Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
在一个繁华的大都市里,小明一家幸福地生活着。小明想要什么,父母就给她买。因为他是父母最宠爱的人。渐渐地,宠爱变成了溺爱。
在一个夜深人静的晚上,众星拱月弯弯的月亮像一个美丽的小船,游荡在天海中。小明一家在景色秀丽的公园散步。突然 ,睁大眼睛,盯着月亮看了好一会儿,皱着眉头,可怜巴巴地说:“我想要天上的月亮,我要天上的月亮!”
妈妈听了顿时傻眼了,疑惑不解地问:“啊?你要天上的月亮!嗯……我会想办法地。”爸爸听了,眼珠子一转,想出了一个好办法。他飞快地跑回家,把大的'小的盒子都找了出来,一个个装满水,端到小明面前,放在月光下,让月光倒影在水中。爸爸已经满头大汗了,他顾不上擦汗,微笑着说:“这下可以了吧,现在有这么多月亮了!”小明心想:我看看这水里的月亮那么美,把他抱起来玩会儿吧!他用手伸进冷冰冰地水里,不停地捞,可怎么样都捞不起来,他这下急了,大哭起来。他边哭边喊:“不嘛,我要天上的嘛!”妈妈气呼呼地说:“你这个小孩子怎么这么不懂事!月亮又摘不下来,摘下来又能拿来干什么呢?”小明心想:妈妈你以前不是很宠爱我的吗?为什么现在变成这样了。
“我就喜欢天上的月亮。”小明大声嚷着,“我要天上的月亮。”妈妈把小明抱起来,转身准备回家,小明从妈妈怀里挣脱,跑回去,趴在草坪上痛苦起来。爸爸妈妈劝小明回家,而且现在已经很晚了,他也不听。过了半个小时,小明渐渐停止了痛苦,拉起妈妈的手,准备回家。妈妈平淡地说:“你终于肯听妈妈的话啦!”小明使劲地点头。爸爸也走过来,语重心长地说:“小明,你要懂事点儿,不要什么事情都为自己着想。你还要体谅爸爸妈妈,我和妈妈都知道自己的溺爱不对,但是,我们溺爱了,你也要学会控制。以后做一个对社会有用的人,不要辜负了我们的期望,好吗?”小明笑眯眯地点了点头。
改变,每个人都会有改变。而这背后,都经历了一个故事。
张刚和李晓是同学,还是邻居呢!他们正在读一年级,马上要进行入小学的第一场考试了,张刚在家时努力复习,在学校认真听课,而李晓在家里懒洋洋的,在学校上课也不听,真是两番不同的影像呢!
“考试了”,老师对同学们说道。张刚沉静地答着题,而李晓呢?东瞅瞅,西看看,老师一来就不看了。第二天,老师把试卷发下来了。张刚信心满满地看着自己的卷子,100分!果然不出所料。李晓愁眉苦脸地看着卷子,一看就没好事,55分,唉。
回 到家里,张刚从书包里拿出卷,张刚妈妈一看,激动不已地说:“就知道我的儿子最棒了!等着,妈妈给你做螃蟹吃。”李晓回家拿出卷子,妈妈对着他一顿臭骂, 唾沫横飞,“你说说你,考得不好就算了,居然都没及格!你看看邻居家张刚,人家考了100分,而你呢?”李晓刚要开口,“啪”李晓妈妈给了李晓一个耳光。
第 二次考试就要开始了,李晓拼了命地复习,而张刚整天在家玩电脑,他妈妈让他复习,他说:“我都考100分了,不差这一时半会儿。”第二次考试开始了。两位 同学都认真地答着题。第二天,老师把试卷发了下来。“这次要表扬一位同学,”老师说:“这一次考试李晓同学比上一次有进步,掌声鼓励!”
回到家里,张刚被扇了一个耳光,而李晓被亲了一口。
这个故事告诉我们,命运,生活甚至学习都是可以被改变的,让我们一起努力,来改变我们的命运吧!
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