【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
1.不分白天和黑夜地工作,连休息天也不例外;
2.星期天也来学校上班;
3.忘记了自己的生日;
4.白发过早地爬上了他的双鬓,皱纹布满了他的前额;
(以上表现老师的辛勤工作)
5.下课时,把学生叫到办公室来喝水;
6.下课时,总是喜欢摸摸学生的头,帮学生系好衣扣;
7.学生生病,当天就去探望,还送去水果和点心;
8.学生家长出差,就让学生住到自己的家里;
9.学生生日时,花钱给学生送礼品;
10.自己生病了,就在医院给学生写信,关心学生的学习和进步;
11.学生家中贫困,老师就自己给学生垫付学费;
(以上表现老师爱生如子的高尚品质)
12.她的课是学生最喜欢听的;
13.她备课非常认真,备课本上总是写得满满的;
14.老师经常给我们讲课本以外的内容和知识,来扩大我们的'知识面;
15.他鼓励我们看课外书,还经常把一些好书介绍给我们;
16.他大胆地进行教学改革,上课的形式很新颖;17.他经常开展一些活动,来提高我们的学习兴趣;
(以上表现老师不断进取,敬业爱职)
18.他不仅指导我们学习文化知识,同时也教我们如何做人;
19.老师开展了一系列的德育活动,来提高我们的道德修养;
20.班级里发生了什么违规违纪的事情,他总是抓住不放,及时地进行教育;
21.他积极地与家长进行联系;
22.老师通过各种方式在不同的场合对学生进行思想品德教育;
23.他给我们补充了许多品德教育的材料,让我们记下来,并且要求背诵。高考
(以上表现老师注重对学生的品德教育)
在我家门前有一条小小的河,这条小河叫做"天桥"。记得小的时候,大概是六岁的时候,每天吃完晚饭过后,我便会独自一个人跑到家的楼顶,高高地站在楼顶上边,俯望着家门前"天桥"岸上的竹林。高高望去,这一排排的翠竹,像是一道天然的守护屏障一样,坚固地伫立在河岸上,守护着这一条源远流长的河流,让河流周围的一切生物在这里繁衍后代,营造了一副生机勃勃的景象。当夕阳从西边照在这一排排的绿竹上时,它们便会倒映在河面上,犹如是闪闪发光的一把把亮剑,有时候,看上去显得格外耀眼,格外的夺目。清晨的时候,亮晶的露珠落在了翠竹的叶子上,像是给翠竹注上了一种活沃的能量济,让绿竹显得更加翠绿,好像越长越年轻似的。它们总是高高地伫立在河岸上,常年都是那么的葱绿,富有旺盛的生命力,看着它们这一片翠林,真是让人神清气爽,宜人心境。
家乡的竹林可是能够给家乡人带来各种各样不同的用处,竹子可以做雕塑,还可以用来煮饭,竹叶可以用来包棕子和点心,竹笋更是可以用来送饭可见这竹子全身都是宝啊,把它最好的一切全都献给了我们的家乡人。在竹子辉煌的生命当中,它一直以以顽强的生命力著称,不管是在河边,还是在石缝间,不论是在草皮还是水泥地上,它们都能够以顽强的生命力,在上面破土而出,笔直地长着它们的身体。在我看来,它们就像是荒漠沙园的英勇勇士,无畏任何风吹雨打,无畏刮风下雪,它们总是高高地伫立在那里,永远都那么直,永远都那么绿。
从爸爸口中知道了,原来竹子有这么强的'生命力是有原因的。竹子在泥土里的根又多又密,这些根深深地扎根在了泥土当中,这些根就像它的手脚一样,牢牢地被绑住了在地底里,因此,竹子才能有这么强的生命力,不管在哪里,在任何环境当中,它们总是能够坚强地生长,一直才那么直,那么绿。
现在回想起家乡的竹林,我觉得我的心情就像是竹子扎根在泥土当中的根一样,那一片竹林已经深深地扎根在了我的内心,让我感慨万千,思绪潮涌。
我爱你!家乡河边的竹林。
老人始终静静地坐在矮屋前的石梯上,始终微笑地看着过往的人们向他们问候着,却始终收获着旁人的冷言冷语和那双双奇怪的眼神……
不知从什么时候开始,人们用“疯老太太”湮没了老人的姓氏;不知从什么时候开始,人们开始以消遣老人为开心的热点话题;不知从什么时候开始,大人们习惯用老人来吓唬爱吵闹的孩子们;不知从什么时候开始,人们匾额如此冷漠无情……不知道,真的不知道,没有人知道为什么,因为他们自己也忘记了是为什么……
儿时,看着老人安静的坐着,向那些认识的或不认识的人们搭讪着总会有些心有余悸,然后自己也灰溜溜的“逃走”,只留下老人那双让人读不懂的眼睛。大人们都说老人那时造了孽,儿子不成器,现在终遭报应了!
我现在尚且不能参透这因果,何况那时还小。只是说的人多了,也就听得多了,就没有人会花时间探讨了。偶尔会听见大人们训斥孩子:“你再闹,我让疯老太太把你领去”,然后,孩子便会消停了。
母亲还算是有涵养的,从不允许我们这样叫老人,按辈分还得叫她一声太奶奶每次路过矮屋子前,她总是对我笑着,偶尔说上两句话:“上学了?”“放学了?”起初还是有点害怕,但出于礼貌还是点头应付一下。后来,或许是熟悉了,感觉老人并无恶意,也就慢慢熟识了。
每次路过都会与她谈上几句,她有时也会问我学校里有趣的事,我也很乐意说,因为父母大多时候都很忙,没时间听我谈着那些“无聊”的话题。有时间的话,他们宁愿看看电视,或是早早的睡下了。
刚开始的时候母亲还会叮嘱一下我少与老人说话,可后来也不予理会了。童年就这样不知觉的溜走了,我告别了那条小路,也告别了路过小屋的机会。在另一个陌生的城市里,我偶尔也会怀念那小屋,那老人,但那毕竟只是偶尔。
有一次回家,偶然路过矮屋子门前,又看见老人,她还是那样静静的坐在石阶上……人们还是以那样的眼神打量着她……隐约听见她说:“很久没见那孩子了,别人都管我叫疯老太太,别的.孩子见了我也就只会躲得远远的,或是用石子扔我,只有她不会,也只有她会叫我一声太奶奶了”。一时间,我突然觉得有一点可悲,老人真的很容易满足,可是人们呢?连那么一点同情心都吝啬,连那么一声问候都不肯施舍……我向前走了过去,硬是挤出牵强的笑容:“太奶奶,我回来了,吃过饭了么?”她笑着打量我,没有说话……
我回学校的时候,她依旧坐在那里,那样子那矮小,等我走离很远的时候,隐约听到一个声音“放学了就早点回来,在学校被人欺负的时候记得回家”……
或许,人就是这样吧!总是吝啬着,自私着,冷漠着。他们总是让别人活在自己眼里,然后自己躲到别人眼里小心翼翼的活着!又有几个人能像老人一样坦然的活着?不管外界的是非,不管别人说什么。我们总是珍藏着自己的同情心,不肯给别人一点施舍,殊不知,我们只要施舍一点点,哪怕一点点,别人就会感激不尽……
多年以后,坐在矮屋前忍受着别人冷嘲热讽的该会是我们吧?只是怕到时我们不会有老人这样的胸襟了!
你看你总是说如果——如果我是大款、如果我再耐看点……你总是这样说,怪不得你永远也逃不掉这如果。
这下可好,你出门终于忘了带钥匙,回家路上你一摸口袋才发现钥匙不见了,你知道着急了。接着你开始朝四处张望,也不知道在望些什么,你眼神迷乱、嘴角抽搐,然后又要摸摸口袋,结果钥匙还是不在,于是使劲握起拳头,咬牙切齿,就好像要来一通河东狮吼——“谁偷我钥匙了!”
可是很遗憾,无人应声。你还不死心,又蹲下来仔仔细细地巡视一番,本来就近视,你像是要把地看穿了般,但果然还是不了了之,你终于彻彻底底地失望了,要么瘫坐在地上,要么就是踱来踱去。
你肯定要好生忙活,先是去问家里人找钥匙,实在不行还得去请开锁公司,想到这你就不得不一声接一声地叹气,你说如果当时出门肯花上一分钟的时间检查一下该多好。可惜你没有,你懊恼至极,不住地跺脚,还嘟囔着“真是该死”之类的话。
做完这些事,你才终于知道该去想办法开门了。你去找开锁公司,但是他们跟你要各种证件证明;你没办法了,请他们通融一下,可他们太讲原则,怕出事,怎样也不肯给你开锁。你气得对他们破口大骂,把他们都赶走了。
于是你彻底绝望,无奈地又是叹气,可怜巴巴地蹲在大门口,点上一根烟,仔细地抽,一根接着一根。终于熬到家人回来了,很快就把门打开,你一进门就躺到沙发上,吁了口气,感慨道:“终于可以休息会了,累死我了。”
半晌后你一抬头,发现钥匙竟还在平常的地方放着。你真的`忍不住了,砸墙、骂自己,甚至要伸手打自己一巴掌,这可的的确确是忍无可忍了。
这时儿子要来安慰你:“爹,莫生气,日子还是得过,不如好好休息去。”你挥手朝前方抡去,差点连儿子也打上了,儿子伤心地跑出门去,你才罢手。你终于还是知道累,回到床上呼呼地睡着了。
原以为这事过去了罢,可谁成想接下来的几天都没法安心地工作,老是想起那天。那天你什么事也没干成,心情差得要命,还把开锁公司的朋友骂走了,又差点打了儿子。你更加窝火,也没心情工作,又点起烟来抽。
隔几日你却又开始感慨第二天何必还要后悔;你看你总是这样。你总是要说如果,所以你总是要后悔,所以总是一天天地浪费自己的时间,所以你大概也只看到了那如果。
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