I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成"总—分—总"结构
今天,外婆在家整理房子。突然外婆找到了一个盒子,一张照片从里面掉落在地上。我随手拿起来看,照片已经泛黄,角落边上的已经退化了。
照片中一个大约两三岁的小孩子,穿着一件大大的背心,一条有几个补丁的小裤头,脚上穿着两只大大的鞋,并且两只不同,显然不是这个小孩子的鞋。我忍俊不禁地问外婆:“这是谁呀?怎么穿成这样子啊,真好笑。”外婆看了看照片,严肃地说:“这是你的小姨啊,是30年前的照片了。那时候家里穷,什么都没有,差不多连吃都吃不饱,哪里有钱买新衣服呢?她穿的衣服都是哥哥姐姐穿剩给她的,破了就补几个补丁?恍?痈?用挥校?鞘焙蛭?苏障嗖糯┝宋颐堑男?印?碧?秸饫?我再也笑不出了,心里有种说不出的难受。我再次仔细地打量着这张照片。小姨的身后是一间用泥砖砌成的瓦房子,角落的泥巴已经脱落了;房子十分矮小,简陋。于是我又问外婆:“难道以前,你们就住在这地方吗?那下雨时,屋顶会漏水吗?”“如果雨再大一点,那就会。”外婆有些无奈地告诉我。“那以前的人都是住这样的房子吗?”外婆说:“基本上都是。”
听了外婆的讲述后,我思绪万千。以前这里贫困落后,村集体基本上没有收入,人们整天愁眉苦脸,穿的是补丁缀补丁的衣裳,吃的是青菜白饭,住的是矮房陋屋,走的是灰尘漫天的乡间的小路。田野里,穿着灰色衣服的男人和女人,卷着裤脚,弯着腰,戴着草帽,在烈日下辛勤劳作……
现在不同了,自从1979年改革开放以来,古老的农村脱下了朴素的衣裳,换上了新的款式,变得美丽动人。过去泥泞的小路已经不见了踪影了,现在一条条水泥大道穿梭于大街小巷……
现在,人们的生活水平也逐渐提高了。人们物质生活丰富了,精神层次也提高了。
……
我看到了这一切后,让我懂得了要珍惜自己现在拥有的一切,珍惜自己现在拥有的幸福。因为这一切都来之不易。
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