导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
5年级时,托管里一个比我小的同学发现书上有些骂人的话,不知道是谁写的,可是总的要随便找一个说,于是,她看我平常不太跟她说话,也不怕得罪,就随便说:好像是我写的,于是,她就给他家长说是我写的,她家长就告老师,老师又告诉我家长,老师和家长都一口咬定是我写的,老师还说:看那些字就是我的`笔迹。可是我连那些字在什么书上都不知道,后才我问她才知道是在课堂本上写的,课堂本:不让带回家,只让放在学校,我怎么写?于是她说是我去她班偷偷写的,这明显是在给她自己撒谎找理由,我那时都不知道她是在哪个班的!
6年级时,班里一个要好朋友过生日,于是我就去礼品店买了一个精致的水晶球送给朋友,送后不久,老师知道了,找了一天语文课在全班说同学以前送自己的一个水晶球很久没动过,后来发现失踪了,失踪的水晶球和我送给朋友的水晶球一模一样,问我是不是拿了,我心想:我真是倒霉透了,送朋友个水晶球居然买成和老师失踪的水晶球一模一样的,太蹊跷了,我在怎么解释老师也不信,因为这实在是巧合了,我再怎么解释也是徒劳,我说礼品店老板能作证我是在礼品店里正正规规买的,因为礼品店相对离学校比较远,同学也因为太远懒得和我去那么远找人作证,老师也没有那个闲工夫,这件事我又被冤枉了!
初二时,我们新添了物理课,物理老师很敬业,班里有个同学腿摔坏了几天没来学校,老师居然中午主动牺牲自己休息时间给那位同学补课,不过正是因为这位老师敬业,所以拖堂是自然免不了了,有一回老师下课了还在继续讲,我背后一个调皮的同学喊了一声:老师,下课了,你咋还不下课老师就突然炸扭过头对着我说:谁说下课了,下课了你坐不住你自己出去,别影响我们上课。我这又是被冤枉了!
还有一会英语课,我同桌不停跟我说话,因为我们英语老师特别严,不抓住说话了可就惨了,我就一直没敢回话,知道我实在憋不住了,用了稍大点儿的声音会了我同桌一句:你够了没?结果老师听见了,居然没管我同桌,对我说:这位同学,谁让你上课大声嚷嚷的,罚你抄10遍3a,放学之前抄完,抄不完别回家我刚想要解释说是我同桌西先说话影响我的,老师迅速打住说:不需解释,解释再罚10遍
我的人生,就是这么委屈不过,我依然很乐观!
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