1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
参观完西安的名胜古迹,可别忘了尝尝西安的小吃。
西安的小吃也是非常有名的,现在我给大家讲讲西安的臊子面。臊子面是西安独具风味的小吃之一,臊子面口感酸而辣,也不油腻。从面上看,浮着一层红红的辣油,非常诱人。一闻感觉有点酸酸的,而且非常开胃。面条长而扁,呈乳黄色,汤里加上葱蒜,香味扑鼻。臊子面吃起来口感又精又滑,再加上又酸又辣的汤,一吃起来就想一口气把它吃完。不过在吃臊子面时,有个特别的规矩:臊子面只能吃面,不能喝汤。
接着讲讲西安的肉夹馍吧。肉夹馍是将面团煎至金黄,之后做成面膜,切开两半,里面加以上好的羊肉。馍香而脆,加以羊肉的淳厚,味道特别香脆,非常好吃。一咬“嘎吱”一下,口里含着羊肉的浓香,再加上馍馍的脆爽,变成一道好吃的美食。
最后与大家一起分享的美食是西安的凉皮。凉皮虽然是凉的,但是吃起来肚子里一点也不觉得里凉。因为里面放了些辣椒和葱,刚一入口,觉得冰凉冰凉,过了一会,咽下肚,感觉肚子里像火烧了一样,特别是冬天吃起来也不觉得冷。凉皮非常爽、嫩、滑,口感十分好,而且有点弹。凉皮加上面筋、黄瓜丝、葱蒜、芝麻、香油拌在一起,让你胃口大开。很可惜没吃上西安的羊肉泡馍,下次有时间一定再去尝尝。
朋友们,去了西安,一定要多尝尝西安的美食哦!
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
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