【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
不久前爆发的“韩白骂战”闹得沸沸扬扬,在这里,我不谈事件根源,也不论孰是孰非。我不懂文学,当然也就不会争论什么文学不文学的,(这事儿恐怕不是文学争论那么简单咯)只说说从中看到的几个社会现象。
一个孩子,不忍看到蝴蝶在蛹中痛苦挣扎,便剪开蛹壳。不想,这只蝴蝶身躯臃肿,双翅干瘪,根本飞不起来,不久便死去。
蝴蝶必须在痛苦中挣扎,直至双翅强壮,方可破蛹高飞。人类不适当的爱,反成埋葬它的坟墓。蝴蝶如此,青少年又何尝不是这样?家长的溺爱,也恰似一把残酷的剪刀,只扼***孩子,使他们永远无法腾飞。正如著名的诗人汪国真所言:“怕只怕,爱也是一种伤害。”溺爱成伤,历史上不乏先例。仲永5岁能诗,聪颖超群,却在父母及众人的赞扬和宠爱之下,最终“泯然众人矣”;赵武灵王对儿子放纵娇惯,最终被不孝之子活活饿死;晋武帝纵宠儿子奢侈享受,其子继位后治国无方,西晋王朝走向亡。无论是仲永之“伤”,还是赵武灵王的“悲”或西晋王朝的“衰”,都是宠爱的恶果。“宠”,是宝盖下面的一条龙,这龙是无法腾飞的龙啊!
相反,对孩子严格要求,不但不会对孩子造成伤害,还有利于孩子的成长。王羲之年幼时,他的父亲便教他习字,要求甚严,结果王羲之终成百代书驿;曾国藩严整家规,教子有方,曾氏家族赫赫名扬;巴顿的父亲要求他每早苦读,造就了一位叱咤风云的人物……须知这些家长并非不爱孩子,只因他们清楚,宠溺不是正确的爱,纵宠只会带来伤害。
可悲的是,当今的某些父母却不明白这个道理。孩子矫揉造作,说这是天真可爱;孩子挥霍浪费,说他将来准挣大钱;孩子口出狂言,说胸有大志;孩子要摘月亮,这些父母就可以去找梯子。殊不知,这样做只会使孩子独毒骄娇,自由放任,不懂长幼尊卑,缺乏集体观念。如此爱出来的“小皇帝”,将来只怕是误已、误家、误国的“昏君”!
家长爱孩子本无可非议。但这爱,不应是牢笼,不应是蜜罐,不应是保险箱,只应是孩子放纵时家长严厉的目光,孩子懒惰时家长频频的叮嘱,孩子犯错时家长谆谆的教诲。……因为只有这样,蛹中的蝴蝶才能飞起,稚气的少年才能成长;只这样,爱才不是一种伤害。
世界上有很多种受,但是有一种爱是无私的,那就是父母对孩子的爱,爱可以帮助孩子健康的成长,但溺爱却阻止他们成长。
孩子是父母的宝贝,爱孩子是父母的本能,我们中国的家庭教育中,中国父母对孩子的溺爱程度当仁不让地名列前茅。溺爱,是人性一种畸形心理,是一副枷锁,是一个圈套,是一条绳,它是一种危险的暗号。
在我们中国的家庭中,每个家长都很宠爱自己的孩子,孩子真是生在蜜罐里,长在蜜罐里。爱孩子是父母的天性,然而对孩子爱过了头,陷入了溺爱,便是害了孩子,这是父母的失职。长辈们总是很心疼孙子会受苦,总是不肯让孩子学会在地上走,摔跟头。孙子孙女都被宠坏了,他们衣来伸手,饭来张口。孩子完全不会做家务,孩子完全不做任何事。你瞧,就连学校的登山比赛,也有父母跟着,租来一个轿子抬着孩子上山,生怕孩子有什么闪失,处处苛护。这样下去,孩子怎么才能长大呀!到孩子成年之后,就很容易滑向犯罪的边缘。
然而并不是每一个家长都象前面的家长那样,他们却懂得怎么来教育孩子,让孩子从小养成自己动手的习惯,孩子跌倒了,不去扶,让他们自己站起来,面对困难自己动脑解决。这就培养了他们的判断力与分析能力及应变能力。即使父母不在身边,他们也会做得更好、一步一步地走向成功,成为社会的栋梁之才。
望子成龙,望女成凤是许多家庭父母的愿望。但是要想实现这些愿望,就不能过分的溺爱,年青的家长们,尊敬的长辈们,如果您想把你的孩子培养成一个有用的人才,一个身体健康、心灵美好的人,那请听我一句忠告吧:请停止你对孩子的溺爱!
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