清晨,一缕阳光透过窗帘洒进窗户,照在我的脸上,小鸟站在枝头,一蹦一跳地唱着愉悦的歌,在这样宁静祥和的日子里,我战胜了与天气截然相反的一种心情———恐惧。在这天,我学会了很多,也懂得了很多。
早上吃完早餐,我们一家三口一起去杭州乐园游玩,因为我是“爱写作的狮子”的种子会员,所以我能免费进入杭州乐园,那一刻,有种莫名的自豪。
我们一起进入杭州乐园后,我们先去玩了些并不是很刺激的项目,用来热身,当然,妈妈例外,因为她可不敢玩这些刺激的项目,于是,我们的“后勤”就由她来担当啦!热身后,我们准备前往最惊险刺激的一个项目———翻滚过山车。
到了翻滚过山车项目场地外面,“哇塞”!好长好长的队伍!每一次只能放十六个人进去,这样一来,岂不是所有时间都花在排队上了!这也太不划算了!于是,就让“后勤”妈妈排着队,我和爸爸先去玩了一个别的`项目,再回来的时候,我惊喜地发现人少了下去一大半,我欣喜若狂,拉着爸爸赶紧到妈妈那里排队。
我们前面还有两组人,可是看到从过山车上下来的人哭泣的哭泣,头晕的头晕,甚至还有呕吐的,我不禁有些害怕起来,轮到我们的时候,我的心都提到嗓子眼:“天哪!这也太可怕了!我会不会也这样呢?”,爸爸看了我一眼,好像也猜到我的心思,他拉着我的手说:,“很多事情只有自己尝试过,才能对自己有更深的了解,一直以来你是勇敢的孩子,深呼吸,然后大叫起来能够缓解紧张情绪,相信你能行的!”,听到爸爸这么说心里稍微放松了点,等到过山车到我们跟前后,顺从地跟着爸爸上了车。我的心跳加速了,心想:“如果早知道这样,还不如不来坐过山车呢!但爸爸也说的对,事情不经历怎么能知道是什么体验呢”
“游客们,欢迎来到……不要紧张,我们游戏马上就要开始了!”音响里传来了播音员甜美动听的声音,我也决定放弃挣扎,勇敢接受这次挑战,“呜呜呜……”,过山车启动了,我闭上双眼,感受这凉风的“凉爽”,渐渐地,感觉身体在加速,我尖叫起来,旁边传来的“啊———啊———”的尖叫声此起彼伏,突然,过山车在爬高,慢慢减速,甚至停了下来,我睁眼一看,发现我们已经到了悬在最高点!好像意识到马上会掉下去的感觉,我吓得立马又闭上眼睛,果然,没过多久,我就明显地感觉到自己在下坠,我紧紧握住把手,大声尖叫起来,但是,没过多久,这种压迫的恐惧感竟然消失了!我睁开眼睛,发现手心全是汗!但现在感觉没有那么害怕了,反而去欣赏天旋地转的那种不一样的景观,心情有种愉悦的刺激,好嗨哦!
很快,过山车就到站了,我竟然有种依依不舍的感觉,真是太完美了,战胜了恐惧后感觉很有快感,也很充实,真是一次不错的经历啊!
从开始的恐惧,到后来的愉悦,这种感觉好像再来一次,曾经书上看到一句话“恐惧是你的心魔”,这一句话一点也没错,只有战胜自己的心魔,会迎来自己的胜利愉悦,让我们携手同行,让明日的阳光更加灿烂而美好!
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
To see a world in a grain of sand,
And a heaven in a wild flower,
Hold infinity in the palm of your hand,
And eternity in an hour.
一沙一世界,
一花一天堂,
手中即无限,
永恒亦短暂。
一个好的主题句是文章成功的一半。不仅文章有主题,段落有纲,句也必有中心。文章失却主题,就会不知所云;落无纲,则一盘散沙,句缺中心,就无意义。所以,在立足于篇章时,一定要首先明确文的主题;在发展段落时,也要首先写好主题句。从PETS三的特点来考虑,主题句最好是置于文首或段首,这样让人一目了然! 以下就是两个实用的开门见山式发展主题句的方法。
●To begin with, we must attach the greatest importance possible to this issue/fact (key word.
●As is well known to all, it is now high time that we took this (topic word into serious consideration.
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