【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
亲爱的妈妈:
你好!
又到了年末,让我思绪万千,这么多年未曾见面,不知你可安好?你有没有想过我和弟弟?有没有过回家的念头?是或否,答案在你的心里。
自我记事起,记忆里便没有过你的影子,哪怕只是一点点。你为什么出去打工六、七年,直到现在也不给家里打个电话?隐约中只有刚出门时那么几个电话。
小时候的我们,虽然日子过得清苦,但是一家人多么幸福啊!家庭和睦,团团圆圆。我们也明白若不是经济紧张,你们也不会出去打工,可是你为什么不回来看看我和弟弟,爸爸无论在哪务工,春节时都回来呀!
还记得我小时候吗?那是多么的快乐呀!爸爸和你上山干农活时总会带上我和弟弟,你们在地里干着活,我守在弟弟旁边看着你们。你们脸颊上的汗水凝成了珠,滴在了土地上,可是你们是笑着的呀,是发自内心的笑。这就是苦,但苦中有甘。
小时候的我,有点调皮,有些捣蛋,喜欢拿你的耳钉玩。有一次,一不小心,把你的塑料耳钉塞到了鼻子里,取不出来。我特别害怕,就难过得大哭,你知道后,想尽了办法帮我取出来。可是,越紧张就越出错,耳钉不仅没取出来,反倒越往鼻腔里去了。我看见你哭了,你在担心我呀!你顾不上穿好外衣,急急忙忙地找到了爸爸,抱着我往医院赶。到了医院门口,我打了个喷嚏,耳钉出来了。我看了看你,你笑了,喜极而泣,抱着我蹲在地上哭了好久。我依稀记得,那天的风,凉飕飕的,要变天了。
不知从何时起,我隐约觉得你变了,变成了我不认识的妈妈,你和奶奶吵架了,我在奶奶那儿吃饭,你硬拖我下来,带到厨房里,把饭塞到我嘴里,用筷子戳好几下,戳到我的喉咙,我痛得眼泪往外涌,而你却无动于衷。
那天爸爸去邻居家了,你见爸爸前脚走,你立马用被子蒙住我的脸,坐在我身上,我扯着喉咙大喊,直到声音喑哑,我以为我要死了,爷爷奶奶知道了,赶来把你从我身上推下去,抱走了一息尚存的我,我泪水一直在流,心也一直在痛。
如今的我回忆起往昔种种,泪水横流,可是我不恨你呀!因为你是生我养我的亲妈,你为什么不回来呢?为什么不肯打个电话回家呢?什么原由,恐怕只有你自己清楚了。
看着同学一个个父母疼爱,我只能在一旁干瞪眼了。记忆中的你,日渐模糊,不懂你为何能狠下心来离家出走抛弃我们,你可知我、弟弟和爸爸为你流过了多少辛酸的泪,哭过多少回,爸爸为你瘦了多少,你未曾知道。
盼,在我少年时代与你能够再见面一回,哪怕再见只是陌路人也无防。
你的女儿:胡楠
20xx年6月3日
每个人都有自己的生活方式,我觉得人一生不管你走到哪里,不管你是大人小孩,不管你在任何情况下,不管你做什么事都应该诚实守信,对得起自己的良心。
由此,我不禁想起三年级时发生的一件事。记得有一次,放学回家,看见家门口有一位老爷爷在卖馒头。看样子,他的生意并不怎么好。当我就要与他擦肩而过时,老爷爷问我:“小朋友,吃馒头吗?”“可我没带钱。”我害羞地说。“没事儿,想吃就送你一个。”说着,老爷爷递给我一个馒头。“这怎么行,爷爷您等着,我回去拿钱。”说完,我带着馒头飞快地往家赶。可我刚进家,发现我最爱看的.动画片开始了,就把老爷爷忘得一干二净了。就这样,我失信了。为了看动画片,我吃了一个理不直气不壮的“霸王馒头”。后来,我再也没有遇到过这位老爷爷。每当我想起这件事儿,就想掴自己一巴掌,我为自己曾做过一次不诚信、不光采的事而感到脸红。
还有一次,我借了同学的五元钱,回家拿了钱我放到笔袋的夹层里,去了学校有事就耽搁了。过了好多天我也忘了还给那位同学。后来,我在笔袋的夹层里发现那五元钱,才想起同学的钱没有还。便立刻还给那位同学,可那位同学说:“你不是已经还给我了吗?”我知道她也忘了这件事,因为时间很长了。我对她说:“是你忘记了,我根本没有还你呀!”从这一件事情过后,我每次借了同学的东西,就不敢再拖延,用完马上还给同学,我不能做不讲诚信的孩子。
诚信,关系着一个人的生活、学习、工作,一个人如果失去了诚信,将在社会上没有立足之地,让人瞧不起。一个人失去诚信,就会失去朋友。一个人失去诚信,他将会失去一切!我认为诚信比金钱还要贵重,一个人诚实守信比什么都重要。
同学们,请记住:诚信无价!让我们从自己做起,从现在做起,从身边的每件小事做起,在家里做一个诚信的好孩子,在学校做一个诚信的好学生,在社会做一个诚信的好公民,让诚信扎根于我们的心灵。我坚信:只要人人都讲诚信,祖国的明天将变得更加美好、更加灿烂、更加辉煌!
“诚信,诚信,自从立下了你,世界变得更美丽,我一直都很在遵守着你,你是上帝,你是我的肢体,诚信,诚信,就是诚实守信……”咦!这是从哪儿来的歌声呢,我思索着。忽然我往后一扭头,噢,原来是我的好朋友——曹程寒在放声歌唱。我走过去说:“寒寒,又得了什么便宜,这么高兴?”她神秘地朝我一笑,眨了眨她那水灵灵的大眼睛,饶有风趣地说:“你猜呀?”“准是又做了什么惊人的事迹。”“还是好朋友你了解我。”我得意地笑着说:“那还用说,那到底是什么事?”她又故意卖起了关子,在我的再三纠缠下,她终于说出了事情的来龙去脉。
“我今天数学考了100分,每次发下试卷来,妈妈都要检查一遍,可这次偏偏错了一道口算,我还跟同学打了赌呢!并保证发现错题后绝对让老师扣分。我不能得第一了,可我也不能说话不算数。虽然试卷上是鲜红的100分,可思想品德这一关只能打0分。我为了诚实守信用,找了老师。虽然老师重判了分数,但是我为自己的所作所为感到满足……”还没等寒寒说完,我***嘴:“你真傻!让老师重判了分数,不就表示100分不翼而飞了吗?不就表示你在同学面前丢了面子吗?不就表示第一名不属于你了吗?”对于这些问题,寒寒没有作答,只是送我一句话:“做人要讲诚信,否则你将一无所有。”
我独自走在回家的路上,反复思考着那句话,感到寒寒一句朴素的话,好像包蕴着意味深长的哲理:成绩可以用分数表示,可一个人的品质不能用分数表示,只有用你的实际行动才能代表你的诚心,才能给自己画上一个圆满的句号。”
我耳边又响起了那首自创歌:“诚信,诚信,自从立下了你,世界变得更美丽……”同学们,让我们积极行动起来,用我们的诚心和信誉去共同创建美好的未来吧!
中国式过马路“简单的来说,就是凑够一群人,就可以走了,和红绿灯不搭界。这种现象在中国很普遍,但这往往会发生交通事故。每年七万人丧生交通事故,八成因交通违法导致,在这,就有一条新闻:在枣庄市,有三起是因为市民骑电瓶车和摩托车乱闯红灯酿出悲剧。我不禁为此感到悲哀,就是为了闯红灯,违法交通规则,这么活生生的人命就没了。
我就不明白了,为什么会有这么多的人去闯红灯,就不怕被罚款?甚至是失去生命?原来,绝大多数的中国人是心里觉得别人都走了,自己再等的话就笨了,就这样每个人抱着这同一想法就造成了对红绿灯的视而不见,而且,中国人都不愿一个人闯红灯,因为太过显眼,万一有事“孤家寡人”一个没有帮手会很吃亏,但是现在有这么多的“战友”,随随便便就能拉一个来垫底,出于侥幸的心理,正所谓“有福同享,有难同当嘛,就算出了问题,也不怕。很多中国人本来就喜欢跟随大众,而难以坚定自己的毅力,中国人的`素质需要提高。
人民的这种做法,是不文明的,不仅容易引发交通事故,危及行人自身安全,也扰乱了交通秩序,大大影响了交通效率,由此可见,闯红灯有着多么大的危害!
闯红灯这种不文明的现象,不仅仅存在于社会上,在校读书的学生,也常常会有此现象。学生只需学习,为何过个马路,都要闯红灯?为此,我做了一些调查。有的学生是赶时间,因为怕错过了某些事情;有的学生是长期闯红灯而引起的坏习惯;有的学生是从众心理,因为看着别人都闯红灯直接走了,而自己却还在这里傻傻的等着,会被别人称作是傻瓜的,自尊心受到打击,面子上也过不去,干脆直接走;还有的学生是觉得交通灯转换时间太长,没有这个耐心去等待。
这种“中国式过马路”着实反映了广大人民的素质修养问题和一个社会意识问题。
对于闯红灯这不文明的行为,我们需要加以重视起来,否则又不知道会发生多少起悲剧事件。所以我在此给出一些建议:1、多给人民讲一些交通规则,以及交通事故,让他们能够重视起这个问题,珍爱自己的生命2改进交通信号灯的转变时间,缩短时间,就不会让人觉得等不及3加强防范措施,闯红灯的人要按照法律来处置
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