同桌英语作文批改外教【一】
Dear Mr Pan:
It has been a long time since I wrote the last letter. Nowdays, people write letters less and less, instead, they make a call or send a SMS. However, it is still a good way for us to communicate with each other by sending a letter.
It's my honour to get the chance to write to you. "Approachable" is my first impression of you, because you always keeps smiling. Students may fear the teachers that are serious both in and out of class. Smile makes a teacher popular with his students, you are a teacher of this very kind.
You always arrive at the classroom ahead of any of the students, from which we could imply that you are a diligent man with regular habit. Before the class, you like to talk to us, at this very time, you are more a friend than a teacher. To be honest, I was surprised in the first class when I learned a teacher at your age could speak English in such a fluent way.(I didn't mean you are old, you're young at heart. Moreover, you know well how to keep your class attractive. You've got such an active mind that you can keep talking during the whole class without a pause. I always appreciated your ideas and enjoyed listening to you. In your class, I learned not only the writing skills but also the presentation skills as well as much knowledge of other areas. Thanks for your excellent teaching.
I've got some suggestions for you. It seems that we students have got few chances to participate in discussion during the class time. Most of the time, we are listening. Seldom did we express our own ideas. I suggest that teachers should interact with students more frequently in the class. Besides, I'd like to practice writing more, so would you please leave us more assignments?
Happy new year.
With every good wish.
Yours sincerely
Dali Wang
XXXX.X.X
同桌英语作文批改外教【二】
1、文章选材新颖，这件事，乡村生活气息浓郁，富有儿童情趣。读后令人身心愉悦，舒畅。
2。文章不仅表达了作者对父亲的爱，更多的是思念，不露雕琢痕迹而颇有情韵，描写生动，特别是词语和语句方面都很恰当，语言与风格：富有浪漫主义色彩，引起读者的阅读兴趣。
3、文章真实感强，立体感强，可读性强，趣味性强。以敏锐的社会洞察力，以童话反映现实阴暗面，并以生动的语言，描绘出一幅幅贪婪众生相，称得上入木三分。
4、本文以……为线索，使用权文章连贯，流畅，衔接自然，同时，通过前后具体事例的对比。文章语言生动丰富，可读性强。
5、能过合理的想象，反映出意味深长的哲理，行文流畅，简洁，充分发挥了自己的想像力，文章清逸婉丽，流畅连贯，尤其人物语言幽默风趣，再加上一些精妙词语的使用，无形中为文章增添了不少情趣。
6、文章真实生动，情真意切，特别是……使用权文章极具感染力，发人深思。
7、叙述事情条理清晰，能正确地使用动词，运用比喻贴切，生动。献计献策读后能从中受到教育。
8、朴实自然的童心体现在文中，使文章散发着清新活泼的气息。
9、这篇文章以具体的事例，生动优美的语言，新颖别致的写法，表现了对美好心灵的由衷赞。
10、本文主要优点有三：
（1）本文能紧扣题目要求，完整地写了……的过程。
（2）结构严谨，重点突出。
（3）语言朴实，简洁，流畅，开头和结尾都很自然，准确。
11、开头简洁自然，结构清晰，心理描写真实，体现出作者良好的语言驾驭能力。
12、这篇短文的特点可概括为亲切，温馨，隽永。
13、文中描绘的……清新活泼，欢快明朗。字里行间跳动着的童心，使文章也有了生命力。
14、文章凭着丰富的想象，凭着多彩的`语言，将……呈现读者面前。
15、文章简洁明了，语言平淡朴实。
16、外貌描写形神兼备，人物形象突出。可贵的是曲笔入题，引起读者的阅读兴趣。
17、对……生动而详细的叙述，是本文的一天特色，也体现了作者观察的敏锐与细致。这是文章成功的一大要素。
18、文章来源于生活，小作者很会在生活中捕捉素材，是啊，如果没有清洁工，我们的环境将会变得不堪入目。文章语言朴实，人物的言行符合各自的身份特点，生活气息浓厚。
19、本文是一篇较为成熟的叙事明理之作，文章以准确流畅的语言，展示了实验的全过程，跌宕起伏，妙趣横生。小作者观察仔细，叙述时井然有序，对人物的描写，能切中要害，详尽而全面。文章读来饶有兴味。
20、文章开头交待得分清楚，起到总领全文的作用。结尾处寥寥数语，显示了作者探索科学奥秘的远大理想和坚定信心，催人奋进。
同桌英语作文批改外教【三】
My deskmate is Xu Qiong,not how beautiful.There is a mole on the face,wearing a long pigtail.She loves to play rock paper scissors,also love to buy something to eat.Her maths homework quickly,usually a few before the class.But she was always do wrong,sometimes she again and again to correct or wrong,finally.No way she had to turn to me for help,I began to carefully taught her.With my help finally done.Then she excited in the seat,as if in the heart cry:" I do!"
Although she doesnt study how,but I quite admire her.I learned a lot from her,she will find a lot of small games,let us enjoy the play; she finished her homework very quickly.
This is my classmate,I very love my deskmate.
我的同桌叫徐琼,不怎么漂亮.脸上有一颗黑痣,扎着一根长长的辫子.她喜爱玩剪刀石头布,还爱买东西吃.她做数学作业动作很快,通常都是全班前几名.但是她很粗心老是做错题,有时她一次次的改正,最后还是错了.没办法她只好向我求援,我就开始仔仔细细教起了她.在我的帮助下终于做对了.这时她兴奋的坐在座位上,心中好象在呐喊：“我做对啦!”
她虽然学习不怎么样,但是我还是挺佩服她的.我从她那里学到了很多东西,比如她会发明很多小游戏,让我们尽情的玩；她完成作业的速度很快等等.
这就是我的同桌,我十分喜欢我的同桌.
同桌英语作文批改外教【四】
1、文章杂而不乱，能做到详略得当，重点突出。
2、文章对气氛渲染充分而恰到好处，对文章重点……作了细腻而传神的刻画。
3、切合实际，蕴含着朴素而深刻的哲理，读来令人精神振奋，情绪激昂。
4、这篇文章充满了激情，从字里行间能体会到小作者的喜爱之情。全文层次清晰，语句流畅。
5、事例叙述生动、具体、趣味性强，且与前面的比喻一脉相承。最后，作者用寥寥数语，表现出了自己的情感，令人感动。
6、文章前后连贯，形成完整的形象。
7、文章语言清新活泼，描写能抓住事物的主要特征，篇幅短小精悍，值得一读。
8、本文内容生动丰富，语言新颖清爽，结构独特合理。
9、文章有详有略，言之有序，内容生动具体，不失为一篇佳作。
10、特写镜头别开生面，情趣盎然。全文充满童心童趣，读来倍感亲切。
11、文章能过清新有趣的语言，描写了童年的事。字里行间，充满童年真童趣，欢声笑语不绝于耳，不失为一篇佳作。
12、详略得当，虚实相生，是本文的两大特色，内容更丰富、更生动。
13、全文清新秀逸，亲切委婉，朴素而不落俗淘，值得借见。
14、全文语言生动准确，情节精彩曲折，仿佛将读者带进了开心乐园，令人眉开眼笑。
15、全文通俗易懂，趣味性强。
16、全文眉目清晰，生动紧凑，趣味性强。
17、注意观察具体事物，并展开合适的想象，这是本文的成功之处。
18、文章融情于景，边绘景边抒情，善于运用打比方的手法，使文章生动具体
19、文章内容新颖，结构合理，流畅连贯，自然通达。
20、本文取材真实生活，选材恰当，很有新意，段落分明，过渡自然，情趣盎然，可读性强。
21、全文语言流畅，行文舒展自如，自然洒脱，称得上是一篇较成功的之作。
22、本文语言虽然并不华丽，但却极为准确生动，情感丰富而真实，读来津津有味。
23、文章的结构简洁合理，作者对原文的理解也十分深刻透彻。全文语言铿锵有力，掷地有声，读来令人热血沸腾，心潮澎湃。
24、这篇作文取材新颖，构思奇妙，语言生动活泼。字里行间透露出清新的生活气息和儿童情趣。
25、文章按事情发展的顺序，记叙了……的事，语言比较流畅，层次较清楚，自始自终显得其乐融融。
26、全文节奏明快，语言清新，始终洋溢着诙谐与风趣，读来其乐无穷。
27、全文叙事集中，不枝不蔓，语言朴实流畅，感情真挚感人。
28、通篇文章语调轻松幽默，显得妙趣横生，读来令人爱不释手。
29、作者构思巧，善于选点展开，行文跌宕起伏，耐人寻味。
30、全文可圈可点的佳句不少，给文章增添了些文学情趣
同桌英语作文批改外教【五】
我的同桌是一个活泼开朗的女生，她长着一双小眼睛和一个小嘴巴，常常一副聪明其实的样子，她就叫刘田庆。
My deskmate is a lively and cheerful girl, she has a pair of small eyes and a small mouth, often a pair of smart in fact, she is called Liu Tianqing.
我和我的同桌刘田庆从三年级一直坐到五年级，可她总是打我或骂我，但也会对我好的时候，就说：有一次刘田庆过生日，她竟然请了我参加她的生日派对，可我并没有拒绝，到那天她的妈妈对我们都很热情，点了好多好吃的，可我大吃一顿，还有一次刘田庆在中午的时候要带我踢毽子，我说我不会踢毽子，她说：没关系随便踢，就在中午玩着玩着我就好像会踢了一样，就是我的同桌让我会踢毽子，让我热爱踢毽子。
My deskmate Liu Tianqing and I sat down from the third grade to the fifth grade, but she always beat me or scolded me, but also said when she was good to me: once Liu Tianqing had a birthday, she invited me to her birthday party, but I did not refuse, until that day her mother was very warm to us, ordered many delicious food, but I had a big meal, and once Liu Tianqing was in the middle I want to take me to kick shuttlecock at noon. I said I can't kick shuttlecock. She said: it's OK to kick shuttlecock casually. Just playing at noon is like I can kick shuttlecock. It's my deskmate that makes me able to kick shuttlecock, which makes me love to kick shuttlecock.
这就是我的同桌
This is my deskmate
同桌英语作文批改外教【六】
我的同桌叫蒋俊扬，是我们班的班长，兼数学组长她长着一双大大的眼睛，浓黑的眉毛和一张不大不小的嘴。然而她最令我敬佩的是她作为班长和数学组长负责的职业精神。
My deskmate called Jiang Junyang, is the monitor of our class, and math head she had a pair of big eyes, thick black eyebrows and a little mouth. What impressed me most, however, was her professionalism as a monitor and a math team leader.
记得有一次，我们班的同学违反了纪律，上课前乱跑，并且大声喧哗，她管教违反纪律的同学们，他们却说：“你管得着吗？别当了班长就不知天高地厚”我在一旁感到着急，想帮她“助阵”，出乎我的意料，我的同桌好像并不着急，她十分冷静地对同学门说：“我这个班长，就是为了管你们才推选出来的，我就是比你级别高，如果不服气，你也当上班长试试！”
Remember, once our class classmate violated discipline, before class run around, and loud noise, she discipline discipline students, they said: "&ldquo, you can manage?" When the monitor is not bragging ” I feel anxious at the side, to help her to help out “ ”, to my surprise, my deskmate doesnt seem very anxious, she calmly told the students said: “ I am the monitor, is to you only elected, I am better than you high level, if not convinced, when you try on the monitor! ”
还有一次，一个同学的数学作业完成得很差，想蒙混过关，但是由于数学组长??古瑶音的认真负责，他的作业被发现了。她对那位同学说：“你的作业很马虎，请重做一遍。”没想到那位同学却说：“哎呀，别那么小气嘛，反正老师又不会骂你。”她很认真地对那位同学说：”作业不是应付了事的，它是课后复习的一种好方法，你对作业的态度不对，这次作业，我不能收！”那位同学先是“沉思状”，然后如梦初醒般的站起来，红着脸飞快的走出了教室；
Another time, a students math homework is done bad, want to muddle through, but because of the ancient mathematics leader?? Yaoyin responsible, his work was discovered. She said to the student, "&ldquo, your homework is sloppy. Please do it again.". ” unexpectedly, the student said, "“ Oh, dont be so stingy, the teacher wont scold you anyway.". &rdquo: she told the student very seriously, "&rdquo, homework is not something to deal with. Its a good way to review after class. You dont have the right attitude towards homework. I cant accept this assignment."! ” the students should be “ meditation like ” then, like as if wakening from a dream to stand up, red face quickly went out of the classroom;
这就是我们的班长。
This is our monitor.
