今天我要向大家推荐一种商品,一种富含着大量维生素、不加香精和防腐剂的商品——桑果汁。
每一罐桑果汁都是用玻璃瓶装着的,每瓶大约重500g,规格为260ml。桑果汁的颜色紫得发黑,就像熟透了的紫葡萄。如果滴一滴桑果汁到衣服上,要费很大功夫才能洗干净呢!
桑果汁不但颜色人,而且味道更是妙不可言。如果你大口大口地喝是无法品尝出它那酸甜可口的味道,只有慢慢地抿,才能品尝出它的真正的甜味和香味。
桑果汁有着大量的营养,加了水、桑果原汁、白砂糖、食品添加剂(柠檬酸),虽然加了柠檬酸,但总体来说桑果汁依旧是一种营养丰富的果汁。
桑果汁的能量为210kj,蛋白质为0g,脂肪为0g,碳水化合物为11g,钠为30mg,营养成分非常的高,从这里也可以证明桑果汁营养丰富。
一箱桑果汁有8瓶,每一瓶的盖子上都包有一层纸,使瓶子里不漏气,确保健康安全。只有撕开纸,打开瓶盖,才能品尝到美味的桑果汁。
喝一瓶有营养的桑果汁,相当于吃了一顿有营养的饭菜。现在,桑果汁已成为我每天必不可少的东西。只要一放学,我就会打开冰箱,轻轻松松地将一瓶桑果汁喝得干干净净的,一滴也不剩下。你们听了我的介绍,也爱喝桑果汁了吗?
今天妈妈让我模拟一次推销员。我想如果我是推销员,我就会到第二实验小学推销我的卓凡牌超级水笔。
在全校的集会上,我鼓起勇气推销产品。
“校长,老师,小朋友们,大家好!我是卓凡牌超级水笔的推销员。我今天给大家带来水笔界百里挑一的神奇水笔——卓凡牌超级水笔。
这是我的名片和产品获奖证书,请校长过目。我们的产品经过国家有关部门的质量检查,合格率百分之百,还被评为优质产品呢!
我们先来看一下,这是一支超长超大笔芯的中性笔,一支笔芯就等于你们平时写的水笔的四倍,它书写流畅,不会出现断断续续、断水等不良现象。它笔芯的超大容量使寿命大大延长,节约了成本,降低了价钱,更实惠。
最吸引人的是这种水笔图案精美,十分受小朋友欢迎。看,这是为男生们准备的奥特曼系列水笔,迪迦奥特曼正神气地向我们招手呢!女生们也别着急,为你们设计的水笔图案更丰富。这支印有小花猫的水笔全身粉红,笔帽上还系着粉色的蝴蝶结呢!小熊温尼水笔也不赖,你们看,它正津津有味地吃着蜂皇浆呢!旁边还有一只可爱的蜜蜂在向小熊做鬼脸呢!小矮人和白雪公主系列的笔就更美了,相信女孩子一定会喜欢。再看看这支奇怪图案的卡通水笔吧,画了几个滑稽可笑的猪头,原来是“猪之歌”系列的水笔呀!
怎么样,听了我的介绍,你们爱上我们的产品了吗?
这种水笔一个包装三支,如果你们现在购买,还可以获得免费赠送的三支大号笔芯,十分优惠哦!
亲爱的校长、老师、小朋友们,心动不如行动,如果团体购买三百支以上,今天促销价还可以打五折呢!这样的机会不多,快快来抢购吧!”
怎么样,我的推销水平还不错吧,您也来买一支如何?
大家好!我是一位推销员,接下来我要给大家推销一种物品——台灯。
今天我给大家推销一种产品:台灯。这台台灯非常的新颖,从外观看,非常好看,下面是一个托盘,上面是一盏灯。这样来讲:就是给这盏灯穿上了一层厚厚的棉袄。下面还有一盏小灯,它叫做“夜间灯”,晚上的时候开启它就很漂亮,是蓝色的,画着一个小宠物,非常可爱!它的前面,还有两个按钮:一个是管那个大灯的、一个是管那个小灯的。
打开大灯,你会情不自禁的叫道:“哇塞!真亮啊!而且还不刺眼睛呢!告诉你吧,这是护眼灯,绝对不会给你带来近视。
打开小灯,你还是会叫道:“哇塞!好美丽啊,真可爱!”还是让我来告诉你吧,这是晚上时许开的灯,很亮!这回你知道了这台灯的好处了吧?
介绍完这盏灯,你知道了一些它的样子和好处了吧?你觉得怎么样呢?如果有人想买,赶紧来抢购,数量有限哦!再见。
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
To see a world in a grain of sand,
And a heaven in a wild flower,
Hold infinity in the palm of your hand,
And eternity in an hour.
一沙一世界,
一花一天堂,
手中即无限,
永恒亦短暂。
以前,冰箱常见的有长方形、正方形等,不过如果你现在再去一趟商场,还可以发现很多可爱的造型:小熊形、超人形……听店主介绍,这些新造型很受年轻人的欢迎。
冰箱的颜色虽然没有彩虹那样绚烂、多姿多彩;也没有花朵那样五颜六色;但冰箱有一种朴素之美。不过现在也有彩色的冰箱了(赤、橙、黄、绿、青、蓝、紫等。
冰箱可以存放食品。它一般分为两层,第一层是冷藏室,专放水果、蔬菜等……第二层是冷冻室,可以放生的荤菜,如鱼、肉,海鲜等,也可以放饮料……冰箱不仅可以存放食品,还可以存放化妆品。听说,有些爱美的女性把化妆品存放在冰箱里。据说,这样保存的化妆品对皮肤更有效。
冰箱为我们带来了什么便利呢?请认真、仔细地阅读下文哦!
我们可以把买来的食品放在冰箱里,那样就不用担心放在外面的食物因变质,而不能食用了。冰箱不止给我们带来了这么一点便利,还有呢?
侧耳聆听:
你是否听见了有冰箱的家庭,孩子们感叹声呢?
他们感叹冰箱能让冰淇淋保持冰凉;
在自己吃时,感到全身凉爽。
……
你再听听,没冰箱家庭中孩子们的烦恼?
他们正在想:棒冰买回来,必须在当天吃完。
买得太多,怕吃不完而融化、浪费。
买得太少,又怕不过瘾。
……
这就是冰箱带给我们生活中的便利……
冰箱只是暂时存放物品的地方,可不是万无一失的“保险柜”哦!长期把食品放在冰箱里,也会变质的,所以要尽快把买来的东西食用。天气热了,冰箱使用的次数逐渐增高。“乒乒乓乓”又是哪一户人家在用冰箱啊?经常打开冰箱的门,这样既浪费电,又影响冰箱的使用寿命。
冰箱是人类生活中的好帮手,少了它,人类一定会多出许多烦恼与浪费!
今天,老师让我们写一篇说明文,选择一种物品介绍给大家,开始,我不知道介绍什么,后来,我想了想,就介绍我们才学过的吸热玻璃吧:
冬天冷来不要紧,夏天热来不着急,要想舒服过四季,新型玻璃帮助你。
大家好,我是一位小小推销员,今天,我要向大家推荐一种让你舒舒服服过四季的产品,它的名字就叫“吸热玻璃”,它的特点是吸热。炎热的夏天到了,酷暑的天气肯定使你受不了,不用着急,只要装上这种玻璃,它就可以帮你把室内的热空气吸收起来,排到室外去,使室内又凉爽又舒服,比室外强多了。
你也许会想,那它把强烈的阳光挡在了外面,到了冬天怎么办啊?没事的,吸热玻璃会随着天气的变化而来调节室内的温度,到了冬天,吸热玻璃自然会把冷空气阻挡在外面,把太阳散发出的热量传送到室内,使室内保持着温暖。
吸热玻璃能让家里夏凉冬暖,它是一种非常好的新型材料!听了我的介绍,你有没有心动呢?心动不如行动,朋友们,赶快使用这种新型吸热玻璃吧!
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