【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
难忘的西瓜皮每到夏天,天气炎热,人们就会津津有味的吃西瓜。当然,我也不列外。但我现在一看到吃完的西瓜皮,就让我回忆起那件令我后悔的事。那是发生在我五年级一个暑假的事。一天,爸爸买了一个很大的西瓜,让当时很口渴的我发现了,立刻三加五除二地把西瓜切了好几块,捧在手上边走边吃。
吃完后,刚想要扔西瓜皮时,脑子里突然想到一个坏点子:把这些西瓜皮放在门口小朋友家的附近,让他们踩到后滑一跤。说干就干,我立即将西瓜皮放在小朋友家的家门口,然后用几张纸盖了上去,躲在墙后面,等待着好戏的上演。这时,门口那个小朋友出来了,一蹦一跳的向我设下的“陷阱”逼近,我在墙后仔细地看着,还有5步,4步,3步,2步……只听“哎呦”一声,那个小朋友不偏不倚的正好踩在了我埋下的“陷阱”上,只见他一屁股坐在地上,“呜呜呜,我的屁股好疼”,他边摸着屁股边站了起。“哇哈哈哈哈。”我不由自主地笑了起来,表演精彩极了。之后,我就回家看电视了,但只要一想到那个就想笑。突然一声“叮咚”,我想:肯定是去买菜的妈妈回来了,今天要给我烧我最喜欢吃的西红柿炒鸡蛋。
我开门一看,果然是妈妈回来了,我又仔细一看,妈妈浑身狼狈不堪,手里袋子中的鸡蛋还破了好多。看妈妈的神情十分严肃,就知道肯定发生了什么事情,我就问了一句:“妈妈,发生什么事了?”妈妈气冲冲的说道:“别提了,今天买菜回来时,莫名其妙的滑了一跤,菜全都跌到了地上,仔细一看原来是西瓜皮害的。”我心里有点不安,心想:这西瓜皮不会就是我扔的那些吧?我就紧张地问道:妈妈,你是在什么地方踩到西瓜皮的?”妈妈愤怒的说:“就在附近小朋友家的门口踩到了,要是让我知道是哪个人扔的西瓜皮,我不把他皮给扒了。”
我心想:这下完了,和我埋下的西瓜皮是一个地方,这要让我妈知道非得塌一层皮下来。这时,我心里已经被吓的六神无主了,连忙找个理由,在我的书房里躲了起来。晚上,看着妈妈在那儿揉伤口,我心里像打翻了五味瓶一样难过的不得了。唉,这次真是我错了,就为了看一场好戏,还把妈妈给摔伤了,并且我最爱的西红柿炒鸡蛋也没了。我想去妈妈那儿道歉,可是又不敢去,只好心里默默的盼着妈妈,你快点好起来吧!
我缓缓地睁开眼睛,发现一只燕子趴在地上,紧闭双眼,嘴角不停地流淌着鲜血,染红了身下的羽毛,身体痛苦地缩成一团,翅膀还在微微地抖动着,腿也在不停地抽搐,似乎是想站起来,重新飞向那向往的天空,可是它再也站不起来了。终于,它躺在那儿一动不动了。
我正想走过去看看它,这时,一个黑影闪过,落在了它的身边,原来是它的小伙伴来找它了。小家燕还不知道这残酷的事实,它轻轻地呼唤着它的朋友,可没有用。它开始着急起来,一声又一声地呼喊,好像在说:“朋友,快起来,这里危险,你别躺在这里,快醒醒,我们换个地方再玩!”但等来的却是“哗啦啦”的.雨声,小燕子没有放弃,而是用更大的声音呼喊,并且用爪子紧紧攥住,使劲地往后拖,想带它离开这里,可不管它多么使劲,朋友还是纹丝不动。小燕子不拽了,呆呆地望着天空,它似乎明白了,昔日的伙伴已经离它而去了。
天空还在下着雨,似乎更阴沉了,空气仿佛凝固了一般,小燕子带着一颗受伤的心,一步三回头地离开了,我仿佛听见它的心在哭泣。
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