I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
有一天,字典爷爷召开全村比武大会,选出强兵强将参加省级比赛。村里一下子炸开了锅, 逗号抢先上台,连着几个高空翻,面不改色心不跳,拍着胸脯振振有词地说:要说本领大,非我莫属!在文学王国里,我出现的次数最多。凡是一句话未说完,都得用我断句,所以我的本领是最大的。像轮胎一样的句号连滚带翻,像杂技演员一样上了台,声如洪钟地说:如果在文学的王国里,没有我句号的话,那一句话的意思什么时候才能表达完整?文章不就乱套了吗?问号拿着他的如意金箍棒上台,先耍了一阵,才气势汹汹地说:我的`本领是最大的!十万个为什么,就是因我而出现的。分号脚踏轮滑上台,跳了一阵霹雳舞后,不甘示弱地说:在用排比修辞方法时,因为分句与分句之间是并列关系,所以我就该出场了。我的本领是最大的。冒号和双引号姐妹拉着手,跳着舞上台了,她们欢快地唱道:提示下文用冒号,对话引用加引号······六胞胎省略号没等她们唱完,就上台摇头晃脑地说:我的本领比你们大多了。在文学王国里,我可以省略很多不想说的话,避免语句重复。
字典爷爷终于忍不住大笑起来,标点符号们莫名其妙地看着哈哈大小的字典爷爷,一头雾水,有点丈二和尚摸不着头脑。字典爷爷语重心长地说:今天比赛的主要目的不是为了比本领,而是为了验证一下你们是否忘了自己的职责。看来你们本职工作做得不错,都能牢记自己的功能,一会儿,人人有赏。不过,从今以后,你们更要团结一致,互相监督,因为文学王国里,缺你们中任何一个都不行。
小标点符号们听了字典爷爷的话,手拉手唱起了家族歌:小小标点很重要,组成文章少不了。该用哪种小标点,都要认真来思考。意思未完用逗号,一句完了用句号。喜怒哀乐感叹号,提出问题用问号。提示下文用冒号,对话引用加引号。标点符号用正确,文章清楚都称好。
过了一会儿,风停了,我就“唰……”的一声掉了下去。还好这次是掉在了云上,要不我早就被摔得遍体鳞伤了。我往下望了望,发现这里的所有物品都是饼干做的,人是冰糖做的。我一不留神,从云上掉了下去,我掉下去时不小心撞到了一个冰糖小人儿,那个小人儿马上变成了一个大大的逗号。他恶狠狠地盯着我,我急忙把一个精致的小梳子送给了它,他左看看、右看看,嘴里不停地说:“好玩!好玩!”。最后,它为了报答我,决定带我游览标点符号国里的第二大王国——饼干、冰糖王国。在这里,我看到了在我们国家用来表示话未说完,语意未尽的省略号,在这里变成了小车;在我们国家用来表示停顿的逗号,在这里,它摇身一变,变成了一个个忠于职守的士兵;在我们国家用来表示语气着重的`感叹号,在这里变成了火枪和大炮;在我们国家用来表示一句话说完了的句号,在这里变成了将军……
它带我参观了她们国家的王宫,只见国王“?(问号)”正在宝座上打瞌睡呢!国王身旁站着两个“,(逗号)”手里拿着大刀“—(破折号)”真是威风啊!。突然,不知谁喊了一声“请国王陛下用餐”。话音刚落,“。”和“,”都争先恐后地跑了进来,几个“,”齐心协力拼成了一个餐桌,“。”跳了上去,变出了各种美味佳肴,有番茄炒蛋、糖醋鱼、水果拼盘、珍珠饺……真是多得数也数不清。时间一分一秒地过去了,不知什么时候,国王说了一声:“开饭。”可还没等国王说完,大家就狼吞虎咽地吃了起来。
渐渐地,我认识了许多朋友,我和它们在一起过着幸福的生活。可好景不长,因为这个王国里还有许多小坏蛋,它们想赶我走。一天早上,我一睁开眼睛就发现自己被五花大绑,那些小坏蛋们正得意地站在我身边,手里还拿着我发明的武器,准备把我处死。在这千钧一发的时刻,门突然“砰”的一声被打开了,宇宙法庭的一级法官——太阳跑了进来,把我救回了地球。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
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