今天我组织了一次家庭讨论会,主题是:坚持锻炼身体。爷爷,奶奶、爸爸,妈妈都参加了。
我是主持人,所以首先开了个头,我说:“今天,我们来讨论讨论,为什么要坚持锻炼身体,你是怎么做的。”
爷爷马上抢答:“锻炼身体是因为要让自己强壮、健康。如果你身体不好,总是生病,那就是你没有锻炼身体,所以,我们要坚持锻炼身体。”
我说:“好,不错,现在我们再来说一说,你是怎么坚持锻炼身体的,比如说我,每天都坚持跳绳、骑单车,现在我都瘦了一点,这就是坚持锻炼的成果。”
妈妈说:“我一点都不锻炼,但是我还是很瘦,因为我是节食减肥”。
奶奶说:“我每天坚持晚饭后出去散步、睡觉前跳100下、做体操二十分钟。”
爸爸说:“我天天坚持的是上网、抽烟,出门就坐车。”
晕~!爸爸原来每天都是这样“锻炼”的呀!
我说:“啊,还是爷爷来说说你是怎么锻炼的吧。”
爷爷说:“我坚持每天早睡早起,晚上睡觉前做二十分钟的健身操,晚饭后下楼去散步半点钟。”
我说:“大家都讲了自己锻炼身体的情况,我觉得爷爷做得最好,可以打100分,奶奶也行,打95分,妈妈以后不能节食减肥,给你一个88分,爸爸不锻炼身体,只能打58分。”
就这样,我们的家庭讨论会就结束了,我希望通过这次的家庭讨论会,大家都能到锻炼身体的重要性,做一个积极锻炼身体的人!
一个国家同样难代表世界。雅思是international的考试,不应将范围框的太局限。此外考官来自各个国家,过分使用一个国家的例子会引起他们的反感。
例:Many children in China like to play computer games for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.
只需小小改动便可成为成功范例。
因此,首先考生应了解,举例是一种常见的论述方式,特别在论述某一些比较抽象的话题的\'时候(比如文化类或跟艺术相关的话题)。但是,并不是每个段落都需要例证法,举例过多或过分牵强会影响文章的正式感,甚至给考官喋喋不休的感觉。
举例是为了更加形象地叙述事情。朗阁海外考试研究中心提醒考生们要注意以下原则:
虽然来源于身边社会,但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮,拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到,只需要把事件中某一个具体的你,我,他,变成是客观群体,比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式:
for example,/for instance,(后加句子)
Such as/ like (后加词组)
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次,在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称,为了加强客观性,应将人称写成第三人称。
改正:Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.(那些养宠物,例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感)
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究,并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉,用含糊的方法表示。
改正:There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. (大量证据表明。。。)
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家,尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正:Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.(在全世界,许多孩子在屏幕前待太久,导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式:around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
太多专业数据会给人捏造的痕迹,缺乏真实性。考官会质疑数据的出处。
例:A survey indicates that the number of people smoking has increased to as high as 65 percent in China.(一项调查显示。。。)
"65%"让文章看起来有些假,有捏造的嫌疑。"A survey"又不够具有代表性。
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