1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
我们的童年是金色的,是快乐的,当然,也是在长辈的精心呵护下茁壮成长的。我们的成长需要掌声,需要失败,需要喝彩的,但是,在我们的生活中,是最需要鼓励的。
我曾经在网上看过一篇小学生特别报道新闻:
在一所小学里,有一名三年级的学生,他叫张肖。一次,学校举行运动会,班主任来到班里选运动员,张肖参加了400米长跑,可就在练习当中,他发现自己的.长跑能力不是很好,而且每一次练习,他都会跑错跑道或是比别人起步晚,同学们就嘲笑他,说他比蜗牛的十八代老祖宗还要慢……张肖为此而失去了信心。于是他向班主任提出不参加这次比赛。老师问他为什么要退出比赛,张肖说自己不如别人,就连体育不及格的同学都比他跑得快,而且同学们也经常嘲笑他跑得不如一个小女生……
老师听后,愤怒地告诉张肖:张肖!你怎么可以就为这一点挫折就放弃比赛,同学们怎么说,就让他们说去吧,有什么大不了的,就算你跑的不如一个小女生,但是只要你肯去努力,肯去练习,你肯定会跑得很快的,这时,那些嘲笑你的同学就会去尊敬你,敬佩你,老师我看好你的,我会帮你加油打气的,张肖,不要放弃,找回自己的信心,证明给那些嘲笑你的同学看,加油!
听完这些老师鼓励他的话,张肖满眼泪水,拉着老师的手,急忙感谢老师,老师却笑了笑。
从那天开始,张晓就努力练习,如果有同学在旁边嘲笑他,他的心里总是想:你们说去吧,我会用我自己的付出证明给你们看,让你们大吃一惊。
就这样,一天天过去了,张肖一天比一天跑得快,终于,张肖的付出没有白费,在全校的长跑中他拿得了冠军,那些嘲笑他的同学对他刮目相看。这时,有位同学问他,是什么让他得到冠军,张晓却笑着说,这是老师给我自信心的源泉。
看完这篇报道,我的心中涌出了一个问题:为什么老师只说了几句鼓励的话,就能让张肖取得这么大的成功?我想了又想,终于找到了答案,张肖并不想让老师失望,再加上他要让嘲笑他的同学大吃一惊……•
我知道了,这就是鼓励的力量,就像诸葛亮的东风。
东风,寓意着迎来了春天——这个鸟语花香、莺歌燕舞的美好季节,这个新年那新的希望,新的开始。那么世界,究竟又发生了那些微妙的事情呢?
东风欣欣然吹到了这个宁静的冰雪世界。用她那无比温暖的双手,拥抱着冰冷的皑皑白雪,让白雪消融在她的怀里。
大地似乎就在这一瞬间,焕然一新。四处都洋溢起欢跃与激动。苍鹰如利箭般,飞驰过原野、草地,朝着蔚蓝的天空长吼一声,好似唤醒了从北方远道而来的大雁。大雁们轮番在空中用高贵优雅的身姿做了几个滑翔动作。冲着地上高傲的叫唤。东风一吹,安眠于巢中的百灵,舞弄着妖娆的身段,拼尽全身力气用自己平生最动人的歌喉,向着森林高声啼鸣。东风一吹,一身乌黑的乌鸦也探出脑袋对着百灵“呱呱”叫了几声,也没人反对。东风掠过之处,鸟儿们都开起音乐会,互相祝福着新年快乐。因为春天,来了。
东风又来到树木的身边,轻轻一旋转,跟着的就是漫天飞舞的残叶,残叶被卷得不知所向,但是残叶下面正在萌芽生长的嫩草显露出来,那样的翠色欲流,那样的积极蓬勃。远望,东风将残叶全部卷走,一下子,青草变得一望无际了。而那一棵棵拔地而起的参天大树,也格外茂盛,东风一吹,它身上的叶子跟着轻轻颤动,真不愧为玉树临风。如果来了一阵稍大的风儿,那么一片片绿油油的小草和苍翠欲滴的大树上所有树叶便茫茫然随着一起朝西边屈膝,因为吹来的是东风。其实这一片大地换上绿色的新衣,也全都是东风帮的忙。
东风又跃入人们的摸不透的心中,顿时人们对新年的顾忌都烟消云散,留下的只是希望于前进的动力。仿佛人的心是潘多拉的魔法盒。东风也就是春天,给人们带来了快乐,带来了好好过这新的一年的信心与勇气。
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