《驴子渡河》
材料:一只驴子驮盐渡河,脚下一滑,跌倒在水里。站起来的时候,觉得轻了许多,这使它非常高兴。后来又有一次,驴子驮海绵过河,它就故意地一滑,身体和海绵全进到了水里要求:通过合理想象扩写原文,续写结果。中心意思要明确,内容要具体,语言要通顺。
扩写文:
夏日,骄阳似火,一只驴子驮着两麻袋沉重的盐巴,在路上气喘吁吁缓缓地走着。走着, 走着,一条小河挡住了去路。驴子喝足了水,洗了把脸,开始渡河。到了河心,河水没过 了它的大腿,水流也急了,水底的鹅卵石也滑溜多了。驴子稍不留神,脚下一滑,身体失 去控制,连麻袋一起重重跌倒在水里。它挣扎了几下,站起来的时候,觉得背上的盐比刚才轻了许多。“这是怎么回事呢?”驴子转过头瞧了瞧,咦,背上那两只麻袋还紧紧地扎着,一点儿也没有磕破,看来不是盐给漏掉了。“反正是浸水以后盐才轻了”驴子像哥伦布发现新大陆那般高兴,它摇头晃脑,非常得意地渡过河去了。
一个月以后,驴子的身影又出现在这条小河边。这回,它驮了两麻袋的海绵。海绵轻飘 飘的,所以它刚才一路小跑着。哗哗的河水还像以前那样深,那么急。驴子来到河心,故意脚下一滑,连身体带麻袋一起浸泡在水里了。不料,当又抬起身的时候,只觉得背上的两麻袋海绵不但没有减轻,反觉变得像两座小山压着似的,沉重极了。“这又是怎么回事呢?”驴子实在支持不住,它浑身打颤,四肢发软,一个趔趄,又重重地跌倒在水里了。驴子拼命挣扎,但接连几次都是刚抬起身子就跌倒了。它大声呼喊,可四周没有一个人影。最后,它精疲力尽,怎么也抬不起头来,只得任凭无情的河水朝它的嘴里、鼻子里猛灌进去
像这样对原文中某些没有展开的故事情节进行补充,加以扩展充实,使文章的中心意思 更加明确,内容更加具体,语言更加生动的写作形式就叫扩写。这种练习可以开阔我们的作文思路,发展我们的想象力,提高语言表达能力。这类写作训练很特殊,也很有趣,它既有限制,要依据所给的材料,又有自由,可以根据材料进行 大胆的想象。
扩写的形式也多种多样,可以对一句话、 一段话进行扩写, 也可以对一篇短文进行扩
写。 扩写也有它的基本要求,一般是不改变原有文章的体裁、人称和主要故事情节,围绕原文的中心意思,把不具体的地方写具体,给这棵“大树”添枝加叶,把不生动的地方写生 动,给它锦上添花。要大胆地、恰如其分地对原文加以发挥,有所扩充。写好这类作文要注意以下几点:
这几节课,训练的主要内容不再是乏味的基本功,而是在模拟实战中找空档。
我呢,首先被教练安排到了绿队,然后被安排到绿队的右路进攻。因为右路不是主要进攻点,所以我累了可以松懈一下。我暗自庆幸自己被安排到了右路,而不是在中路,那样的话我还不得累死!看看中路队友吧:大汗淋漓、气喘吁吁、两腿发软、表情夸张。这是用来形容他的几个词。
防守球员(红队)突然聚集到了左路,所以,中路有一个大空挡。不管是红绿队的球员都聚集到了左路,只剩我和教练还有红队的一名防守球员。教练利用好了空挡,把球传给了我,这样形成单刀。所有球员看到我和球,都聚集到了中路。面对大好形势,我并没有直接射门,而是选择了传中。中路球员包抄很到位,一记捅射,皮球钻入网窝。
模拟实战非常有趣,但是比赛打得却很激烈。比赛一开始,刘在炀传球,找准了空挡,队友冷静控球,低射。1:0!比赛踢到一半,刘在炀大力射门破门得分。2:0!但是,教练说那支队伍再进一球哪支队伍就赢得比赛。所以,比赛回到0:0。这却给了对手极强的斗志。但是我们实力较强,一直压着对方。伤停补时,边线球引起双方争议。但教练始终说我们发。这是一个可以传中的靠近底线的球。刘在炀快发。但是,对方还在自打没趣,和教练争议,球已开出他们还毫无察觉。球传到了我脚下。无人盯防加上离球门仅有半米,我停球后从容调整,内脚背一推,球滚入了网窝。1:0!我送入了绝***球!对方还完全没有察觉到发生了什么,但是,我们赢了!在这几节课里,我上演过梅开二度,也上演过帽子戏法,但是从没送入绝***球帮助球队!
我的足球课程以辉煌的6粒进球告终。
初稿
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money -it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
自评
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
评分:23
互评(刘兴顺评)
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
评分:23
互评(战越评)
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
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互评(李春霞评)
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
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