四级作文字迹如何训练【一】
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先，提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段：提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段：正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段：摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次，提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性，连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity：段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛，也不可太具体，做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明，另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence：关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰，层层展开。
完整性(completeness：以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头，这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次，提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型：It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单，注意练习并接句的使用，会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as，如：
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头，句式简单，我们可以通过把since提前改变句式，如：
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后，提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法：millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论，辩论”的意思，而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.，相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略：使用最近所学的单词，如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后，我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文，以供参考：
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
四级作文字迹如何训练【二】
长时间没看书了，这一次看了《临界·爵迹》，我的感受颇深。
依稀记得第一次接触《幻城》的时候是在六年级，那个时候于其说它是幻城，不如说它是迷城，撬起了小四命运的齿轮，彻底的改变了小四的命运。
事隔十年，很多事情都在悄无声息的变化着，或许当年读《幻城》的那些亲友们现在正告别校园，在就业还是考研间摇摆决择；也许他们现在早已就业，为一些油盐酱醋茶的生活而忙碌奔波着。甚至连泡一杯咖啡坐在沙发上捧起书来都成了生活里的某种奢侈。
在这十年里，小四依然在写着，但是却没有再碰过奇幻题材。他说他不是不想写，而是不敢写，他说他想等到他的文笔和技巧再成熟一点儿，成熟到足以让绚烂的幻想变成磅礴的史诗；成熟到足以直视自己十年的成长，抬头挺胸地给出交待；成熟到足以面对那些一直透过文字和自己共同成长的亲友们。
他说那些光怪陆离的想法，无数或细碎或磅礴片段，没落到纸张上却已然有血有肉的人物，以及他们所构建出的庞大绮丽的世界是他交给我们的一份答卷。
看了《爵迹》,比当年的《幻城》带给我的震撼力更大，当一个个聂人心神的秘密抽丝剥茧般裂开，似乎一切又回到了起点，犹如水上涟漪，一圈一圈荡漾开来……其实这本书我也仅仅看到十几章，但那真的是一个纯粹的原始的感动。里面的人物层出不穷，但每个人不尽相同的天赋和性格，标志着每个人的独到之处，除了王爵和自己的使徒。王爵和使徒之间的情感是沁人心扉的，他们身心相犀，而这种情感也是现实生活中一种非常温暖的人性。
很喜欢银尘这个角色，无论是小四对他的人物刻画，还是覆盖在他身上一个个令人惊喜故事。从他开始出现的时候，就觉得他是非一般的人物，但通过一些旁白得知他只是七个王爵中魂力最弱的一个七度王爵。而这也仅仅是小四在此埋下的一个伏笔，银尘终究是不负重望的，包括他的使徒……
我读过的奇幻题材的书不多，我接触的奇幻启蒙之作也就是《幻城》，而《爵迹》又刚好是第二本。或许在这类题材上有些资深的前辈觉得这些还不足挂齿，但我相信自己的感觉,那种在内心里波动滋生的纹路。
四级作文字迹如何训练【三】
《爵迹》，依然是一个冰天雪地的世界。不过我觉得最为不同的或许也是我比较喜欢的就是，这里没有主角或者说每个人都会是主角。而最让我惊讶的并不是故事的`内容有多么的创新、多么的华丽。相反，故事的内容反而让我有种小四已经词穷的感觉，好多描写他都用了重复的词语，跟他很多以前的文章相比少了不少文字上的宣泄。但是，文章的描写方式却让我感觉一种目不暇接。完全被打乱的时间和空间，让人毫无准备的去迎接一个又一个的谜题，却又恰到好处的把所有人物和谜题都紧紧的联系在一起，真的就像小四自己说的，他是把文字玩弄的很精致。虽然我不知道《爵迹》是这样就结束了还是还会有连载，但是如果真的就是这样就了解了，那结局真的给人留下了意犹未尽的遐想，让人有些不甘。
不过，《爵迹》我没能看出文章想要表达的是怎样的思想，并没能像《幻城》那样给我很鲜明的感悟，我只能体会到一点点失望。文中的所有到最后居然都是一个骗局，所有人都觉得神圣的祭司只是被放逐的囚犯，所有的美好多只是邪恶的阴谋，一种没有来由的扭曲的恶心感就会不断地在胃里翻滚。(.然而，面对谎言有些人选择反抗，有些人选择沉默，有些人则选择静观其变…而所有扑朔迷离的谜题的解居然是一个毫不知情的平凡却又不平凡的少年——他是故事开始也是故事收尾。
总之此书，我挺喜欢，但不推荐，不过如果也是为了打发时间，可以欣赏欣赏，不错的。
