Dear wu Yanzu:
You are my favourite superstar.I am addicited to your films and some other works.Our teacher asked us to write a letter to a superstar. You come to mine mind firstly. I am inertested in a question.That is why you are not good at our mother tongue.I am anxious to eat your cooking.It must be taste good.Oh i can not wait.How I wish I could taste it at once. You hurt your nose in an accident.I am very wooried about that,can I have a look at your nose.Yang Qianhua is a so good singer.You two look like a couple,and you will be good lovers.
Yours
XXX
我的爸爸个子不高,乌黑的眉毛下面长着一双锐利的眼睛,我所做的任何事都逃不过他的眼睛,由于我的爸爸小时候经常做家务,所以身体很强壮。
我爸爸是很和蔼可亲的,不过,他也有严肃的一面,当我考试考的差时,爸爸就会变得严肃起来,会生气地质问我:“你怎么这次考得这么差,是不是要我扇你啊?”不过,当我考得好的时候,爸爸就会笑着对我说:“儿子,挺不错嘛,值得奖励,下次再接再厉,考得更好一点!”
每次爸爸来到我家,我家就变成了一个幽默剧场,爸爸经常躺在床上逗我玩,我呢,有时候经常趴到爸爸的肚子上,压住他,他一点也不生气,反而还装着说:“包大人饶命,小的在也不敢乱说了。”我呢?早已经笑破肚皮了。还有的时候,我玩得会有点过火了,爸爸就会说:玩就是玩,不要玩的太过火了,这样子很不好,还很危险。”
这就是我的具有幽默、和蔼可亲、也有严肃一面的爸爸,我喜欢他!
小小的脑袋,大大的耳朵,挺着一个啤酒肚,小小的眼睛,身体壮得像一头小牛,嘴边常挂着憨态可掬的笑容。这就是我的爸爸,一个幽默搞笑的爸爸。
我的爸爸在成绩上对我的要求并不是太高,只是让我上课认真听讲,作业细心认真,但爸爸最关心的还是我的安全问题,在我独自出门的时候爸爸总会叮嘱我过马路的时候要小心,在走路的时候不要看书或听歌。虽然我已经听得很烦了,但爸爸毕竟是为我好。你们想知道我的爸爸是一个什么样的人吗,您别急,且听我慢慢道来!
一次中,我只顾掩护自己的试卷不被他人看见,做好了一直在像鸡妈妈守护小鸡一样,处处防着别人,自己却做得马马虎虎的,而我却不知道,考试卷被收上去了,我却以为自己会得一百分,喜滋滋的等待卷子发下来,卷子发下来以后我发现自己才得了89分,要知道妈妈对我的学习一向很严格,我得90就会挨批评,更别说89分。我怀着惶惶不安的.心情回家,果然回家后,妈妈就把我训了一顿,我自己开始哭了起来,爸爸回来后,了解了事情,对我说一次考不好不代表你的学习不好,我们来分析分析你为什么会错这么多题,最后的结果是因为粗心马虎,在下一次的考试中我想起了爸爸说的话,认认真真的做完后,又检查了几遍。最后得了98分,我欢天喜地的跑回家,爸爸的脸上露出了高兴的笑容令我十分开心。
一次我在马路上乱窜,很危险,爸爸把我叫回来,绷着脸,眉头深锁,我想从爸爸的脸上找出点答案,可爸爸的样子好令人害怕,接着用批评的语气说,你下次再敢在马路上乱跑我就不让你再出去玩了!我吓得连连点头!
如果爸爸出门的话,我们家里好像就少了一种活跃的空气,爸爸在家的时候,我和幽默的爸爸总会开始世界大战(贫嘴,而战争往往都是由爸爸引起的,而我是却全副武装的接应。
我喜欢我的爸爸,因为他是一个幽默的爸爸,他不会在别人面前摆架子,这就是我的爸爸——段小辉!
Dear Mom,
I recently read the book, Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mom by Amy Chua. I found that you and Ms. Chua have a lot in common in parenting. Today, I’ d like to share some of my views on this topic.
Childhood memories of your strict “dos” and "don’ts" came flooding back. Because count- less hours were invested on practicing musicalinsUu- ments, there was not even a slim chance for me to participate in parties and school plays, let alone fully enjoy the authentic pleasures of family life.Moreover, deprived of the freedom to choose hob- bies, I sometimes felt that I was just like a lonely pup- pet manipulated by others. Dear mother, do you be- lieve that time and time again I woke up from beau- tiful dreams with tears streaming down my face?
However, though Ive labeled it as a brutal regimen when I was young, as I became heavily involved inme outside world, I’ve come to realize that it was quite rewarding to have been tiger trained. As George Eliot putslt,"It never rains roses: when we want to have more roses, we must plant trees". This is as true of 0ur growing up, especially in an unprecedentedly stressful so- cietyr, Fortunately, tiger parenting has equipped me with exceptional study habits,thus helping me stand out in the intense competition. Furthermore, it has endowed me with strong willpower as well as inner self-poise, which bas proved to be a most pre- cious quality of mine. Finally,thanks to your firm discipline, not cmly have I cultivateda discerning taste in art, but I’ve also built my own set of moral values. In view of all these facts, tiger parenting has benefited me in the lorlg run despite the cost of the immediate joy of a normal carefree cbildhood.
Now, looking back on my childhood with your specialparenting method,I want to extend my sincerest appreciauon to you, my dear mother. As I am to commence my college life now,I promise you that Ill improve myself ina "tiger" way, going all out to fulfill all of my dreams.
Love,
Daughter
专家点评:
通过这封写给母亲的信,作者把母亲的教育方式和“tiger mom”的方式作对比,阐述自己的观点。开篇简洁明了,正文欲扬先抑,强调对“tiger training”的赞同,依此出发向母亲表达深切感激之情。文章结构清晰,观点明了,逻辑性强,行文通顺。作者词汇量丰富,长句驾驭能力强。建议适当改变句式,保证长短错落有致。
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