早就听说人民公园景色美,神往已久,今天我有幸身临其境,的确名不虚传。
走进公园,映入眼帘的是一块大理石,上面是四个火红的大字:人民公园,格外醒目。
大理石后面是一座假山,虽然被铁丝网环绕着,但仍有游人翻越铁丝网爬上山去,大概是山顶的景色太诱人了吧!山上虽然都是黄土,可上面仍然生机勃勃。瞧,这面长了几棵昂首挺胸,枝繁叶茂的松 树,那面种了几棵虽矮小却十分茂盛的倒栽槐。地上绿草丛生,草地上盛开着各种各样的野花。看,这边长着一簇簇天蓝色的“仙女草”,还有一些叫不出名字的野花在山上扎根结蒂,煞是迷人。
假山背面是一个人工湖,又名“落花胡”,因为八月时节,湖畔的桂花经常飘落于湖面,所以此湖就有了“落花胡”这个美丽的名字。当你租一条小船,划到湖中央,或站在小桥上观察湖水,你都会发 现,无论站在哪个角度,水都是翠绿色的。透过青绿的湖水,你可以看见那一条条可爱的小鱼正在欢快地游来游去,忽而潜入水底,忽而又一跃而起,把游人都逗乐了。
再往东北处划,就是整个公园最美丽的小花园。里面生意盎然:树木顶天立地,最矮的树也得有3米高:地上小花小草虽然不起眼,但也十分茂盛,古诗说:“野火烧不尽,春风吹又生。”就形容杂草生 命力的强盛。在这里,来锻炼的人最多,而且大多数都是老年人。因为这里空气好,健身器材多。在这里不仅可以强身健体,海可以呼吸到新鲜空气,实在是一举两得。
人民公园不仅仅是赏心悦目,而且能陶冶人的情操,实在是热闹中一绝佳的去处。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
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