深圳中考英语作文改卷很严格【一】
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
深圳中考英语作文改卷很严格【二】
李老师上课可很生动。记得在上第二十四课《香港，璀璨的明珠》这一课的时候，她说：“现在，我是导游，你们就是游客。”香港到了，李老师又说：“现在请游客们自由地去看看香港的各个地方，再回来讨论讨论。”……那一堂课，同学们都听得很入神，仿佛身临其境一般。老师提问的时候都很活跃，把气氛推到了最高潮。
李老师也很尽责。记得上学期快要集体舞比赛的'时候，李老师快要生宝宝了，但她仍然挺着大肚子带同学们练跳舞。在她的努力下，我们班在集体舞比赛中得了第一名。
李老师还很细心。有一天早上，妈妈拿来了羽绒衣和加绒的裤子给我穿，对我说：“今天天气很冷，要多穿点。”我惊讶地说：“不会呀，昨天还很热呢。”妈妈见我不相信，便对我说：“昨天晚上李老师发短信来了，说今天的气温只有三四度。多亏李老师提醒我，要不然我都不知道今天的气温。”李老师还每个星期都发短信提醒我们剪指甲，让我们养成一个良好的卫生习惯。
李老师不仅像一位班主任严格要求我们，更像一位妈妈时刻关心我们，疼爱我们。
深圳中考英语作文改卷很严格【三】
周末，我写完作业准备到开电视机看电视，可您去说：学习要靠自己努力，要控制好自己，种瓜得瓜，种豆得豆。我听了后，怎么也不敢看电视了。就拿出语文书来读。您又说：只读语文不读英语啊！读个句子来听听呗。我咿咿呀呀读得乱七八糟。爸爸就说：英语不但要会写，还要会读。我不耐烦地叫姐姐教我读，就因为不集中精力，被姐姐批评了一顿。唉！好烦呐！
原本我以为下午就能好好出去玩，但有被爸爸阻止了。就说：看你那电子琴灰尘仆仆的，如果你不学，我可要把它当废品卖了呀！听了您的话，我紧锁眉头、心事重重地学起来，就因为有些音调看不懂，所以学起来有些吃力。别人的周末都是自由、快乐的，而我的周末去沉积在这些书本中。
爸爸，您是我人生当中一盏指路明灯，但有时候您过于严格，使我压力很大，希望您周末让我放松一下吧！我已经长大，请不要把我关在书本中，让我失去自由。
深圳中考英语作文改卷很严格【四】
导入：
第1段：Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文：
第2段：Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段：However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论：
第4段：Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
深圳中考英语作文改卷很严格【五】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文：
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后：
The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
