议论文语言特点分析的角度比较固定,只有二个角度:
(1语言特点;简明平实、形象生动、幽默风趣、含蓄委婉、富有文采等
(2语体特点。语体特点,就是抓住逻辑严密四个字做文章就可以了。
一个应特别注意的事项就是做这类的题目一定要有具体文句支撑,也就是用文章中的具体例句为例子进行分析。
常用句式:这个词体现了议论文语言的严密性。
每当夜幕即将来临,诸暨就亮起来了。诸暨城变成了灯的海洋,光的世界。
暨阳路华灯高照,好似白昼。人来人往的汽车灯光闪烁,像银河从天而降。明亮的橱窗,绚丽多彩的广告,五光十色的霓虹灯,滚动的广告屏幕,无不折射着商业街的繁华。第一百货和雄风广场这两处地方最聚人气。大家三个一群,五个一伙,趁着夜晚的凉爽争相购物。进进出出的人群川流不息。
城市广场灯火通明,照明灯、草坪灯、喷泉灯、霓虹灯,齐刷刷地亮起来。各种各样的灯交相辉映。草坪灯仿佛是镶嵌在绿地毯上的晶莹剔透的珍珠;霓虹灯不停地闪烁着,犹如彩色的星星调皮地跟大家眨双眼……有些灯竟做成了树的造型,这儿一丛紫莹莹的光芒,那儿一簇金灿灿的光束……好一派火树银花的景象。广场上人声鼎沸。有些悠闲地散着步,有些尽情地跳着舞……最吸引眼球的是那群轮滑的小孩。他们踩着轮滑鞋像流星一样滑过广场。旁观者不由自主地啧啧称赞。
暨阳江两岸,霓虹灯交替变换着颜色,一会儿红色,一会儿绿色,一会儿蓝色,看得人眼花缭乱。五彩缤纷的霓虹灯倒映在江面上,流光溢彩,美不胜收。西施大桥在灯光的点缀下愈加迷人,像一道绚丽的彩虹横跨在江面上。站在桥上,凉风习习,扑面而来。大家或站或坐,一边赏析夜景,一边享受着徐徐清风带来的凉意。
西施故里风景区金碧辉煌,光彩夺目。彩灯勾画出一幢幢仿古建筑的轮廓。灯光为夜幕下的西施故里增添了无穷的魔力。怪不能夜幕下的西施故里游人如织,原来大家是慕名而来,想一睹夜幕下的西施故里别样的气质。
夜晚的诸暨多么明亮,多么辉煌!
傍晚到来了,天空慢慢变黑,大地开始沉沉进睡了。
夜色是那样的迷人,天上一颗颗宝石似的星星闪闪发光,神秘的眨了眨它那迷人的双眼。弯弯的月亮像一只小船,在天空中自由自再的划行。夜晚,大家的"夜来香"女孩散发出阵阵奇异的香味。蟑螂小姐和蜻蜓女孩在花心上聚会它们又唱又跳,而且还在比美呢!欢快的小鸟快活地飞回了热和的家,还不时的为我们的小孩唱着摇篮曲。
夜是柔软的。清幽的月光,闪闪的星光,灿烂的灯光看上去是那样的刺眼。"风女孩"用它那独一无二的翅膀抚摸着大地妈妈嘴里还不时的唱着歌。往日那热闹的广场也不在那样喧哗了。然而只有一些调皮的孩子借着进夜在院子里玩捉迷躲……你追我赶,还真像一群开心的小星星。街道像一条波平如镜的河流的河流,回忆着当天的热闹与繁忙。
看着天上的月亮,就仿佛看见了漂亮的神话仙子嫦娥携带我们的玉兔在月亮上跳着自己喜欢的舞蹈。同时也展示出了它的多彩多艺,倘若你那天看到了这如诗如画的情景,必然会不由自主地说:"大自然的神奇和多姿多彩的景色太独一无二了。"
大地开始觉醒,但我依旧感觉它是那样的精妙尽伦。它的漂亮将没办法用我们的言语来表达,只能专心灵往细细的领会。今天,我看到了这黑夜里的美景,只有如此的美景才能让我好像在腾云驾雾通常。
夜的美,夜的色,夜的幽,夜的甜。让我如痴如醉。
夜我爱你,就像老鼠爱大米。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
1、韩信与施恩不图报。
2、雷锋的优秀品质。雷锋生活上艰苦朴素,却常用省下来的钱去帮助别人。战友中谁家里有困难,他就偷偷地把自己的钱寄去;战友的衣服脏了、破了,他就悄悄地帮助洗净、补好。业余时间,他到学校当校外辅导员;逢年过节,他到火车站扶老携幼,到候车室打扫卫生;出差外出,好事做一路。一次,有位妇女为丢失火车票犯愁,他掏出自己的津贴买来票,还送她上车。有人说他是“傻子”。他却说:“我是甘心做这样的‘傻子’的,革命是需要这样的‘傻子’的,建设也需要这样的‘傻子’的。”
3、老人种苹果。有位老大爷种了许多苹果树。有家问他:“你这种这么多苹果树干什么呀?要等好久好久,这些树才能结出苹果来呢,恐怕你吃不着它们了。”老大爷说:“虽然我吃不着,可是别人吃得着呀,那时候他们会感谢我的。”
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