在浩瀚无边的宇宙里,漂浮着一个巨大的红苹果,它是一个苹果星球。
在苹果星球里,住着一条胖乎乎的肉虫子。
它每天除了吃苹果肉,喝苹果汁,就是躺在苹果核中间的苹果洞里睡大觉。
有一次,它吃得太多了,一路啃啊,啃啊,啃到了苹果皮上。粉红色的苹果皮,被它啃成了半透明的。这时,它看见了从外面透过来的几束光亮。
“这是什么?”肉虫子想,“这墙壁外面一定有一些我没见过的东西。”它感到有些害怕,就赶紧又缩回了苹果核里。
可是,从此以后,肉虫子每天都会梦见外面的那个宇宙,每次的梦都不太一样。有时,是红彤彤,暖洋洋的;有时,又是黑洞洞,冷冰冰的。它醒来之后,就越来越想知道,外面究竟是什么模样呢?
因为想得多了,睡得少了,它就觉得更饿了,它吃得越来越多,越来越快,最后,苹果星球被它啃得就剩下一层薄薄的皮了,而它却长成了一条很大很大的肉虫子。
终于,有一天,这层皮“啪”的一声破了,肉虫子从瘪了下去的苹果星球里钻了出来,它看见了一个无边无际的世界,四面八方都有星辰在闪烁,真是太美了!
可是,肉虫子却觉得有点透不过气来,它的身体里似乎有什么东西正在迅速膨涨,涨得它快要裂开了。“我快死了吗?”肉虫子颤抖着想。
就在这一瞬间,一条闪闪发光的银丝忽然从它的嘴里喷了出来。这条银丝越来越长,长得缠住了肉虫子,把它和苹果星球裹在了一起,变成了一个圆圆的、闪闪发光的银茧。
苹果星球就这样消失了。又过了很久很久的时间,从这个漂浮在宇宙中的茧子里,钻出了一只七彩斑斓的大蝴蝶,它衔着一颗金色的苹果种籽,向着宇宙的最深处飞去——它是要去寻找一片最宽广的土地,好种下这颗种籽,让它长成一棵开满花朵的大树,那时,宇宙间就又会飘起一阵阵苹果的香气……
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
How to prevent the H7N9?
As is well known,the A flu is spreading throught our country. However, if we negnect it, the deadly H7N9 may cause more infectors,or even more deaths. So what is the most important is that we should take some effective measures to prevent it.They can be listed as follows.
Firstly,it is necessary for you to realize the Avian flu can be prevented if you develop good living habits. For example,you shouldn’t forget to wash your hands before meals.Besides,don’t spit everywhere and try to cover your mouth or nose with paper or hankerchiefs when you have to cough or sneeze.What’s more, remember to wear the mouth-cover if you have to go to the public places, such as the crowded cinemas,supermarkets, buses,where the A flu may spread easily.
Secondly,of course, taking exercise more often and taking good sleep to build your body are wise choices for you to reduce the risk of being infected.
Last but not the least, if you are unlucky to be infected with the slight flu cold, try to stay at home,and take some medicine. Do pay attention to your daily body temperature. If you have a high fever, go to the hospital without delay for further treatment. Make sure you are not expected to come back to school before the cold or flu is cured.
Only by doing like this can you prevent or defeat the A flu in the end.
To see a world in a grain of sand,
And a heaven in a wild flower,
Hold infinity in the palm of your hand,
And eternity in an hour.
一沙一世界,
一花一天堂,
手中即无限,
永恒亦短暂。
在浩瀚无边的宇宙里,漂浮着一个巨大的红苹果,它是一个苹果星球。
在苹果星球里,住着一条胖乎乎的肉虫子。
它每天除了吃苹果肉,喝苹果汁,就是躺在苹果核中间的苹果洞里睡大觉。
有一次,它吃得太多了,一路啃啊,啃啊,啃到了苹果皮上。粉红色的苹果皮,被它啃成了半透明的。这时,它看见了从外面透过来的几束光亮。
“这是什么?”肉虫子想,“这墙壁外面一定有一些我没见过的东西。”它感到有些害怕,就赶紧又缩回了苹果核里。
可是,从此以后,肉虫子每天都会梦见外面的那个宇宙,每次的`梦都不太一样。有时,是红彤彤,暖洋洋的;有时,又是黑洞洞,冷冰冰的。它醒来之后,就越来越想知道,外面究竟是什么模样呢?
因为想得多了,睡得少了,它就觉得更饿了,它吃得越来越多,越来越快,最后,苹果星球被它啃得就剩下一层薄薄的皮了,而它却长成了一条很大很大的肉虫子。
终于,有一天,这层皮“啪”的一声破了,肉虫子从瘪了下去的苹果星球里钻了出来,它看见了一个无边无际的世界,四面八方都有星辰在闪烁,真是太美了!
可是,肉虫子却觉得有点透不过气来,它的身体里似乎有什么东西正在迅速膨涨,涨得它快要裂开了。“我快死了吗?”肉虫子颤抖着想。
就在这一瞬间,一条闪闪发光的银丝忽然从它的嘴里喷了出来。这条银丝越来越长,长得缠住了肉虫子,把它和苹果星球裹在了一起,变成了一个圆圆的、闪闪发光的银茧。
苹果星球就这样消失了。又过了很久很久的时间,从这个漂浮在宇宙中的茧子里,钻出了一只七彩斑斓的大蝴蝶,它衔着一颗金色的苹果种籽,向着宇宙的最深处飞去——它是要去寻找一片最宽广的土地,好种下这颗种籽,让它长成一棵开满花朵的大树,那时,宇宙间就又会飘起一阵阵苹果的香气……
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