1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
今天我读了一个故事,很受感动,故事的大意是这样子的:
一个年轻人和母亲生活穷困潦倒。年轻人去向高僧讨教如何成佛,高僧说让他下山,如果看到有赤脚给他开门的人,那他就是佛。年轻人努力找,可没有找到。直到他完全灰心时,他回到了家,他的母亲为他开了家门,他发现面前的母亲竟然是赤脚!年轻人想起高僧的话,忽然明白了一切,突然泪流满面,跪在母亲面前。
故事没有最后点明,但是让读者很明白,原来母亲就是高僧所说的佛。为什么说母亲是佛呢?大家想一想,在我们生活中对我们帮助最大的莫过于我们的母亲了。可能大家不这么认为,但是请你想一想,是谁给你了生命?是谁在你迷失方向的时候为你指明道路?是谁?是谁?我想这时候大家一定异口同声地说:“母亲。”是啊,母亲不顾自己的痛苦,给予我们了生命,她是无私的;母亲在你生病时急忙把你送进医院,自己却因为过于忙碌生病了,她是伟大的……回想和母亲走过的时光,我们不难发现母亲为我们牺牲了太多,而我们却给她们一次又一次的伤害,这难道是她们应得的回报么?我想不是。但母亲真正需要什么?我想有许多人都不清楚,我原来也不明白,但是现在已经一清二楚。母亲需要的不是我们物质上的东西,不是我们花许多钱去给他们买那些无用的礼物,我们不能只在节日或生日里那么做,而是要从点点滴滴做起,但这点点滴滴并不是物质上的,而是精神上的。一张满分的卷子,一个亲切的问候等等这些虽然小的不起眼,但对于母亲们来说确实很重要的。她们会从你所作的这些点点滴滴看出你是多么的懂事,不用她们费太多心思,同样也让她们欣慰。这不是最好的回报么?亲情无价,只有我们做好生活中的点点滴滴才是对母亲最好的回报。朋友,请先默默地感谢母亲,之后作出自己的实际行动吧,让她们看到你的成长,你的进步,让她们感到欣慰吧!
亲情,人世间最美好的情感。
——题记
当我看到“情感”这个字眼时,第一想到的就是亲情。在这茫茫人海中,可以没有老师同学,没有兄弟姐妹,甚至可以没有朋友知己。但唯一不能没有的就是亲人!
因为亲情,所以美丽。因为亲情,所以感动。因为亲情,所以关爱。亲情带给我们健康与智慧,带给我们勇气与力量,伴随我们成长。
“咳,咳,咳……”连续不断的咳嗽声传入深蓝的夜空。妈妈原本红润的脸变苍白了,舒展的眉头皱紧了。不用说,又是我在背地里捣鬼了。这次可不能全赖我,感冒大军突然来袭,而我无力抵抗才会这样的。妈妈连忙给我拿来温度计。当那冰冷的铁触及到我的肌肤时,加深了我的恐惧和疼痛,我不由地哇哇大哭。妈妈见了,就用和风细雨般的声音安慰我。我渐渐不哭了。过了许久,妈妈一声尖叫“40度!”。随后背起我就破门而出。路上,小雨淅淅沥沥的下着。妈妈把伞给我,自己却冒着雨跑向医院。一滴水慢慢从妈妈的脸上滑落,我分不清是雨水﹑汗水,还是泪水。
终于到医院了。医生给我检查了一下,决定打针。我听见又吓得哭了起来。妈妈连忙安慰我:“宝贝,乖,不哭。一点也不疼,要坚强……”不知不觉中,针插入了我的手中。那是第一次,我没有哭。许久,一切都已雨过天晴,我打完了针,迎着朝阳,踏着尘埃回家了。
夜深了,窗外一户户灯都已熄灭,我却趴在书桌奋笔疾书。“叮铃铃…叮铃铃…”一阵电话声响起。“喂,是××啊。你最近怎么样?…我还好……”听着奶奶说了一大堆,才把电话给我。“喂”我一听,原来是哥哥。“在干什么呢?”哥哥关切的问。“写作业。”“记住不要趴在书桌上啊,会近视的。还要少看电视,好好学习,晚上少吃零食……早点睡,小心着凉。”哥哥叮嘱完后就挂了电话。我十分感动,继续写作业,速度也提高了许多。
亲情就是这样,永远伴随着你,带给你温暖。亲情,这人世间最美好的情感。
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