春天,百花齐放,正是花儿争奇斗艳、“心花怒放”时。而中山公园,别有一番景致。
虽然,中山公园耍的拆迁了,显得较空荡。但却是一片生机勃勃的景象:听!有优美动听的歌曲;有鸟儿卖弄自己的喉咙,有小孩的欢笑,有老人的奏乐,这难道不是绝妙的乐曲吗?看!到处都有草绿、花红,更是一派新气象!到处都有悦耳的鸟叫鸣,就像唱歌一样。
刚下过几阵蒙蒙细雨,中山公园像被刷新过一样,一切都是新的。微风吹拂着千万条才展开带黄色的嫩绿的柳丝,青的草,绿的叶,各色鲜艳的花,都像赶集似地聚拢来,形成了光彩夺目的春天。小燕子从南方赶来了,为忠山公园增添了许多生机。
中山公园的柳树发芽了;小草探出头来,四处张望,它一味地向上,用自己星星点点的绿色之城了一块块绿茵茵的地毯,给大地母亲传上了一件绿茸茸的春装;小花也从春姑娘的怀抱里苏醒过来。我眼前的一切都变得焕然一新、生机勃勃,令人目不暇接。
花园里,绿油油一片,还夹杂着许多花:玫瑰花、月桂花、菊花、茶花。多得数不清呢!真像一个花海!
在牌子不远处,一个头系围巾,臂挎皮包,怀抱一个二、三岁孩子的中年妇女,正在用疑惑的目光,看着牌子下站着的那几个大男人。那个中年妇女为何不站在“母子上车处”那儿呢?原来那里已被这些大男人占据了,根本没有她容身的地方。
咦!真奇怪,这不是母子上车处吗?这几个大男人也不符合条件呀?这们不应该站在这里呀!哦,我明白了,他们一定不识字,不会呀,看他们的装束,个个衣冠楚楚,象个绅士似的,不应该连这五个字都不认识吧。那他们可能是没看见?也不可能,那五个字多醒目啊,只要眼睛没问题,肯定看得见。我知道了,他们识字,也看得见,只是装作没看见。
你瞧,第一个人,胖墩墩的,穿的大衣、裤子和皮鞋都是国际名牌,好象是个干部,而且有知识,有文化,可他依然站在母子上车处的位置。他眯着眼睛,旁若无人的样子,一看就是个虚伪的人,让人讨厌。
再看第二个人,戴顶军帽,穿件军大衣,两手兜里,闭着眼睛,盛气凌人。其实他心里没底,所以才闭上眼睛,躲避周围人的目光。警备
第三个人太可笑了,矮矮的个子,戴着一顶十分时髦的.帽子,两眼直勾勾地看着前方,不知道在想什么。大鼻下,有一张大嘴,嘴角向下撇着,看着让人厌恶。
最可笑的是第四个人,他索性戴上个大口罩,可能是怕别人认出来。他穿了件皮大衣,象是名医务工作者,他两眼角向下耷拉着,看起来既滑稽,又让人鄙视。
还有……
这些人明明认识字,为什么要装成假文盲呢?因为他们自私自利,只想到自己的利益,不为别人着想。他们早已把中华民族尊老爱幼的美德抛到了脑后,别看他们表面很干净,可内心是肮脏的。
由此我想到,社会上这种现象还真屡见不鲜:草坪上明明立着禁止践踏的牌子,可偏偏有人上去踩;公共场所明明写着禁止吸烟,可偏偏有人大大方方地吞云吐雾……
为什么会有如此现象呢?因为这些人是假文盲,真无德!
【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
秋风送爽,汕头中山公园第二十三届菊花展览也随之开始了。
今天,我兴高采烈地来到中山公园。
一进门,一阵阵清香扑鼻而来,让人心旷神怡。走过架在月眉河上面的大桥,眼前一新。首先映入眼帘的是一只用菊花做的孔雀,孔雀开着屏,好华丽啊!菊花孔雀前面是一个大花坛,两色菊花构成了心心相对的画面。花坛左右是两根柱子,柱子上绿意盎然,布满了花草,柱上还有用塑料做成的巨龙,多漂亮啊!
继续走,路旁,一簇簇鲜艳芬芳的菊花簇拥着用菊花做成的花篮,无比美丽、芬芳。走过大牌坊,看到被五颜六色的菊花紧紧围住的孙中山雕像,远远望去,就像一圈彩霞围住孙中山。作文
接着继续走,就来到了菊花展台。台上有各种各样的菊花:大车菊、泉乡银山菊、佳水流霞菊、玉龙戏水菊等。其中,我最喜欢的是玉龙戏水菊。玉龙戏水菊金黄耀眼,花瓣儿是细长条状的向四周喷出,酷似烟花,别提多漂亮了!
再往里走,穿过富满农家风趣的农家乐,我来到了公园中心广场。刚进门,就被眼前的美丽景色迷住了:各个片区的菊花五彩斑斓,红的似火,粉的似霞,蓝的似海,黄的似金……最引人注目的是广场中心的大花篮。大花篮高6、5米,外表是用竹条编织而成的,里面盛满了各种各样的菊花,鲜艳芬芳,招引来了许多小蜜蜂和小蝴蝶,它们在花篮边翩翩起舞,采蜜、嬉戏。给深秋的公园平添了一抹春*。作文
菊花,你美丽芬芳,在瑟瑟秋风中傲然挺立。你用多彩的花朵点缀着单调的秋色,你用挺立的身躯向人们讲述着顽强的涵义。人们常说我们是祖国的花朵,那么我不愿做带刺的玫瑰,也不愿做娇嫩的茉莉,而是做一多在秋风中傲然挺立的菊花,去勇敢的面对一切困难与挑战。
帮理不帮亲是中国历代传承的行为准则,但是社会发展到今天已不是这样子啦。譬如说吧,某人在街上被狗咬了,这人理所当然地向狗的主人讨要医药费,而往往狗主人只会敷衍一两句,然后狗主人的儿子就跳出来大讲“道理”,接着儿子那当官的老丈人也跳了出来,骂被咬之人撒泼使赖,对狗咬人一事却一字不提。天理何在!“韩白骂战”也是这个样子。先是白烨不止一次说韩寒的文学不够文学之类的话,韩寒看了那些话就骂了白烨,而白烨不答话,然后白烨的哥们跳了出来,接着哥们的儿子也跳了出来……跳来跳去,全是些不相***人,都只听说自己的亲朋好友被骂了,就不管孰是孰非,这个说韩寒是“红卫兵”,那个要抽韩寒俩巴掌,这都什么乱七八糟啊,典型的“帮亲不帮理”。
星期天早上,我和爸爸、妈妈吃完早餐,就向我们的目的地——中山公园进发。
我们从正大门南门开始,沿着巨石铺成的台阶,一路向上。中山公园绿树成阴,被称为“避暑胜地”。那里有各种各样的树,有梧桐、有桧柏、有鸡爪梨、有榆树、有三角槭、还有沙朴。大的、小的、粗的、细的,但数目最多的还是松树,简直就是天然的植物园。
我发现一个奇特的现象,那里的树“身材”都特别修长,我问爸爸:“这是为什么呢?”爸爸说:“因为植物的向光性,为了获取更多的阳光,它们都拼命地往上长,于是就出现了这种现象。”再向上走了一段,就到了总理纪念堂,里面刚好有个书画展,我们参观了以后,就沿着左边的山路,向公园的北侧走去。大概到了公园的西侧,我们发现有一个山洞,洞口被铁门锁住,外面还写着“普乐宫”三个大字。爸爸说,这原先是一个防空洞,在战争时期,这里是躲避敌人飞机炸弹的场所。在空调还没普及的年代,这里也是老百姓消暑的好地方。再走一会儿,我们就来到了公园的北坡,休息了一会儿继续向上爬,终于登上了顶。
中山公园不仅是奉化的标志性自然景观,更是奉化历史文化发展的见证。
漳州的中山公园是一座美丽的大公园。
走进东大门,映入眼帘的是宽阔的广场和巨大的造景瀑布——龙湫。龙湫下有个水池,水池里种了一些水生植物。瀑布流到水池里,发出“哗啦,哗啦”的清脆响声。在阳光的映照下,显得波光粼粼。往远处一看,那雪白的天主教堂屋顶映入眼帘。蓝天、绿树、教堂、龙湫,构成了一幅美丽的图画。
龙湫的后面,有一条小道,道旁栽种了几丛翠竹,用水泥砌成花台,人们在小道上散步累了,可以坐在花台上休息。清风吹来,一阵阵竹子的清香沁人心脾。想起爸爸常说的话:“宁可食无肉,不可居无竹。”真是有道理呀!
走过竹林,我们来到草坪上,草坪上开满了五颜六色的花朵,争奇斗艳。大人们在草地上看书、画画、舞剑、打太极拳,还有许多人在遛鸟,鸟儿发出了“叽叽喳喳”的叫声,好像正在比赛唱歌呢!有时来了一群小孩子,在草地上做游戏。
公园的北面是七星池。池中有很多小鱼,欢快地游来游去。有时有人扔下一整块馒头,鱼儿们就一拥而上抢夺,可是由于馒头太大,皮又太硬,鱼儿无从下口,所以馒头就在鱼群上滚来滚去,就像鱼儿在踢足球。
看过了七星池,我们沿着假山的斜坡走上了解放亭。从解放亭上往下看, 孙中山 先生的铜像在中山广场上熠熠生辉,还有些游人在和铜像合影呢!往远处看,大半个公园的景象尽收眼底,参天的大树,碧绿的草坪,美丽的花坛,悠闲的游人,快乐的孩子,缤纷的花伞……
走下解放亭,走过绿地,有一条林荫道。林荫道东边新扩建了一大片,有休闲的小广场、儿童游乐设施,还建了一个很别致的小凉亭,柱子是四棵榕树干,真特别!
这么美丽的公园,怎不让人流连忘返?
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