【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
由于孩子们非常迫切地希望到社会、到大自然中去开阔眼界,去学习在书本里学不到的东西。为了满足学生们这合理的需求,根据学校工作安排,定于11月13日(本周星期六)组织学生到杨村甸及有关学校进行为期一天的参加、联谊活动。现将相关事项告知各位家长:
1、此次外出活动学校将派9名领导负责学生的管理,确保学生外出活动全程安全。
2、为了培养学生的健康和卫生习惯,养成节约和环保意识,请家长为孩子准备好垃圾袋(小学生要带"文明随身袋")。学校建议各位家长给学生的零用钱不要超过30元,另外,建议家长不要让学生带照相机和手机等贵重物品前往,以免丢失。
3、外出活动前,学校将进行专门的安全教育,也请各位家长在家对孩子进一步强调外出的`注意事项,并请家长督促孩子于11月13日早上8:00前到学校,8:10准时乘车出发。
4、这次活动本着自愿参加的原则,请家长和孩子一起商量并决定是否参加。不管选择参加或不参加此次活动的学生,家长一定在回执中注明,并将回执交学校团委徐嫒萍主任(选择参加此次活动的学生务必在11月13日早上8:00前交,选择不参加此次活动的学生务必在11月15日即下周星期一交)。
让我们预祝此次活动圆满成功!
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20XX年11月13日
今年的春天来得格外早。记得去年三月月末,广玉兰还端庄的坐在枝头,如今还不到月底,已然没了踪影。夏的脚步追赶的太快,再不欣赏,春的繁华便将逝了。
放下手中的红笔,挽着苗儿的手走在校园明媚的阳光下。昨夜一场春雨,洗去铅华,天格外蓝,明净如洗。教学西边的花坛里,紫色的丁香在风中摇曳,初开的,那紫色沉淀了一般,深沉凝重,怒放的,被和风拂成一树浅紫,和悦清新。凑近,沁香扑鼻。白色的梨花一朵挨着一朵,它们笑着:“我在开花!”不过十来株,也不甚高,却满树洁白,使出浑身解数璀璨着春天。红端木密密茬茬笔直地立在栅栏边,宛若绿衣卫士守护着这一片春色。红叶石楠用绛红的新叶欢迎我们的光临;小叶女贞羞涩地露出浅绿的衣裙;十大功劳依然苍苍地翠着;石榴抽出些许嫩嫩的新枝,期待夏的火红;鸢尾宁静地伴着杂浆草,春末夏初,自有属于它们的热烈;桂花默默立在风中,只等着秋的芬芳。
绕到教学楼北面,一排粉色的樱花笑靥灿烂,与体育馆旁的一行灿灿的黄金槐相映成趣,就像我们校园的孩子们,散发着青春的消息。
走过餐厅西侧,两株法国梧桐正舒枝展叶,这是建校时唯一留存而不是移栽的树,枝上喜鹊的巢依然在,四年了,它们一直住在这里,给我们报告一个个喜讯。
漫步到公寓楼南面,惊喜的发现杂浆草不知何时偷偷地美丽了春的心情,那紫色的小花,在低矮的草丛中自信地昂着头,一点也不卑微。不知道孩子们打水时可曾留意到这早慧的花儿?树林般的红端木后面白色的围墙上,零落地趴着几株瘦弱的爬山虎,新叶不甚茂密,却也盎然,几年后,这堵围墙,葱茏一片的,应该是它们奋斗的身姿。
沿着水泥路走到公寓楼西面,阴凉冷寂,然而贴着墙根是长达几十米的黛色长廊,那是高大的法国冬青,乍一看,会以为那是变异的玉兰,叶片极其相似。
来到餐厅正对的公寓楼北,发现有一棵叶子很少,花朵远比其他繁盛的多的海棠。同样的春天,它却多了几分璀璨,许是付出多的缘故。
站在升旗台下,看红旗在蓝天下飘荡,感慨校园春色的辉煌,放下心头的忧伤,伴着孩子们一起成长!作文
风,轻轻地、温和地吹着,吹来了一位披着金黄色的轻纱的美少女,她迈着轻盈的脚步,悄悄的来到了人间。是的,是秋姑娘来了。
天,像擦拭的一尘不染的玻璃;轻盈的云朵,雪白雪白,如奶汁一样,火辣的太阳换成了温暖的光芒,滚滚的热浪变成了秋天的凉爽。每当你早晨起床时,都会不由自主地觉得:“啊!这天气真冷啊!”的确,秋天的早晨可不像夏日的早晨,秋,是吹着阵阵凉风,阴凉阴凉的,这秋风似乎在提醒人们:“秋天来啦!小心着凉哦!”呵!这秋风可真有意思啊。
有时,秋风也是个顽皮的孩子。夏天过去了,而现在秋天来了,一棵棵大树都光秃秃的,老树们阴郁的站着,随着时间的流逝,身上长满了一丝丝的皱纹。无情的秋天剥下了它们美丽的衣裳,而它们只好无奈地单调的站在那。往日大树上翠绿翠绿的叶子,也已经涂上了黄色。枝头上的黄叶已经活完了暂短的一生,被这秋风一夜扫尽,纷纷飘落下来,落在地上,遍地似乎铺上了一块黄地毯。哎呀!这不是又给清洁阿姨添加了更多的工作了吗?
唉,这顽皮的孩子!
当秋风来到花草丛中时,刚一到,就和花草们撞了个满怀,弄得花草们东倒西歪,左摇右晃的。你可以说他是扰乱了花姐姐草妹妹的安宁,也可以说他是给他们增添了一丝生机。
花儿一见到秋风,便忍泪诉说自己的痛苦,而小草也则争先恐后地向秋风倾诉。一个个都受了什么委屈啦?噢!你瞧瞧他们便一清二楚了。众多花儿一不再是亭亭玉立、花枝招展的少女了,现在的她们只是花样年华后的花甲之年了。枯萎的花瓣,弯曲的腰肢,垂头丧气的。小草们也好不了多少,嫩绿的草丛已变成了一片枯黄。想必,他们都很怀恋往日的花样年华吧!
秋天,虽然不像白花盛开的春天那样充满生气,五彩缤纷,也不像绿树成阴的夏天那么充满活力,繁枝绿叶,但却有诱人独特的秋色和金黄的果实吸引人们。
看!田野成了一望无际的金色海洋。如海的高粱举起的火把,无边的大豆摇响了铜铃,黄澄澄的稻子费力的撑着沉甸甸的穗头,像躬身致谢的样字,像是在跟农民伯伯说:“谢谢您一直以来对我的培养!”收割的农民伯伯看到这一片,丰收的喜悦充满了心头。果园里,又是一阵阵喜悦。每个枝头都挂满了一颗颗大大的果子,红通通的苹果、金灿灿的李子、白里透红的桃子……走在这果园里,确有一番清香的水果味。哇,看着这些硕大的果实,你一定会不禁地流起口水呢!
秋天,金风送爽,天高云淡,粮食归仓,果实累累。这一切,都显得秋天多么的别有一味啊!
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