捏鸡蛋作文点评【一】
今天，我和我的好朋友妞妞举行一场捏鸡蛋比赛，规则是这样的，用自己喜欢的方式使鸡蛋烂掉，妞妞拿起鸡蛋往桌子一磕，磅，蛋黄都出来了，到我了，我拿起鸡蛋用力的一捏，奇怪，怎么鸡蛋没有烂掉?回家后，我找到了十万个为什么才知道，这是因为鸡蛋有圆圆的壳，当我们捏鸡蛋的时候，用的劲在弹壳上是均匀地散开的.，就比轻轻在桌上敲的劲还要小，原来鸡蛋是捏不烂的。磕是磕得烂的，虽然我输了，不过我又认识了新的知识。
捏鸡蛋作文点评【二】
Why Are Trees Important?
Trees are very important to us. Do you know why? Let me tell you.
Trees take in carbon dioxide from the air and make oxygen. That's important. People and animals need oxygen to live. Many small animals and insects live in the trees. Some of them also get food from trees. Trees can also stop water and soil from going away. If we have a lot of trees, we stop deserts from being large. I think this is very important. You know, trees are green. They can make our country even more beautiful.
Trees are our good friends. We should plant more trees and take good care of them.
点评：文章先阐明论点，接着论证，最后重申自己的观点。
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It's Our Duty To Protect Our Environment
It's our duty to protect our environment. Where we live? The earth. The earth is the only one place we live in. So you know how important the environment is. But now, some people are harming the environment, like cutting down trees, drawing pictures on public walls, littering onto the ground. It's terrible if we still do it. Now, it's time for all the people in the society to protect the environment. It's our duty. It needs each of us to make a contribution to improving the environment. We should make our environment more and more beautiful.
点评：作者多用学过的'词语不但保证了正确，还巩固了所学的知识，并且注意句型的多样化，如长句，短句，疑问句，使用了“if，so, now, but”等词，整篇文章读起来朗朗上口。实际上，写文章就像串珠子，连接词就在于把一个个单词串起来。
捏鸡蛋作文点评【三】
Computer is important.
We must learn English well.
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捏鸡蛋作文点评【四】
So we must...
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捏鸡蛋作文点评【五】
表达不准确，详略不当
屠夫非常困窘急迫，恐怕前后一起受到狼的攻击。屠夫看见田野里有一个打麦场，打麦场的主人把柴草堆积在打麦场里，覆盖成小山（似的）。心里暗自高兴：“天助我也。哦哈哈”于是屠夫跑过去靠在柴草堆的下面，放下担子拿起屠刀。两只狼不敢上前，瞪着眼睛朝着屠夫：“小样吧，想把我给***了，你还嫩点，也不看看我在这山上混了多少年了。凭你这智商，想打败我，除非太阳从西边出来。”
一会儿，一只狼径直走开了，另一只狼像狗似的蹲坐在屠夫的前面。时间长了，那只狼的眼睛好像闭上了，神情悠闲得很。屠夫突然跳起：“这明明是摆着让我砍死你嘛，真是个低智商的狼。”于是用刀砍狼的脑袋，又连砍几刀把狼***死。屠夫刚想要走，转身看见柴草堆的后面，另一只狼正在柴草堆里打洞，打算要钻洞进去，来攻击屠夫的后面。身子已经钻进去了一半，只露出屁股和尾巴。屠夫从狼的后面砍断了狼的大腿，也把狼***死了。屠夫这才明白前面的那只狼假装睡觉，原来是用这种方式来诱惑敌方。屠夫不禁心里赞叹：“这狼，真是狠。”
狼也太狡猾了，可是一会儿两只狼都被***死了，禽兽的欺骗手段能有多少呢？只给人们增加笑料罢了。
捏鸡蛋作文点评【六】
老师先请了女生大力士霍欣然，只见她充满信心的走上讲。老师把鸡蛋给了她，只见她右手拿紧鸡蛋用劲的握着，挣的满脸通红，可是鸡蛋还是完好无损，霍欣然只好放弃走下了讲台。老师又请了顾飞然，只见他理直气壮的走上讲台，拿起鸡蛋就捏了起来，使出全身的力气。心想：“小小的.鸡蛋在我的手心里一定没问题”，可是他面红耳赤怎么也捏不动，只好走下了讲台。
同学们看了都说：“这鸡蛋是特制材料做的”。老师听了说：“鸡蛋是椭圆形，用手捏鸡蛋受力很均匀，所以不会破。同学们恍然大悟，原来捏鸡蛋看似简单的事情，还有这么大的学问。
