I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
从前,有一个商人来到了苹果国。苹果国里不长其他植物,只长苹果。
所有的人和动物从早到晚地吃苹果:早餐是红苹果,午餐是绿苹果,晚餐是黄苹果。
苹果国的牛奶特别好喝,由于这里的奶牛从小吃苹果长大,所以牛奶里充满了浓郁的'苹果香,味道好极了。商人想,如果我带一头苹果国的奶牛回家,那么一定能把它的牛奶卖出好价钱。
商人花不少钱买下了一头奶牛,可是回国第一天就遇到了麻烦。苹果奶牛从来没见到过青草,它趁商人不注意,啃了一口,发现美味极了,于是便偷偷地啃了一肚皮的青草。
晚上商人来挤奶,发现牛奶的味道不对劲了。商人不停地盘问,奶牛终于承认自己吃了青草。
这可把商人气坏了,他咆哮道:“我花大价钱买你回来就是要你产苹果牛奶的,现在你的牛奶一股青草味,叫我卖给谁啊?!”
奶牛撅着嘴说:“我可不管你大价钱小价钱,反正我吃了那么多年苹果,早就吃腻了。现在就算你按着我的头,我也不吃苹果了!”
商人每天好说歹说,央求奶牛吃苹果,可奶牛就是闭紧嘴巴不张口。
商人想,要是这样下去,奶牛饿死了,我不是更亏吗? 商人想出了一个好办法,他开始天天给奶牛喂大把大把的青草,奶牛可高兴了,一个劲地猛吃。
终于有一天,商人说,现在差不多了。 商人把奶牛和满满一卡车的干草送回了苹果国。这下苹果国沸腾了,居然有一头吃青草的奶牛,而且它的牛奶散发着鲜美的青草味!人们蜂拥而来,抢着买牛奶。
聪明的商人最后还是赚到了很多很多钱。
自从外星人把四个吃过苹果的超人超狗带走后,人类开始疯狂的收集苹果,为此,还动用了核武器,经过这几下的折腾,地球已经面目全非,全球只剩下几个大国,终于停止了战争。
有苹果园的`农户在一瞬间暴富,苹果一路疯涨,一个小苹果就可以换一座海边别墅,比尔·盖茨已成为贫民户。
人类在疯狂的收集苹果时却都不知道第五个苹果在聂子超家中,聂子超一家人却不知道,他们一家人为了这个苹果很苦恼,他们想买了,却害怕这就是那个苹果;如果吃了,不是那个苹果就亏大了。再一次家庭会议上,集体决定:是第五个苹果的几率很小,把苹果买了。于是他把苹果卖给了富翁,自己有了一亿美元。
这个富人吃了苹果后
聂子超知道他卖的苹果是第五个苹果后,把自己骂的体无完肤,然后患上了
当上地球首领后,他开始了无休止的利用人民为他做事,人民过上了水深火热的生活,人民想反抗,可打不过他,只能忍声吞气的过日子。这还没有满足他的野心,他开始向月球进军——开发月球。
这件事情惊动了外星人,外星人知道有人吃了第五个苹果后,让地球之首和那四位超人超狗团圆了。
地球之首走后,全球欢呼了三天。从此,人们认真的改善了地球,地球又变成以前的样子,人们开始了和谐的生活!
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
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