改写括号中的内容,使其句式整齐,韵律和谐。
醒来眼里布满了泪水;(大病之后我疲乏,依依不舍的离别,旅行途中的辛苦,到家后可能的恐怖的事实,)都到心上来了。
分析:这是一道典型的语言运用试题,在近年中考语文试卷中经常出现。这类句式修改,一般要求句式整齐,语意连贯,可调整个别词语和句子顺序,但不得改变句子愿意。
句式整齐,语意连贯,其实就是修改为整句。整句是什么呢?整句就是把结构相同或者相似的一组句子整齐地排列在一起。整句形式整齐,音律和谐,气势贯通,能够把内容表达得鲜明集中,有利于突出作者的思想感情。
本题的实质是将原句修改为排比句(排比句就是整句的一种),但在题目中并没有明确指出,意在降低试题难度,只要句式基本整齐,意思和原句差不多都能得分。
查看本题中要修改的部分,我们很容易发现,出现了“大病之后”、“旅行途中”、“到家后”三个时间状语,只要第二个短语“依依不舍的离别”可以修改为时间状语修饰,句式基本上就整齐了。“依依不舍的离别”就是离别的时候依依不舍呀,“离别时”不就是一个时间状语吗?
看看,这样修改后就变成了“大病之后我疲乏,离别时的依依不舍,旅行途中的'辛苦,到家后可能的恐怖的事实”
是否还需要进一步修改呢?同学们在修改中也要试着读一读,看看还有不有别扭的地方。我们很快就可以发现,第一个短语和后三个是不同的。我们只需要把第一个短语也修改成的字短语修改的偏正短语就行了。
“大病之后的疲乏,离别时的依依不舍,旅行途中的辛苦,到家后可能的恐怖的事实”
这已经非常不错了,当然,你还可以进一步美化。
“大病后的疲乏,离别时的不舍,旅行途中的辛苦,到家后可能的恐怖的事实”
前三句字格式、字数完全相同了,最后一句是不能改为“到家后的事实”的,也不能改为“到家后的恐怖事实”,因为去掉“可能”,就改变原句的原意了。
How bright the June sun is, and the bright sunshine brings us to the same heart. It's like this: Dad took a camera from school and took pictures for us these days. Dad organized us to play together today. In the afternoon, we rode on motorcycles and walked on the same road.
On the way, I was in a good mood when I suddenly saw a blue sea, the sea breeze blowing my body, comfortable, the sea breeze seemed to blow into my heart, blowing out all the unhappiness in my heart.
Soon we came to Shiyuan. We just walked into the poetry garden. Before I took the two step, I came to the gate. I thought, "Oh! How nice it is to take a picture here, so I hastened to shout, "Dad, please come and take Zhang Xiang to me." Dad hurriedly came over and took a picture of me with a click. Then we went on, when I found one of the rocks, just one that could make me do something, and when I was sitting, my father came over to give me a picture. We ran to the place where there was water and came to the side of the sea. I thought, why not take a picture with the sea? I put my posture ready for a picture. Dad came over again and gave me a picture.
At this time we came to the place where there was a pavilion, and everyone was ready to see this good place. You see your sister's posture so beautiful, and the brother also put a posture in the mother's arms. I started to prepare, when I suddenly saw a stone made goose. What I want to ride on it, how impressive and impressive. I got on the goose on top of it. Dad came to take a picture of me. My sister came to take a picture of the little fish next to him.
Then we came to the mosque, because we didn't have enough time, so we hurriedly made several photos.
When Dad took us to a place, there were two ships, and I wanted to experience the experience of the ship as a ship, but the steamer was not there. So we don't have a steamer.
I am very happy today.
The Best Way of Traveling最好的旅游方式
People travel by plane, by train, by ship, by bus. For me, the best way of traveling on a summer vacation is to go on foot.人们去旅游有的乘飞机、有的坐火车、坐船、乘公共汽车。对我来说在暑假,最好的方式是徒步旅行。
My preference depends on the purpose of the travel. On a summer vacation I travel to refresh myself and to see the countryside. When I use my feet and walk on a grass covered path along a river or among the hills I feel detached from the noise of the city and closer to the nature. And when I travel on foot I get more freedom. I can plan my own schedule. I can choose my own route. I can stop where I like. And I can see things and people that I might miss if I travel on a train or on a bus.我的偏好取决于旅行的目的.。在暑假我旅游是为了消除疲劳并欣赏乡村美景。当我沿着河流或在群山之间走在一条青草覆盖的路上时,我觉得我远离了城市的喧嚣、亲近了自然。徒步旅行,使我很自由。我可以自己安排行程。可以选择我自己的路线。我可以把车子停在我喜欢的地方。而且我可以遇到那些坐火车或公共汽车会错过的人和事。
When faster and more convenient ways for travel are becoming available, I still favor using my own feet. I get much pleasure from it. People travel by plane, by train, by ship, by bus. To me, the best way of traveling on a summer vacation is to go on foot.当更迅速、更方便的方式使旅游变得更便捷,我仍然热衷于徒步旅行。我从中得到许多乐趣。人们去旅游有的乘飞机、有的坐火车、坐船、乘公共汽车。对我来说在暑假,最好的方式是徒步旅行。
【words】
1、preference v.偏爱;倾向;优先权
e.g. I don't know your preferences, so please help yourself.
2、refresh v.使……恢复;使……清新;消除……的疲劳
e.g. I refresh myself with a cup of coffee.
3、detach v.分离;派遣 ;分开
e.g. A number of soldiers were detached to guard the building .
4、available adj. 有效的;可得的;可利用的;空闲的
e.g. The only time available is Friday.
5、convenient adj. 方便的
e.g. It is quite convenient for customers.
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