英语作文请外教修改演讲稿【一】
Dear Mr Pan:
It has been a long time since I wrote the last letter. Nowdays, people write letters less and less, instead, they make a call or send a SMS. However, it is still a good way for us to communicate with each other by sending a letter.
It's my honour to get the chance to write to you. "Approachable" is my first impression of you, because you always keeps smiling. Students may fear the teachers that are serious both in and out of class. Smile makes a teacher popular with his students, you are a teacher of this very kind.
You always arrive at the classroom ahead of any of the students, from which we could imply that you are a diligent man with regular habit. Before the class, you like to talk to us, at this very time, you are more a friend than a teacher. To be honest, I was surprised in the first class when I learned a teacher at your age could speak English in such a fluent way.(I didn't mean you are old, you're young at heart. Moreover, you know well how to keep your class attractive. You've got such an active mind that you can keep talking during the whole class without a pause. I always appreciated your ideas and enjoyed listening to you. In your class, I learned not only the writing skills but also the presentation skills as well as much knowledge of other areas. Thanks for your excellent teaching.
I've got some suggestions for you. It seems that we students have got few chances to participate in discussion during the class time. Most of the time, we are listening. Seldom did we express our own ideas. I suggest that teachers should interact with students more frequently in the class. Besides, I'd like to practice writing more, so would you please leave us more assignments?
Happy new year.
With every good wish.
Yours sincerely
Dali Wang
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英语作文请外教修改演讲稿【二】
当英语老师告诉我们下一节英语课是外国老师教我们英语，而且是两个星期才有一次。真难得呀，两个星期才有一次啊！可想想又让人觉得兴奋！！
“铃、铃、铃。”上课了，外教老师刚进门，原本热闹非凡的教室立即变得鸦雀无声。外教老师很风趣，老师和我们先互相做自我介绍。轮到邵耀萱说了，她说：“I am Shao Yao Xuan。”老师故意把她的名字说成了“Shao 、Shao 、Shao ”他那语调特别搞笑。顿时，同学们哈哈大笑起来。
到我了，我说：“I am Tina。”这时，老师张开双臂，我也跟着张开双臂。显然我误解了他的意思。他忽然把我抱了起来，并在我的右脸上猛亲了一下，我被刚才的`情景吓了一跳，原来老师刚才的举动是对我的友好。他把我轻轻地放下来，并给我一块糖，我连忙对老师说“Thank You”。外教老师还和我们做了许多有趣的游戏，可惜的是我们听不懂老师讲的话，为了让我们长大后能够走出国门，学到更多的知识，我们一定要好好学习英语。
我喜欢这位幽墨风趣的外教老师！
英语作文请外教修改演讲稿【三】
A man walking in the night slipped from a rock. Afraid that he would fall down thousands of feet, because he knew that place was a very deep valley, he took hold of a branch that was hanging over the rock. In the night all he couls see was a bottomless abyss. He shouted, his own shout reflected back--there was nobody to hear.
You can imagine that man and his whole night of scare. Every moment there was death, his hands were becoming cold, he was losing his gripand as the sun came out he looked down and he laughed. There was no abyss. Just six inches down there was a rock. He could have rested the whole night, slept well---the rock was big enough---but the whole night was a nightmare.
Fear is only six inches deep. Now it is up to you whether you want to go on cling to the branch and turn your life into a nightmare, or whether you would love to leave the branch and stand on your feet.
There is nothing to fear.
英语作文请外教修改演讲稿【四】
The Father and His Son
Father had a family of sons who were perpetually quarrelling among themselves. When he failed to heal their disputes by his exhortations, he determined to give them a practical illustration of the evils of disunion; and for this purpose he one day told them to bring him a bundle of sticks. When they had done so, he placed the faggot into the hands of each of them in succession, and ordered them to break it in pieces. They each tried with all their strength, and were not able to do it.
英语作文请外教修改演讲稿【五】
要准确规范，忌前后不一
有一指令性通知的初稿，提出了三点要求：
1.明晰责任、齐抓共管。2.分流管理、分级负责;3.查改并举，重在治理。
这段中，第一点、第二点的前半句用的都是顿号，而第三点前半句用的却是逗号，前后不一致。还有，第一点的结尾用的是句号，而第二点的结尾用的却是分号，也是前后不一致。这些都应该统一起来，才显得对称。公文的标点符号使用不能马虎，要注意顿号、逗号、分号、句号等点号表示的是不同层次的停顿，使用得当，句子就能形成起伏均匀的节奏感。后来，这段修改为：
1.明晰责任，齐抓共管。2.分流管理，分级负责。3.查改并举，重在治理。
这样，通过标点的规范使用，可以表明"三点要求"相互之间的平等、平行关系。
英语作文请外教修改演讲稿【六】
要全面考虑，忌失之于偏
有一《关于命名表彰上海市双拥模范区县和爱国拥军模范街道(乡镇的决定》初稿，在决定命名16个区县为"上海市双拥模范区县"、146个街道(乡镇为"上海市爱国拥军模范街道(乡镇"后提出：
希望上述受到表彰的.区县和街道(乡镇再接再厉，不断创新，继续努力，开拓进取，进一步做好双拥工作，进一步巩固和发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶。
这段中，只是要求受到表彰的区县、街道(乡镇"进一步巩固和发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶"是不够的，本市各单位和驻沪各部队都要这样做。同时，表彰性的《决定》最后写"希望"时，希望的对象一般包括两个：一个是受到表彰的单位(个人，希望他们再接再厉，另一个是其他单位(个人，希望他们向受到表彰的单位(个人学习。公文中，特别是提出的希望和要求，要全面考虑，兼顾各方，反映出整体思维。
后来，这段修改为：
希望上述被命名的区县和街道(乡镇再接再厉，不断进取，争取双拥工作再上新台阶。
并在其后补充了一段：
希望全市各级党政组织和驻沪各部队向上述被命名的区县和街道(乡镇学习，进一步做好双拥工作，巩固发展军政军民团结的大好局面，推动上海双拥工作再上新台阶。
这样，"希望"的对象比较周全，所提的要求也比较切合实际。
英语作文请外教修改演讲稿【七】
Dear Mr.Huang,
We have never seen for one year, I miss you very much.It is say that you did an operation in September.How are you now? I hope that you have recovered.
Thank you for your enlightening in the important time of my life.I won't forget your edification. Iam in the XX University now.It locate in the beautiful city Hangzhou. I invite you to have a journey to Hangzhou next summer if you have time then.My major is English,but I always feel shamed to speak and show in English in the class.I would change the actuality gradually.Now I like sports very much especially basketball.You would see a healthy and stronge David next time.The life in the university is colorful.I like it.And I shall study hard.
The new year is on the way, I pray the God to bless you to be happy and healthy in the coming year.And give my best regards to your families. Happy New Year!
Yours faithfully, David
28th Dec
