今天,是我们班主任老师的生日,昨天,我们已经全体捐款,为班主任老师捐齐了买蛋糕的费用。
中午,我们派出几名队员出校门去买蛋糕。半个小时过去了,蛋糕也买来了,我们把蛋糕放在讲台上。上课铃响了,我们静静地等侯着老师的到来。老师来了!她打开门,在进来的一刹那,她惊呆了。我们开始唱生日割。唱完后,老师竟然板着脸问我们谁是“领头羊”,是谁去买的蛋糕。我们都慌了,以为是犯了错,谁知后来老师话锋一转,说:“刚刚我在门口就知道你们要给我惊喜,所以很感动,很谢谢你们能够给我买蛋糕。”听完这段话,我激动地热泪盈眶。接着,老师笑着开始分蛋糕。
“啊,真好吃!”同学们边吃边说。我觉得就像在吃蜜一样,嘴里甜,心里更甜!
还有几个同学为年级的其他老师送去了蛋糕,让其他老师共同分享。
今天,我真开心,让老师过了一次最有意思的生日,看到老师高兴,我们心里更是高兴。
不知不觉一节课就这样过去了,我真是从来都没有这样高兴过!
抬头,夜像是被打翻的墨水瓶,那么地深那么地浓。月亮似是因为娇羞的少女,埋首于黑云中,几丝清冷的月光洒向人间。星星眨巴着水汪汪的大眼睛,似是想与我玩耍,我挥挥手轻轻说了声不,我看见它们生气地隐入云中。回头,眼前是已沉沉沉沉睡去的公寓大楼,人们早已进入梦乡。看者我面前的白炽灯,几只蛾子飞舞着。
那么,我呢?我被捆绑上一个沉重的行囊,背着它们,与无数位武艺高强的人一同攀登那做巍峨的山,那山叫做“第一名”。谁先到达谁就是第一。一不小心,一失足,跌下深渊,万劫不复。大家都卯足全劲,手脚并用一个劲地往上爬。我们的行囊太重了,于是,我们卸下友谊,健康,快乐。这样子,我们只剩冷漠,无情,以及太多的如牛毛作业。
静静的夜色中,我静静地在写作业,时钟静静地在走。我们谁也不影响谁,谁也不吵着谁。
又是新的一天,又是漫天纷飞地责骂。看着那鲜红地分数,红墨水在纸上绽开殷红地涟漪。摔着我地试卷,心碎成一地地琉璃,我静静地扫着,扫进心里阴暗处。我的泪在滑过冰冷地面颊,“啪嗒”,滴在试卷上。黑色地墨水顿时绽开,绽出,绽出一朵黑色地花蕾,可与涟漪媲美。
母亲接过试卷,沉沉地叹了口气,她的鬓角已带雪,脸上褶皱深浅不一,我仿佛看到岁月在母亲脸上刻画地沧桑。我说:“妈,你放心,我一定出人头地。”我握着试卷,数在颤抖,走回房间,无法不大声哭泣。
母亲望女成凤地期盼,如同一把枷锁,磨损我地羽翼。于是,我又一头扎进题海,冰冷的海水刺痛我的肌肤。所有东西沉沉压着我,我带着父母的期盼,向深海里游去。混着冰冷的海水,我动了动嘴唇。
我说:“让我放一天假吧!”
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
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