玉林市中考英语作文评分【一】
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第1段：提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句，承上启下
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第2段：First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论：
第3段：In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段，构成"总—分—总"结构
玉林市中考英语作文评分【二】
青少年是时代的中流砥柱，是国家的希望与未来，为纪念五四运动100周年，我校决定组织学生参观吉林省博物院，让我们，了解吉林的历史和丰富多彩的传统化，激发热爱家乡，保护传统文化之情。
今天，我们怀揣着对中国历史文化和民族文化的无比崇敬之情，去参观了吉林省博物馆。在参观的过程中，我们深深地为中华民族的优秀文化所感染，我为自己身为一个中国人，自己的祖国有着如此丰富的历史文化和民族文化而感到自豪。
《白山松水的记忆——吉林省历史文化陈列》是反应吉林地域历史文化的一部大型通史陈列。展览分为文明曙光，汉唐古韵，松漠雄风，明清华章，近代吉林等五个部分，生动地展示了自有人类活动以来，吉林省的沧桑历史与变迁，反映了边疆各族人民不断的交流融合，共同创造中华民族文化的恢宏历史进程。
巍峨的长白山，孕育生命的三江之源，肥沃的松嫩平原边疆各民族共同生活的美丽家园。在这里，各族儿女携手谱写着中华民族大融合的历史画卷。王府屯仙人洞安图人榆树人为您徐徐拉开了吉林的历史帷幕，点燃了吉林大地上的生命之火，先民们依江河而居，逐水草而牧，捕鱼猎而食。众多的遗址，遗迹，散落在江河湖泊，山地草原。如今，历史的.沧桑依然留在了那些古老的断壁墙垣、碑碣石刻和墓陵大道、更有数不尽的历史谜底和文物瑰宝，等待着我们去探索，去发现。
吉林，正是有着一帧帧的记忆，描绘出了一副华夏各族人民共同创造中华文明的历史长卷。白山松水的记忆，星罗棋布的古遗迹，历史悠久的文物……沉淀经年而有勃勃生机，依拖着岁月的沧桑，开拓着辉煌的明天。
通过这次参观，我了解了更多的中华民族传统文化和革命文化，加深了自己的爱国情怀，在今后的学习，工作和生活中，我会努力继承中华民族优秀传统，发扬革命先烈不怕苦，不怕牺牲的精神，从身边小事做起，做一名合格的中国公民，不断完善自己，实现自己的人生价值。
玉林市中考英语作文评分【三】
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第1段：提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
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第2段：Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论：
第3段：These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
玉林市中考英语作文评分【四】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文：
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
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The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
玉林市中考英语作文评分【五】
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第1段：Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
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第2段：There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
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第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
