带批注的成长作文【一】
人们都说父爱如山，但那一次，我深深地体会到了父亲细致的爱。——题记
自从进入初中，就大考小考不断，而我因为前几次考试名列前茅，就开始有些沾沾自喜，对待学习再无从前的认真了。于是之后的一次考试，我的成绩一落千丈，我一下子掉进了一个无尽的深渊里，无法自拔。
当时妈妈听到了这个消息，只是不住的叹气，可是爸爸的反映却很强烈，他气得摔门而出。我躲在自己的房间里哭泣，心里懊悔不已，同时心里也在为爸爸的过激行为而生气。
就在妈妈和我一起分析原因的时候，爸爸一直没有回家，那时的我，固执地认为他不是我的亲爸爸，我不想要这样的爸爸。几天之后，爸爸风尘仆仆地回来了，手里多了一个复读机。
后来我听妈妈说，爸爸本来去了新乡，只是因为我的英语学的不好，想去买一个复读机回来，在新乡没有合适的，便转去了郑州，这样的麻烦，只是为了给我买一个质量好的复读机。那一刻，我追悔莫及，原来爸爸出去几天，都是为了我，我后悔没有好好学习，后悔不该这样埋怨爸爸……那一刻，我心里毫无恨意，有的只是无尽的感动。
之后的几天，爸爸一改往日大大咧咧、不拘小节的性格，开始帮我分析错题原因，制定学习计划，告诉我以后要怎么做。爸爸这时做什么都十分细心、无微不至，他的爱在那时也毫无保留地体现出来。从此以后，我又恢复了以往的认真，开始一心一意地对待学习，因为我不能辜负爸爸妈妈的苦心。
现在的爸爸，还和以前一样，懒懒散散，不拘小节，并很少表达他对我的爱。但爸爸那细致入微的爱，无须言表，尤在我心。
批注：这是一篇写人叙事的散文，情感真挚，人物形象突出，活灵活现。采用了顺叙，叙事条理，娓娓道来。在一次不经意间，体会到了父爱的无微不至。过渡自然，先后有序。
带批注的成长作文【二】
In the morning, the lake under the mountain is like a big mirror. The fish in the lake have a good time.
早晨，人们也出来活动了。四个小孩在进行跑步比赛，他们跑了一圈又一圈，累得汗水直流，他们想：不管怎么样，一定要跑到终点。老人们在打太极拳，一位老爷爷对着他前面的`老爷爷说：“加油！”大哥哥们又唱又跳的，真热闹呀！
In the morning, people came out to have activities. Four children are running race, they run circle after circle, tired sweat, they think: no matter what, must run to the end. The old people are playing Taijiquan. An old man says to the old man in front of him, "come on!" Big brother is singing and dancing. It's so lively!
大家玩得好开心！
Have a good time!
带批注的成长作文【三】
To: Andy ~ From: Tricia
Dear Andy,
Now, I know we have not gotten to really know each other all that long and there is a little bit of an age difference between us, but I do really like you. You are a very special guy. There is so much about you I see that I know most girls don't see. They are all looking at you for your body. But Honey, I am telling you, that is not what I am doing. There is so much more to you than that. I have liked you for a very long time now but just never had the guts to say it to you. Well, that has all changed now. I am going all out and I am going to say it all. I really care a lot about you, and I would like to be a lot more then just friends. You mean so much to me. I mean, just seeing your cute little smile when I am having a bad day just makes the day seem not too dim. Or just to have you give me a hug makes me all warm and tingly inside. Just to see your smiling face brightens my darkest day. So, Hon, what do you say, would you like to give it a go?
Love Always,
Whinny
To：安迪：特里西娅
亲爱的安迪，
现在，我知道我们还没有真正了解对方，长期的，有我们的年龄相差一点点，但我真的很喜欢你。你是一个很特别的家伙。有这么多的了解你，我知道，我知道大多数女孩没有看到。他们都在看着你，你的身体。但是，亲爱的，我告诉你，那不是我在做什么。有这么多，你比。我也很喜欢你很长一段时间，但现在只是从来没有胆量说给你。好了，现在一切都改变了。我全力以赴，我会说这一切。我真的很在乎了很多关于你，我想了很多只是朋友。你的意思是我这么多。我的意思是，只看到你可爱的笑容时，我有一个糟糕的一天，只是让这一天似乎不是太暗。或者只是你给我一个拥抱，让我所有的热情和刺痛感里面。刚看到你的笑脸，照亮了我最黑暗的一天。因此，汉，你说什么，你想给它一个去?
永远爱你，
萧萧
