初中作文修改对照【一】
making prize of 逮住
fell upon them 向他们攻击
初中作文修改对照【二】
要准确规范，忌前后不一
有一指令性通知的初稿，提出了三点要求：
1.明晰责任、齐抓共管。2.分流管理、分级负责;3.查改并举，重在治理。
这段中，第一点、第二点的前半句用的都是顿号，而第三点前半句用的却是逗号，前后不一致。还有，第一点的结尾用的是句号，而第二点的结尾用的却是分号，也是前后不一致。这些都应该统一起来，才显得对称。公文的标点符号使用不能马虎，要注意顿号、逗号、分号、句号等点号表示的是不同层次的停顿，使用得当，句子就能形成起伏均匀的节奏感。后来，这段修改为：
1.明晰责任，齐抓共管。2.分流管理，分级负责。3.查改并举，重在治理。
这样，通过标点的规范使用，可以表明\"三点要求\"相互之间的平等、平行关系。
初中作文修改对照【三】
：trellised up 用棚架支撑着
in most tempting show 最诱人的样子
初中作文修改对照【四】
A bear used to boast of his excessive love for man.saying that he never worried or mauled him when dead .The fox observed .with a smile :"I should have thought more of profession if you never eaat him alive ."
Better save a man from dying than slalve him when dead.
初中作文修改对照【五】
A jackdaw, as vain and conceited as jackdaw could be, picked up the feathers which some peacocks had shed, stuck them amongst his own, and despising his old companions, introduced himself with the greatest assurance into a flock of those beautiful birds .They, instantly detecting the intruder, stripped him of his borrowed plumes, and falling upon him with their beaks sent him about his business .The unlucky jackdaw, sorely punished and deeply sorrowing, betook himself to his former companions, and would have flocked with them again as if nothing had happened .But they, recollecting what airs he had given himself, drummed him out of their society, while one of those whom he had so lately despised, read him this lecture ："Had you been contented with what nature made you, you would have escaped the chastisement of you r betters and also the contempt of you r equals。”
初中作文修改对照【六】
读懂教师在“眉批”和“总批”中提了的意见，明确修改习作的方法。
初中作文修改对照【七】
A Fox, just at the time of the vintage, stole into a vine-yard where the ripe sunny Grapes were trellised up on high in most tempting show. He made many a spring and a jump after the luscious prize, but, failing in all his attempts, he muttered as he retreated："Well what does it matter! The Grapes are sour!"
