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第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
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第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
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第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
你爱茶,走到哪儿,都喜欢拎着茶杯,当你掀开茶盖时那淡淡的茶香氤氲在空气中,让人心旷神怡。无意间发现你也如茶叶般枯瘦。不见了你矫健的身姿,不见了你健硕的皮肤,只是那弯曲的背,深深的皱纹,但你那犀利的眼神仍是那样的令人颤栗。
你我走过的日子是短短的童年是次次的误读与简单的包裹,是你无声的爱与我的无知彼此充实。爷爷,到了此刻我才懂得了你,原来你是爱我的。
你冷峻古板,我却爱笑,你沉默寡言,而无知的我却把你无声的爱误读了,我对你心怀不满,你对我却满怀期待。
小时候,我参加了“书法社”,可是在社里我总觉得自己的字与我的同学相差甚远,这时你鼓励我说:“好好努力,正如茶那样即使原来多么平凡,但经过了***青、晒干、炒制……那原本翠绿的它变得柴瘦、干枯,但它冲泡时的`清香令人心醉,这时它拥有了美丽的内涵,只要努力就会拥有美丽内涵。”我应了一下,然后就离开了。过了一个月,我参加了书法比赛得了三等奖,虽然有些遗憾,但得到了老师的肯定,我原本以为当你看到这一切时会很高兴,但你只是看了看,扬起嘴微微一笑。我拿着奖状,心里有许多不甘,心情也直落谷底。
有时,看到爷爷那对我漠不关心的神情,总觉得自己是那么多余……
有一次,爷爷奶奶到我家过年。当我看到爷爷时,他对我扬起了笑脸,我的心被蛰了一下,总觉得这是他第一次对我笑。我有个坏习惯,睡觉总喜欢踢被子,这不这几天鼻涕横流,呵欠连连……可是这几天当我起床时被子总盖得好好的,我以为是妈妈,顿时心里洋溢着浓浓的暖意。深夜了,因为感冒难受,我久久难以入睡,这时门缝忽然射进一道光,我赶紧闭上眼睛,他帮我盖好了被子,用手背抚摸我的额头,接着叹了口气便离开了,我缓缓睁开眼睛,那弯弯的背影渐渐消失在黑暗之中……这手的温度,手的粗糙难道是爷爷……
你我走过的日子是种种误会缠绵的鸿沟,任性的我不知道该如何化解,只是让彼此的误会愈演愈深。在一次与奶奶的谈话中,她说:“你爷爷啊,真是个傻瓜,上一次你得奖时他不知道有多高兴,整天逢人就说我孙子啊字写得好……可是他硬要装着不屑。”我此刻才明白原来爷爷的不屑是对我的鼓励,是要让我不要沉迷在一时的成功中。原来你我一起走过的日子里不是一次次彼此的误解,也有爱,也有幸福。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
人们常说,有梦想才能有作为,有行动才能有成功。文学大师林语堂曾经说过:“梦无论怎样模糊,总潜伏在我们的心底,使我们的心境永远得不到宁静,直到这些梦想成为现实。”但想要使“这些梦想变为现实”,行动才是唯一的手段的保证。
我看到过许多名人的故事,他们小时侯都有自己的目标,我也知道,他们把目标分成一小段一小段来实现,最终,达到了梦想的高峰。但是,我始终没有找到梦想,直到今天,我读了《面对自己——有梦想才能有作为》这篇文章中的一个故事后,我才找到了自己的梦想。
一条小毛虫朝着太阳升起的地方,慢慢爬行着。它在路上遇到一只蝗虫,蝗虫问它:“你要到哪里去?”毛毛虫边爬边回答:“我昨天晚上做了一个梦,梦见我在大山顶上看见了整个山谷。我喜欢梦中看到的情景,我要把它变为现实。”蝗虫很惊讶地说:“你烧糊涂了?还是脑子进水了?你怎么可能达到那个地方。你只是一条小毛虫耶!对你来说,一块石头就是高山,一个水坑就是无法逾越的障碍。”但小毛虫已经爬远了,根本没有理会蝗虫的话,继续前进。后来,蜘蛛、鼹鼠、青蛙和花朵都以同样的口吻劝小毛虫放弃这个打算。但小毛虫始终坚持向前爬行……终于,小毛虫精疲力尽,用最后的力气建成一个可以休息的小窝——蛹,就“死”了,动物们都来瞻仰这它,等到它们第二次来的时候,小毛虫贝壳状的蛹开始破裂,一只美丽的'蝴蝶出现了!随着轻风吹拂,美丽的蝴蝶翩翩飞到了大山顶上……
这个美丽的传说,告诉我们一个人生哲理:人活在世界上,不能没有梦想;为了自己的梦想,要付出艰辛和努力。我找到了梦想——成为一名记者。我要努力,争取做最好的自己!
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