝肿得老高（改为“肿得老高的脚踝”），我竟忘了想问什么，“您真的不用休息吗？” （加“史老师笑了：”）“谢谢你，真的不用。”（加“她的笑容在碘酒味儿的萦绕中显得异常美丽。”）
看着（加“忍痛”）为我们上课的史老师，大家全都站了起来，由班长带头表态：“史老师，您去医院吧，我们一定遵守纪律。”【由“你”到“您”这一称呼变化，实际暗含了学生对老师的态度变化，语言很准。】
就在这时，四周的一切似乎都停止了。【环境描写得好，此时无声胜有声。】
第二天学校通知：史老师因为骨折不来了。大家你一言我一语地议论着，都在担心着史老师的病情。忽然，大家鼻子里，好像嗅到了什么味道，是碘酒？是碘酒味！【 “是碘酒？是碘酒味！”这里的标点其实是心理描写的标志：“？”是猜测，不敢相信；“。”是肯定，是惊喜。】
史老师来了，我们都很感动，于是又开始认真学习。史老师的敬业精神深深地感动着我们，从此，我们班的学风变好了，同学们的成绩也一路上升，多次受到学校的表扬。我们每个人都知道，那是史老师的功劳。（要加上景物描写烘托人物形象。）
老师的无私一直感染着我，无论我走到哪里，我永远也忘不了敬爱的史老师，忘不了那记忆中永远挥之不去的碘酒香……【结尾再次点题，余音袅袅，让读者产生“绕梁三日”之感。】
（作者及评点同学均系河南省安阳师范学院附属中学学生，旁批、指导教师/周晓北）
教师立场
这篇叙事具体、清楚，感情真挚，文字不乏美感。但语言表现力不够，尤其是人物形象的刻画不够鲜明。虽然一篇600字的文章不可能把人物描写的方法用得面面俱到，但关键的动作、神态等细节是不可少的。几位修改作文的`同学就深深地认识到了这一点，修改后的文章人物的形象就饱满了。在以写人为主的记叙文中，抓住人物的语言、动作、外貌来描写，会使人物的形象跃然纸上。
用外貌动作写一个人的作文【四】
Dear XX,
i am very happy to see you,i think you teach very well,we all love you!
i think your english class is better than our old english teacher's class,i believe you can do better than better!i believe in you!
Best wishes to you!
yours,
XXX
XXXX.X.X
用外貌动作写一个人的作文【五】
Hello, we are XX tourism company, we have you and your 2 children 4 to set up tourist routes for you to choose.
From Beijing to Shanghai's tourist routes, you can go play in Shanghai Zoo, which has its own characteristics is a large-scale integrated Zoo. Then you can also go to Shanghai, Nanjing Pedestrian Street shopping, it is a shopper's paradise.
From Beijing to Changsha tourist routes, you can go play Changsha Window of the World, which is a new development in an amusement park. Then you can go take a look at Pinghu Tang and Wangfujing, one of the very many. Yuelu Mountain is you have to go to a place, from the top you can see the whole Changsha.
From Beijing to Guangzhou's tourist routes, you can go a long long amusement park to play, and that there are many excellent recreational facilities, so that you will not regret it. You can also go to Hong Kong the world's wildlife, which is currently China's largest imitation of the Wild Animal Park. Guangzhou's food is delicious, you will like.
From Beijing to Guilin tourism line, you can go to the famous Lijiang River, sitting on the boat to enjoy the beautiful scenery, and then can go to Yinzi Yan, it was China's first large cavern 4. Guilin Yang Shuo in the line of Yang Renjie shopping and you will be a good place to eat. That you will not feel the same with Chinese characteristics.
I hope you are happy to play China
Yours
XXX
