1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
假期里,我怀着无比激动的心情,去参观久闻大名的福建漳州土楼。车子行驶在变弯弯曲曲的盘山路上,两边山峦重重,水道弯弯,绿树成荫,鲜花簇簇。一路上,随处可见丰收的香蕉林。路真长啊,足足开了三个小时,我急切盼望快点到达土楼。
福建省漳州南靖土楼,产生于宋元时期,以历史悠久、数量众多、规模宏大、造型奇异、风格独特而闻名于世,被誉为“神话般的山区建筑。”
我怀着无比的好奇心下了车,当我看到眼前的一群群建筑物,像天上掉下的飞碟,地上长出的蘑菇,顿时,我惊呆了,过了一会儿,这才明白,这就是土楼。它是由一个方形,一个椭圆形,三个圆形,五座伟大的土楼组合而成,看上去气势磅礴,令人震撼,被称作“四菜一汤”。从外面看,它是由黄土,黑瓦彻成,构造简单又奇特,听导游说,一幢土楼由一个家族住在一起......我们参观完此处便继续游玩。我们来到了一座可以与比萨斜塔比较的土楼,它就是号称“东歪西倒楼”的裕昌楼。这幢土楼的外面是一条清澈的小溪,裕昌楼依山而建,小路上,一块块光滑的小鹅卵石铺在小路上,色彩明亮的石阶小径掩映在果树的绿荫之中,穿伸在错落有致的楼房之间。
进入土楼,我发现,从第三层开始木柱便开始有规律地从左向右倾斜,从第四层开始反方向倾斜,但是既便如此,从一楼到顶楼,最底层的木柱和顶层的木柱,始终保持在一条直线上,真是太奇妙了,让我一饱眼福。
参观完土楼,我的心久久不能平静,我赞叹古代人民的智慧,土楼是中华文明的一颗明珠,是中华古建筑的一朵奇葩,被列为世界文化遗产。
“十一”黄金周,爸爸妈妈开车带我去了美丽的旅游圣地---泰宁。
我们乘坐游船去游览大金湖。那里的水碧绿碧绿的,清澈见底,偶尔也能发现一些小鱼小虾在水中嬉戏。
我们乘着游船去了第一景点—野趣园。那里最好玩的就是荡秋千,我让妈妈把秋千荡的老高老高,真刺激!
随后去了《三国演义》里最著名的甘露寺。甘露寺是用一根柱子撑起来的\',那根柱子名叫如意柱,到达如意柱的台阶共有一百零一级。爸爸说:“上去的时候要抱抱如意柱。”我第一个冲上去,抱了如意柱,又飞快地登上甘露寺。
第三个景点是在陆地上斜着的一线天——陆地斜线天。那里又惊险又刺激,我们一个个小心翼翼的低着头、弯着身子、扶着岩石,艰难的走着。通过了陆地斜线天,又去了十里平湖。
愉快的金湖之旅结束了,我很开心,下次我还想去那里玩。
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成\"总—分—总\"结构
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