【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
11生前凡是天才的人,死后就不可能不化作灵魂。
12虽不养鸟,每天早晨,有鸟语盈耳。无需挂画,门外有幅巨画,名叫自然。
13秋天,这北国的秋天,若留得住的话,我愿意把寿命的三分之二折去,换得三分之一的零头。
14二十四桥仍在,波心荡,冷月无声。念桥边红药,年年知为谁生。
15花自飘零水自流------此情无计可消愁,才下眉头,却上心头。
16两情若是久长时,又岂在朝朝暮暮。
17多情应笑我,早生华发。人生如梦,一樽还酹江月。
18多情自古伤离别,更那堪冷落清秋节------
19问君能有几多愁,恰似一江春水向东流。
20出师未捷身先死,常使英雄泪满襟。
21无边落木萧萧下,不尽长江滚滚来。
22同是天涯沦落人,相逢何必曾相识。
23安能摧眉折腰事权贵,使我不得开心颜。
24对酒当歌,人生几何。譬如朝露,去日苦多。
25百川东到海,何时复西归?少壮不努力,老大徒伤悲。
26久在樊笼里,复得返自然。
27捐躯赴国难,视死忽如归。
28长太息以掩涕兮,哀民生之多艰。
帮理不帮亲是中国历代传承的行为准则,但是社会发展到今天已不是这样子啦.譬如说吧,某人在街上被狗咬了,这人理所当然地向狗的主人讨要医药费,而往往狗主人只会敷衍一两句,然后狗主人的儿子就跳出来大讲“道理”,接着儿子那当官的老丈人也跳了出来,骂被咬之人撒泼使赖,对狗咬人一事却一字不提.天理何在!“韩白骂战”也是这个样子.先是白烨不止一次说韩寒的文学不够文学之类的话,韩寒看了那些话就骂了白烨,而白烨不答话,然后白烨的哥们跳了出来,接着哥们的儿子也跳了出来......跳来跳去,全是些不相***人,都只听说自己的亲朋好友被骂了,就不管孰是孰非,这个说韩寒是“红卫兵”,那个要抽韩寒俩巴掌,这都什么乱七八糟啊,典型的“帮亲不帮理”.
在课本上,我看到这样一幅漫画:冬天在一个车站专供母子上车的地方,几个衣冠楚楚的大男人却站在那里,对于旁边“母子上车处”的牌子却视而不见。车站旁边,站着一位抱孩子的妇女,十分无奈,却又敢怒不敢言。
看完这则漫画,我感到十分气愤。他们真得是文盲吗?不是吧。当今社会,真正的文盲有几个?真是文盲还会觉得自渐形秽也没有脸面站在这儿。而且,他们中有的人一副干部模样,有的人还故意闭着眼睛,怎么可能是文盲呢?
在生活中,这种假文盲、真自私的行为很多,令人反感。如在公交车上特设的“老、弱、病、残、孕”专席,许多身强力壮的年轻人却坐在哪里。而当真正的特需乘客上车时,却没有人让座,对于车上赫然贴着的“请主动给老、弱、病、残、孕乘客让座”的标语,许多人视而不见。倒是一些六、七岁还不太认字的小孩,会给他们让座。假文盲们不管,不太懂事的小孩能做,这是什么现象?他们难道连小孩都不如吗?!我想,这对于那些弱势群体来说,即使在炎热的夏天,也会感到寒意,是心寒!
说实话,在贴有明确标语的地方装成假文盲去故意违反规则最令人厌恶,比起违反那些没有明确、基本指出的规则,这种“假文盲、真自私”的人是真正的小人。真不知道这些人为什么要这样做,难道按标语要求做就会损失很多吗?不会。最多不过是多走点路、多站会儿、多等会儿、累一点儿,可这又有什么呢?久违了这么一点点儿,去做一次“假文盲、真自私”的彻头彻尾的小人,值吗?做一次也许没有什么,但有一就有二,有二就有三,这样一而再再而三的做下去,你真得是赚了吗?不,是赔了,赔上了公德。
所以,我呼吁:不要为了一时图省事儿而做“假文盲、真自私”的小人,哪怕累一点儿,也不能在品德上打折扣呀!
其次,我又想到了一个问题:除了自身的素质外,又是什么助长了这种行为的嚣张气势呢?我想到了那位妇女。她上车的位置被占,而那“母子上车处”的牌子就是证据,真理在妇女手上,完全可以说服那群男子。妇女为什么不走上前去,指着牌子对那些男人说“同志,您们站错了!”我就不相信,那些男人的脸皮就这么后,面对妇女的指责就一点不感到脸红!也许,弱小的妇女并不是男人们的对手,但毕竟,在对于错的较量中,对总会取胜。如果因能力的强弱而改变了对于错的胜负,那么社会成了什么样子?! 华君武先生的`《假文盲》生动形象,具有很深的蕴味,他批判了“假文盲、真自私”的行为,同时也告诉人们对待错误要大胆提出,不能因能力而改变对于错的胜负。
不久前爆发的“韩白骂战”闹得沸沸扬扬,在这里,我不谈事件根源,也不论孰是孰非.我不懂文学,当然也就不会争论什么文学不文学的,(这事儿恐怕不是文学争论那么简单咯)只说说从中看到的几个社会现象.
长辈说:“不对,你是错的.”那么你就是错的.如果你说自己没错并指出长辈的错误,就会被说成叛逆不尊重长辈,然后一群长辈围着你骂(一般地,他们不会耐心教育.还教育个屁,他们连是非黑白都不辨,就他们说的是真理).尊老爱幼是中华民族的传统美德,所以晚辈应该尊敬爱护长辈,但是,我认为长辈并不就是年龄比自己大的人,对那些不辨是非歪曲事实甚至诋毁别人的人,纵然他们的年龄比自己大也不必把他们当长辈来尊敬,而是要大胆地指出他们的错误,毕竟爱心的泛滥,只会让他们错上加错;等到他们改正了错误,晚辈还是要视他们为长辈,而且加倍地尊敬他们.
一个人不仅要对自己负责还要对家庭、社会、民族、国家负责。一个有责任心的人,不是把责任心挂在嘴上,而是要体现在具体行动中。一个学生在课堂上认真听讲,努力学习是对自己负责的表现。平时注意勤俭节约,不乱花钱是对家庭负责的表现。把水泼在教室里,自己用拖把将水擦净,这是对班级对同学负责的表现。走到水池边看到水龙头开着水哗哗地流,伸手把水龙头关上;白天发现走廊上的电灯亮着,随手把灯关掉;把手上的废纸、食品包装袋等送到垃圾箱,这是对学校负责、对社会负责的表现。抗日战争时期,无数中华儿女面对日本侵略者的刺刀走上抗日的战场,甚至献出自己的生命,这是对民族负责,对国家负责的.表现。
一个有责任心的人应该明辨是非,懂得什么该做,什么不该做。知道怎样做是对的,怎样做是错的。比如我们每天做广播操,无论是集合动作要迅速,上下楼梯不拥挤,还是做每一节动作要到位,都要生自己对自己负责,锻炼出一个健康的体魄,将来有个好身体,能更好地生活和工作。同学们懂得了这个道理就要自觉地做好广播操。再比如在宿舍里要求讲究卫生;不大声喧哗,保持安静而清洁的环境,是对学生的健康负责,每一个学生都要自觉遵守。
同学们,有责任心是一个人完美人格的体现,生活中有很多小事都能体现一个人有没有责任心。一个道德缺乏,责任心不强的人是得不到别人的尊重的,也是无法与他人合作的,必然不能适应未来社会的需要。
同学们,做一个有责任心人的吧!这样你才能收获有意义的人生!
我认为有关于“油条哥”的新闻最应该刊登在《暖闻》栏目上,因为我认为这一则新闻可以唤醒人们埋在心底的善良,唤醒人们的良知。
做一个善良的“油条哥”,就应该有一颗善良的心,对待他人真诚友好,让他人的心得到温暖,让他人的`心不再孤独。
偶然的一次旅行,如果你遇到了一个孤苦伶仃或是身体残疾的人在公园或是小路乞讨时,那么你就不要管别人的身体干净还是坑脏,不要管别人是真情还是假意,你就给一些零用钱给他吧,因为你这个善良的举止,也许能唤起他的良知,你这位善良的“油条哥”,也许能唤起他那颗善良的心。
做一个善良的“油条哥”,那就应该有着一颗善良的心,就应该默默地为社会做出奉献。
一位处于退休年龄的老奶奶,本应过着安度晚年、无忧无虑的生活,却在天还没亮的情况下起床并做好早饭,然后骑着三轮车将早饭以及摆地摊用的桌椅运到小学学校门口,并以五角钱的价格把早饭卖给前来上学的孩子们,这就是家喻户晓的五角钱奶奶的故事。五角钱奶奶宁愿自负盈亏,也要让孩子们吃好早饭、安心读书。五角钱奶奶的行为举止让全学校的师生及家长们万分感慨。
五角钱奶奶用自己那颗善良的心来填饱学生们的肚子,默默地为社会做出奉献。做一个善良的“油条哥”,就应该拥有着一颗善良的心,就不应该为自己的一丝私心而伤害他人利益。
如今一些无良商家为了满足自己的利益,不惜在自己的商品中加入了一些损害他人健康的化学物质。
例如,一些奶粉被加入三聚氰胺,一些蔬菜水果被加入了催熟剂,一些食物保质期已经过了期却还在售卖等,这些无良商家为了自己的利益而损害了消费者的利益。
作为社会中的一份子,我认为:我们应该有一颗善良的心,去做一个善良的“油条哥”,默默地为社会做出奉献,只要每个人都有一颗善良的心,为社会上的人们做出一点爱,那么社会就会变成美好的人间。
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