Last Saturday,with all my classmates and teachers,I went on a trip to the nature park .We departed from school at about half past seven and spent about 40 minutes travelling to our destination.When we first entered into the park,all of us were shocked by the natural beauty and the hamonized ecosystem of the park.Then,happily we were playing games on the sand; swimming in the pool and taking with our friends on the grassplot.After lunch break,our programs were continued with an contest of story narating held and each of us was immerging within the funny stories We left the part at about 5 o'clock,and unitl now,most of us are still haunted by the beautiful memory of that trip.
2.文句短。长句表意丰富,含蓄蕴藉,行文舒缓,给人严谨缜密之感。然而,无深厚的文字功底,加之时的思想紧张,句子一长,极易顾此失彼,造成病句。短句构建快捷,简洁明了,凝练生动,写之顺畅,读之清楚。因此,应力求多用短句,少用长句,长短结合,参差错落。
3.段落短。行文分段不宜太长,段落短小,层次分明,条理清楚,文思脉络显而易见。长段大段,组织不当,便有内容庞杂,冗长累赘,思绪紊乱之嫌。写时尤须力戒“三大段”,防止中间一段连篇累牍,又胖又长,如猪之肥腹,有失雅观。
4.结尾短,范文《议论文点评短语》。抒情怀、凸旨意,不枝枝蔓蔓,不拖泥带水,不画蛇添足,干净利落,戛然而止,余韵悠然。
5.篇幅短。大家知道,中考阅卷正值炎热天气,阅卷工作量大,且有规定的时间,既紧张又辛苦,“鸿篇巨制”显然是不合适宜、不受欢迎的。短小精悍才是选择的上策。当然,通常中考大多都有字数限制,一般在600字左右,写时自然必须按要求去做,但是如果不加控制,过度增字加长,一发而不可收,以致成了“老太婆的裹脚布——又臭又长”,势必让人反感。
6.议论短。议论有画龙点睛之功效。或述感怀或表见解,或评或论,析事剖理,闪金铄玉,当精粹简练,要言不烦,切莫又多又滥。
This is a beautiful park. In the afternoon , many children are playing . They are very happy.
I can see some trees. They are big and tall. I can see some flowers . They are very beautiful . There are many butterflies on the flower . I can see some birds in the sky . They are flying happily. Under the tree , two girls are playing hopscotch. Some boys are playing with a skipping rope. The other two little girls are drawing a picture.
I m playing with the toy cars in front of the tree.
It s a beautiful afternoon.
We take out our kites, mine are butterfly, my friends are birds, all are so funny. I start to let my kite fly, but it could not, so I run faster and faster, then my kite flies, I go let go it gradually. A few minutes later, my friends’ kites are also flying.
Seeing our kites flying, I feel so free. Today, I have a great time.
现在我已经放寒假了,我很开心,可以和朋友们玩。朋友们和我约定风来了,我们就去公园放风筝。今天风终于来了,早饭过后,我和朋友们去公园。我们拿出自己的'风筝,我的是蝴蝶样,朋友的是鸟的样子,都很有趣。我开始让风筝飞,但是飞不起来,因此我跑得越来越快,风筝终于飞起来了,我慢慢放飞。不一会儿,朋友们的风筝也飞起来了。看到我们的风筝飞着,我觉得很自由。今天,我玩得很开心。
Last autumn we took a trip to Qianshan by bus. It is about thirty miles from the city. We planned to put up in a hotel there in order to watch the sun rise the next morning.
As soon as we got there, we began to climb up the mountains. How great the sight is! We felt as if we had entered amother world full of beauty, peaeefulness and loveliness. There are hundreds of mountains, one after another. there are magnificent cliffs, one above another. We climbed up vigorously and breathed the fresh air greedily. As the sun was going down, we descended to a little hotel at the foot of the hill, where we had a big dinner, and then went to bed early so as to regain the energy ior the expedition next morning.
Before daybreak, we reached the peak of the highest mountain after a hard groping and climbing in the dark. Unaware of the cold wind, we stood motionlessly, with our eyes fixing at the hr end of the east. Suddenly thin ravs of red hue spread across the sky. As the redness deepened, some mysterious clouds moved across thc sky, dividing heaven from the earth. Just at this moment, up from the brightening far east rose the sun. It was so red and yet so tender that we could gaze at it with naked eyes. and a slight applause from us. the amazed spectators, rang through the peak. Up, up it rose, adding to itself strength and glory at every step. It dazzled with vigour, driving away darkness, cold, and misery from the earth, and bring light, warmth, and happiness to men.
We were completely amazed at the wonder and the greatness of nature. We jumped and shouted like innocent children and we bathed in the first rays of the sun with the peak till it was time for our return.
千山秋游
去年秋天我们乘公共汽车去千山游玩了一次。它距城市大约三十英里。为了第二天早晨看日出,我们计划住在那儿的旅馆里。
我们一到那里就开始爬山。那里的景色太美了!我们感到好像进入了另一个世界,一个充满美丽、和平和可爱的世界。那里有数百座山峰鳞次栉比:有壮观的悬崖层出不穷。我们精力充沛地向上攀登,贪婪地呼吸着新鲜空气。当太阳下落时,我们来到山下的一家小旅店,在那里美美地吃了一顿晚饭,然后早早地上床睡觉,以便恢复精力第二天早晨远征。
天亮前,我们经过在黑暗中艰难地摸索和爬行到达了最高的山峰。我们一动不动地站在那里,双眼凝视着远处的`东方,连寒风也没觉察到。突然间,薄薄的红光在天空中散开,随着红色加深,一些神奇的云朵在天空四散,把天地分开。正在这时,太阳从远处东方的光亮处升起。它是那样红,然而又那么娇嫩以致我们可以用肉眼来观察它。从我们吃惊的观赏者中发出的一阵轻微的欢呼划过山峰,太阳升得越来越高了,每升一步都给它本身增加了力量和光辉。它炫耀着威力,驱走了黑暗、寒冷和大地的苦难,并给人们带来光明、温暖和幸福。
这一奇观和大自然的伟大使我们完全惊愕了。我们像天真的孩子一样跳着、喊着,和山峰一起沐浴在太阳的晨曦中,流连忘返。
译文:今天,我在淘宝网看到很美味的草莓。我第一时间跟我自己最爱的人分享了。他很喜欢。可是他没有吃过这种草莓。这种草莓的'味道是牛奶味的。他觉得这很奇怪。所以他想尝尝这种草莓。而且价格也不昂贵,还有5元的红包。我觉得很值得。所以,我打算给他买一箱的草莓。一共是5斤的草莓。我想他收到的时候一定会很开心吧。一定会感觉到很幸福,很惊喜吧!我觉得,花费一点点的钱就可以给自己最爱的人一个惊喜,这是很美好的事情。不过,草莓一定要尽快的吃完。5斤的草莓一共是100个左右,要看草莓的大小和它的重量。草莓是易腐蚀的食品,所以要放进冰箱里。但是在冰箱里的草莓也不能保存很长一段时间。
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