在这个暑假里,我看了一部电影,是方刚亮导演的《上学路上》。
故事发生在宁夏的西海固地区,这里被称为全国“贫困之冠”,本片的主人公王燕是一个懂事的小女孩,她的年纪和我差不多。她就生活在这样贫困的小山村。王燕的父亲在外地打工,妈妈在村子里做一些粗活 ,还有两个调皮的弟弟。学校放暑假了,老师宣布了下学期的学杂费是二十四元五角,可是王燕家交不起。但是她特别想上学,于是她决定自己去打工赚钱!王燕想尽了各种办法,买羊、喂羊,卖羊,卖鸡蛋,攒足了去山里采枸杞的路费,最终把学费凑够了,“我又可以上学了!”她高兴地喊着。在开学的那一天及时赶到了学校,交了学费。在电影里我还知道了在贫困地区,王燕和她的同学们得到了“希望工程”的帮助。
这幅漫画画的是一个小男孩满头大汗地喊道:“又要迟到了!”,而他的奶奶则拿着一顶小黄帽,在后面追道:“小黄帽!”,爷爷也气喘吁吁地拎着书包喊着:“书包!”,更搞笑的是,一只小花猫嘴里叼着一条红领巾,“喵喵”地跑在后面。
这幅漫画的确引人捧腹大笑,可给人们更多的,是欢笑过后的.深思。因为,这幅漫画就是我们生活中的真实写照和缩影。仔细想想,在我们生活中,不也有很多孩子跟画中的小男孩一样吗?他们是父母的“掌上明珠”,不是“饭来张口”,就是“衣来伸手”。那么父母呢?他们把孩子放在手心里怕冻着,含在口里怕化了,对孩子百依百顺,有求必应。他们怎会知道,这种爱会把孩子引入歧途?
一名娇生惯养的大学生,来到广州求学,因为没有父母、保姆帮忙料理生活,什么家务活都不会干,无法适应新的生活环境,最终跳楼自尽。这场悲剧难道还不足以说明溺爱的害处吗?这场悲剧的罪魁祸首正是父母,如果不是父母过度溺爱孩子,让孩子丧失了生活的自理能力,那个大学生又怎会走上绝路呢?
相比起国内的家长,澳大利亚的家长则显得明智得多。他们知道,娇惯了的孩子缺乏自制力和独立生活的能力,长大成人后难免吃亏,所以,他们在孩子打预防针时,把孩子“甩”在地上任其活动,而不是哭了就抱。当然,他们教育孩子的方式不止于此,但就凭他们不会溺爱孩子这一点,就值得许多父母学习。
父母啊,放开你们的双手吧,让孩子们自己学会“走路”,从哪里跌到,就从哪里重新站起来!
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
How to prevent the H7N9?
As is well known,the A flu is spreading throught our country. However, if we negnect it, the deadly H7N9 may cause more infectors,or even more deaths. So what is the most important is that we should take some effective measures to prevent it.They can be listed as follows.
Firstly,it is necessary for you to realize the Avian flu can be prevented if you develop good living habits. For example,you shouldn’t forget to wash your hands before meals.Besides,don’t spit everywhere and try to cover your mouth or nose with paper or hankerchiefs when you have to cough or sneeze.What’s more, remember to wear the mouth-cover if you have to go to the public places, such as the crowded cinemas,supermarkets, buses,where the A flu may spread easily.
Secondly,of course, taking exercise more often and taking good sleep to build your body are wise choices for you to reduce the risk of being infected.
Last but not the least, if you are unlucky to be infected with the slight flu cold, try to stay at home,and take some medicine. Do pay attention to your daily body temperature. If you have a high fever, go to the hospital without delay for further treatment. Make sure you are not expected to come back to school before the cold or flu is cured.
Only by doing like this can you prevent or defeat the A flu in the end.
这部电影的主人公王燕是个13岁的女孩。此电影讲的是王燕挣学杂费的故事。
散学之前,王老师说下学期的学杂费要24.8元。同学们的家长都嫌贵。想想,现在我们随便拿出几张纸币都已经超过了。比起他们,我们要幸福得多呀!在那重男轻女而又贫穷的时代,妈妈的钱只花费到两个弟弟的书包和学杂费上了。于是,她开始了她的赚钱行动最后,她终于挣到了24.8元。
我最欣赏的人是王燕。她吃苦耐劳、又守信,还很好学。更让人敬佩的是,她还很坚强。不管遇到什么挫折,她都不放弃。她是个不抛弃、不放弃的人。
这部电影告诉我们有梦想,就得去实现,王燕的梦想是挣到学杂费去上学。哲学家尼采曾说过:“人类因梦想而伟大。”有梦想,是不错的。但只有梦想,那是远远不够的。还要去实现。一个没有实现的梦想就不是个完整的梦想。
你有梦想吗?赶快会实现吧!
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