本文格式正确,意思表述完整,行文流畅自然。作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用,还使用了以‘which,’引导的非限定性定语从句,从而使文章层次分明,富于变化,不愧为考场佳作。
复旦附中语文特级教师黄玉峰说,有的阅卷老师在打分时也是顾虑重重,打低了或打高了,都生怕复评人认为自己的水平不够,连作文的好坏也看不出,所以一般都是给个中间分数,高考作文指导《高考作文判分为何跌宕不定》。
10多万份作文,要求100多名老师在7天里判完卷,工作量很大,极个别作文被看走眼,也在情理之中。上师大附中语文特级教师彭世强说,为了适合应试的功利,有的老师就会传授一些所谓的 高考作文“技巧”,比如要求考生开头与结尾一定要写得精彩,最好多用排比句,多用名人警句等。如此教法,简直是把有血有肉的作文,变成了纯粹的'技巧性机械训练。
种子向往光与热,所以愿意奋力挣扎,冲破黑暗的桎酷;新芽爱恋雨与露,所以愿意经受风尘侵扰,舒展叶片;绿叶眷恋于树木,所以愿意陪伴其度过一载春夏秋冬,一轮雨晴雪雾,当它们被问为何如此,不过说一句,我向往,我爱,所以我愿意。
西边山脚的鸟儿向往东边天际的彩云,所以不顾饥寒风雨,毅然而上。纵使受伤,纵使落泪,在苍穹之下也无怨无悔。
他便是那样的鸟儿,费尽一生飞往高处。谈迁自幼家境贫寒,但其人穷志不穷。及近而立之年,他展开了国史的修订工作。探民间,访古迹,查典籍。前进之路风雨兼程。二十七轮四季镌刻了白纸黑字,也染白了鬓角的霜花。他以为他已经看到了璀璨的彩云,却又有狂风骤雨将其拉下巨著被偷走了。多年心血付诸东流水,命运的折磨让其快要倒下,但他还向往着那一天啊。于是又是八年,从头再来,终成《国榷》。
因为向往,所以愿意忍受劫难,惟心中之志引导人生之路。而这之中的苦难,便也甘之如饴。
儿子深爱着父亲,纵是无言也能静静陪伴,不须言语与呼号,物质与欣喜,便也有幸福。
雅士林逋时常执一双木桨,乘一叶扁舟游于西湖之上。隔绝了金钱与物欲,喧闹与繁华,惟有注月光为酒,化绿水为诗句,以梅为妻,以鹤为子。世人当然不解,远离舒适的日子,来这里过清贫的日子图什么?而他却说:吾志之所适也,非室家也,非功名富贵也。只觉青山绿水与我情相宜。他爱这空山新雨,爱这碧波浅荡,便愿意抛弃世俗与浮尘,放浪形骸于天地间。
因为热爱,所以愿意趋于宁静,即使没有戏台上的一颦一笑,没有炊烟之下的欢声笑语,自然也能给其慰藉。
反观如今社会,所愿真源于所向、所爱吗?利欲熏心、铜臭扰人,人们多已忘了为何在这世上;竞争激烈,身不由己,还有谁能不顾他人言语凭内心做出选择?向往便攀登吧,无畏险阻;爱便追求吧,不需证明。
那么,向心之所向,爱心之所爱,所以呢?
Some fish are forced to leave polluted water and are flying in the sky. But unfortunately, air is also so polluted that they have to wear masks. Each of them is crying, “Where is my home?” What a terrible sight!
Mankind has brought so much pollution. Waste is being poured into rivers and seas. Poisons to kill pests in farming and chemicals go into rivers and seas, too. Poisonous gasses from factories also make the air so dirty. The whole balance of nature is being destroyed as a result of our ignorance of the environmental protection.
Personally, man can not live alone on the earth. Should fish die from serious pollution, so would man! It is high time we did something to prevent such a scene from happening.
High school is regarded as the best time in a person's life. As a senior three student, it won't take long before I graduate. Now, I have much to share with my fellow students.
高中被认为是一个人一生中最好的时间。作为一名三年级的学生,在我毕业前不需要很长时间。现在,我和我的同学们分享了很多。
Firstly, I would like to show my appreciation to those standing by me all the way, teachers, parents and friends included. Without their help and advice, my life would be different. Secondly, it's high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship. Above all, I've made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success. Just as the old saying goes, "no pains, no gains."
首先,我想对我所有的方式,教师,家长和朋友包括我的赞赏。没有他们的帮助和建议,我的生活将是不同的。其次,是对我伤害或误解的同学说对不起的时候了。沟通和微笑是友谊的桥梁。最重要的是,我已经下决心要尽一切努力去学习,因为我相信努力工作是成功的关键。正如俗话所说:“没有痛苦,没有收获。”
Finally I hope that all the younger fellows can make full use of time, because time and tide wait for no men.
最后,我希望所有的年轻人都能充分利用时间,因为时间和时间等待任何人。
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