小小的我可喜欢旅游啦。记得,今年暑假我去海南岛旅游,在分界洲岛潜水,可开心啦。
船一靠近分界洲岛,我就急匆匆地跑下来,一看,哇!分界洲岛的风景真美呀,天那么蓝,海也那么蓝,海天连成一体。游客已经人山人海。我和爸爸急忙报名玩潜水,妈妈报名玩观光半潜艇。于是,我们就兵分两路。我和爸爸换上了连体潜水服,脚穿“鸭璞鞋”,排在了队伍的后面。过了十五分钟,三十分钟……差不多等了一个小时才轮到我们。小船先把我们带到了深海区。我真迫不及待地想马上跳下去潜水。这时,一个叔叔对我说:“别急。”他帮我装好了氧气瓶,戴好了面罩,说:“现在好了,你可以潜水了。”我就一下跳下水去。啊,海底这么美呀!花花绿绿的,原来是美丽的珊瑚。它们奇形怪状,千姿百态。几条美丽的小鱼,穿梭其间。一个个海星好像在唱歌。这时,一只水母游到了我的身边。我连忙伸手一抓。捏住了它。啊!好舒服啊!软软的,像捏着果冻一样。我生怕捏疼 了水母,就松开了手。……潜水的时间很快就过去了。我上了岸,说:“时间太短了,真想再玩一次呀!”
我旅游过的地方已经不少了,但是海南岛潜水的经历却给我留下了深刻而美好的印象,就像昨天才播放的电视一样。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
我是一枚普通的硬币。我有一段奇妙的旅游经历。
我是被收银员找给我的小主人的。小主人整天拿着我,好像我会长上腿自己跑了一样。
有一天,我被小主人含在嘴里,我正在想办法出去的时候,突然小主人笑了。我一下子跌近了黑暗的深渊里,开始了我与众不同的旅行。
我被卡在了食道里,一点也动弹不了。这时候,一些呕吐物冲着我涌了过来,好恶心啊!我真心想离开这里。可是我无法动弹。过了一会儿,我感觉小主人躺下了。又过了一会儿,我听见外面传来叽叽喳喳的声音,我感觉外面的人多了起来,可是我无法听清楚。只是隐约的听到有人说,排照片吧,检查检查。原来,因为我被卡在了食道里,小主人被送进了医院。又过了一会儿,我看到一根长长地管子,慢慢向我伸了过来。这是什么武器?我紧张的往后退。那根管子撞向了我,突然我开始往下掉了,我感觉到了天旋地转,我又掉进了一个黑漆漆的洞里。慢慢的,我终于看清楚了周围的环境了,我周围有一些不知名的气味。各种食物混合在一起。我被食物粘在一起,左右摇摆,根本停不下来。原来这里是胃。这里气味难闻。我可不想待在这里了。
我被食物碎渣包裹住了。过了漫长的几个小时,我被食物残渣挤出了小主人的身体。我又看到外面清新的世界了。
暑假的时候我们一家人去北京玩了5天。在这5天里我感觉去长城那一天是最有意义的!
那天我们一家人很早很早就起床准备要去长城。7;30我们就乘上小汽车出发了!坐着坐着很快就到了长城的山脚下,在山脚下我看见了长城很长很长,像一条巨大的龙,周围的树木非常茂盛,空气特别新鲜。
我们开始登长城了。长城的阶梯又高又矮,这些砖块都给人民们踩得低了很多,可见在长城来往的人是如此的多。很奇怪走到没多高的地放就有一间像屋子一样的房子,这时我问爸爸这是干什么用的,爸爸说;“这是古时候打敌人用的,这叫嘹望口,战士们藏在这里现察敌人的动静。”我想古时候的人民真是太聪明了,能造成这么雄伟,壮观的建筑物太了不起,我们新一代也要学习他们的智慧来把明天创造成更美丽。这时不知不觉已经登上了第5个嘹望口了,往山底下看,好高啊!风景也很美啊!登了这么高,虽然感觉挺累的,但是心里切非常高兴。往前面看还有很长很长的,我们没办法再往前登了,就开始下山了,真是有点舍不得离开这里。
这是我最难忘的旅游经历!
前天早上,班委会组织去阳江旅游。
到了阳江,一看天气,睛空万里,我们高兴地活蹦乱跳。这时导游告诉我们阳江一年中三百多天是晴天,这时我心中暗暗感叹,真是一个好地方啊!
准备吃午饭了,我们跑去饭店水产区看螃蟹,海星,章鱼还有许多不知名的海生动物。吃完午饭后,我们就去看房间。乘坐电梯的时候,一位服务员叔叔说:旅游经历一个房间一晚260元,每间里面有两张床。我想:旅游经历我和曾心越住一间,那就是两份,每人就要分担260/2=?(元),(180)+(180)=260(元),两份一样多。看到已经打扫完卫生的房间,心里真舒服!
我们到了海滩上,脱下鞋子,刚开始觉得沙子很刺脚,慢慢地,慢慢地,我的脚适应了细细的沙子,同时看到一路走来的一串串长长的小脚印,感觉融入了这片美丽的海滩,心里舒服极了!这时看见同学们一齐跑向海浪边上,有人大喊:旅游经历我来了,也有人大呼我在这儿呢,还有人特别搞怪:旅游经历海龙王我来看你啦!海水蓝蓝的,海浪清清的,沙子细细柔柔的,再加太阳,天空,一切加在一起,海天一色,就像一幅美丽的风景画!
在后面的时间,我和同学们一起踏浪,堆沙子,捡贝壳,照像不一会儿工夫,我们身上的衣服全湿透了。虽然我们依依不舍,但还是被家长们强迫带回了酒店。真想多玩一会儿呀!
我想,如果有机会,我会经常来这漂亮的闸坡旅游区。吸引我的是这儿的环境,还有保护得非常好的大自然,所有这些,让我懂得要更加珍惜我们的环境。我要从现在做起,爱护我们的生活环境和野生动植物才行啊!
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