写一篇优秀的作文带批注的【一】
On the first day of the rest, mom and dad and I went to ningbo sea world and youngor zoo.
We first came to the sea world. Once in the aquarium, dad took me to see the sea precious animals. Have the hippocampus, giant salamander, heavy sea turtles, and cute little penguins. Overhead transparent glass in all kinds of fish swimming happily in the, I seem to feel also came to the underwater world.
Out of the aquarium, went to the ocean theatre, there are Marine animals.
Walrus in sit-ups, music we call "good", then we show the water ballet, see it stretch your head, around circle, also push the feet, how interesting! From Japan's "three sisters" sea lions, each have each skill: within a will do ten arithmetic, a lifting weights, is another ball player. Next, two beluga whales the staff with mouth top up from the water. Finally, dolphins sang a song for us, that caused a cheer.
Out of the sea world, we went to the youngor zoo. In the zoo, I saw a fierce the east-northern tiger and the tiger, mighty lion and white lion. In the panda garden, I finally met our national treasure, the giant panda. They are naughty flip, also eat bamboo. Beautiful peacock contended for the tail, to show us their beauty.
Travel over, although very tired, but I am very happy!
写一篇优秀的作文带批注的【二】
盼望着，盼望着，我们终于盼来了这欢乐的、只属于我们少年儿童的节日——六一国际儿童节。为迎接这欢乐的节日，我们学校举办了一年一度的游戏节活动，每班出一个游戏，让全校同学来游玩。当天，我领了游戏单，兴冲冲地开始了我的“游戏之旅”。
首先，我来到了六（2）班的“妙取弹珠”。游戏规则很简单，把弹珠从直径为4、5厘米的瓶子中用筷子夹出来，再夹入直径为2、3厘米的小瓶子里，时间为一分钟。游戏开始了，我把筷子小心地伸进瓶子里，夹了起来。我原以为很好夹，没想到瓶口太窄了，夹了半天也夹不着，再加上弹珠又小又滑，夹住后刚刚要提上来，又掉了。我暗暗地鼓励自己：加油，看准了再夹！我鼓起勇气，看准一颗蓝色的，夹了起来，再把它轻轻地放入小瓶子里。一颗，两颗，直到第三颗的时候，弹珠都已经到了小瓶子的边上了，我手一抖，落在了地上。这时，裁判提醒道：“快！还有5秒钟！”我慌了神，匆忙夹起一颗放入瓶中，刚刚放进，裁判一声“停！”游戏结束了。我兴冲冲地向阅奖处走去，满以为能拿些什么奖品，没想到分发奖品的同学指指海报上的游戏规则上的`一条：“六年级同学至少六颗，”给了我一个安慰奖——：一张网球王子粘纸。“唉”我叹了口气，再接再厉吧！
随后，我还玩了有趣的“小猫钓鱼，”紧张的“投筷入瓶”，好玩的“运杯子”……玩得不亦乐乎，赢来的糖塞满了口袋。
快乐的游戏，美好的童年！
写一篇优秀的作文带批注的【三】
弹去五月的风尘，迎来六月的脚步，在一个阳光明媚的早晨，我们迎来了我们自己的节日——六一儿童节。
早上的节目可真没劲，尽是些表演，我们班半成以上的人都在打哈欠，没几个是认真看的，甚至还有人在偷吃零食，从大家的目光里可以看出来，大家看的是表演心里想的却是下午的活动。
在我们的煎熬与等待中，时间似乎特别漫长，可漫长的时间也会有尽头，终于时针重重的指向了一点。
下午的活动果然没有令我失望，词语接龙、脑力大转弯……这些平时我们最喜欢的游戏轮番上阵，一度把班级气氛提升到高潮，主持人不失时机充满磁性的声音再次响起：“生活再美好，也不能少了音乐这位调味师，让我们有请两位“音乐家”上台表演！”第一位“音乐家”提着他的萨克斯，为我们吹奏了一曲《童年》，搏取了我们的喝彩，“哼！”第二位“音乐家”不服气了，也抱着二胡前来小试牛刀，拉奏的竟也是《童年》，古朴的音乐同样打动了我们，我们献上了热烈的掌声。最后，两位“音乐家”合奏起了《童年》，古朴与现代，优美与奔放，相处的是那么融洽，霎时，群星暗淡无光，仿佛只有两位“音乐家”是最闪亮的，同学们听得都呆住了，一会儿，雷鸣般的掌声贯彻了云霄。
多么快乐的一天，多么美妙的一天，快乐，在今天展现出了价值！
写一篇优秀的作文带批注的【四】
A wind and the calendar of the afternoon, me and my mother, cousin and the cousin yo dog to clean air, scenic Geleshan play. Small colorful flowers to welcome our arrival with a smile; Xiaocaohu their small head out and waved to us. We enjoy the beautiful scenery while hiking.
Along the way, yo dog to hop to hop from time to time naughty and jumped into the water hole, the others have a muddy splash. We came to a rock and saw the beautiful, fragrant honeysuckle fill the fields. Cousin cousin and I could not wait to pick up the pick pocket honeysuckle. Pick a pick, and I was honeysuckle mixed with a bit of rattan, the foot-slip, fall down on. If my hand tightly grasped the honeysuckle vines and perhaps on to pieces of it. End mining flowers, the mother asked us: "Do you know what the benefits of honeysuckle it?" Cousin said: "Honeysuckle is Shannon." Cousin said: "Honeysuckle Qingre, Reduce Pathogenic Fire." I said : "Honeysuckle can also be down summer heat." her mother said: "You are right, but the best place honeysuckle is native, does not appreciate other people's live."
After the play, I not only enjoy the beautiful scenery, but also to understand the truth in life. Ah really gain a lot.
写一篇优秀的作文带批注的【五】
May first is a Sunday. And it is the Labor's Day.
My mother said to me:"Open your eyes!And look out of the window. What a fine day! Let's go to park,"So my mother, my classmate and I went to the park.
We took some foods in my schoolbag.
On the way to the park. I saw the blue sky with snow-white clouds. I saw pear trees and some apple trees and so on. Below the trees, there are several kinds of flowers.
It's colorful, blue, red, yellow, pink, purple, orange and white. I saw some balloons and butterflies in the sky. I ate popcorn, cornflakes, banana and lollipop. They were wonderful.
In the afternoon, we went to the zoo. I visited the birds, mice, cats, dogs, budgies, hamsters, rabbits and so on.
May Day is my favorite day.
写一篇优秀的作文带批注的【六】
人们都说父爱如山，但那一次，我深深地体会到了父亲细致的爱。——题记
自从进入初中，就大考小考不断，而我因为前几次考试名列前茅，就开始有些沾沾自喜，对待学习再无从前的认真了。于是之后的一次考试，我的成绩一落千丈，我一下子掉进了一个无尽的深渊里，无法自拔。
当时妈妈听到了这个消息，只是不住的叹气，可是爸爸的反映却很强烈，他气得摔门而出。我躲在自己的房间里哭泣，心里懊悔不已，同时心里也在为爸爸的过激行为而生气。
就在妈妈和我一起分析原因的时候，爸爸一直没有回家，那时的我，固执地认为他不是我的亲爸爸，我不想要这样的爸爸。几天之后，爸爸风尘仆仆地回来了，手里多了一个复读机。
后来我听妈妈说，爸爸本来去了新乡，只是因为我的英语学的不好，想去买一个复读机回来，在新乡没有合适的，便转去了郑州，这样的麻烦，只是为了给我买一个质量好的复读机。那一刻，我追悔莫及，原来爸爸出去几天，都是为了我，我后悔没有好好学习，后悔不该这样埋怨爸爸……那一刻，我心里毫无恨意，有的只是无尽的感动。
之后的几天，爸爸一改往日大大咧咧、不拘小节的性格，开始帮我分析错题原因，制定学习计划，告诉我以后要怎么做。爸爸这时做什么都十分细心、无微不至，他的爱在那时也毫无保留地体现出来。从此以后，我又恢复了以往的认真，开始一心一意地对待学习，因为我不能辜负爸爸妈妈的苦心。
现在的爸爸，还和以前一样，懒懒散散，不拘小节，并很少表达他对我的爱。但爸爸那细致入微的爱，无须言表，尤在我心。
批注：这是一篇写人叙事的散文，情感真挚，人物形象突出，活灵活现。采用了顺叙，叙事条理，娓娓道来。在一次不经意间，体会到了父爱的无微不至。过渡自然，先后有序。
