导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
大家一定没有经历过地震吧?今年暑假,我在祖国边疆新疆感受到地震,至今想起来,还有点害怕。
2017年8月9日凌晨7点31分,在酒店睡得很好的我,被母亲急忙叫醒:“什么颖,早点起床?地震已经发生了!”我不知道该怎么办。瞬间,我脑子里有保护头部的\'强烈意识。我“嗖”地面一下子躲进被子里,用双手抱住头。
我很焦虑地躲在被窝里一段时间,感觉床在晃动。这时,妈妈喊得更快:“何颖,快起床!”我刚想告诉妈妈,这是保护头部,还是逃跑很重要。于是,我迅速跳下床,换不了衣服,穿鞋,抓住起床头的防晒服,向外冲去。妈妈叫我:“外面很冷,穿裤子再走!”“你穿什么裤子?快跑!”我哪儿也能冷静下来,什么也抓不住一样的东西往外跑,一看,是杏子袋,我一边跑,一边慌慌张张地向母亲喊道:“快点!”“先走,整理行李。”妈妈说。这次我也着急了,在家门口哭着叫妈妈:“妈妈,请快点!快点!快点!”“先走吧!”妈妈一边说一边把包裹放在行李箱里。刹那间,我们住的酒店楼又摇了几下。“我和妈妈一起去,妈妈快点!”我带着哭声坚定地告诉妈妈。
当我和妈妈推着行李箱跑到楼下的空地时,地震也停止了。一眼就看到因为逃跑而狼狈的人们,想想也很有趣。有些人光着胳膊,有些人头发乱七八糟。其中一个男孩穿着大被子。结果,逃跑的时候,人们什么形象都不在乎。
后来我在网上查了一下,在新疆精河地区发生了6级地震。
地震结束后,我的心还在“的咚咚”的猛烈跳动,双脚发抖,当时心里只有一个想法。冷静地考虑一下,母亲当时应该无视一切逃。同时,想起平时在学校安全演习逃跑知识很重要。
最后,我要珍惜生命惜生命,然后认真对待各种逃脱训练,遇到地震,一定要冷静,逃脱第一。
2017年4月20日早晨8点2分,这一刻,四川雅安发生了7·0级地震,人们惊慌失措,一片狼藉,震后,人们流离失所,无家可归。雅安大地震你是多么可怕啊,又让我不由自主的想起了2008年的汶川大地震。我清楚的记得,那是2008年汶川的一场大地震,那时,许多人被埋在废墟底下,还有的人侥幸逃了出来,还有一些小孩坐在废墟上号啕大哭。还有一件事是我亲身经历的,那天,老师给我们说了四川雅安地震,有四个小孩子,两个牺牲了,还有两个的病情十分危险,老师让我们献出一份爱心,我捐了2元,还有人比我捐的,5元,10元,20元……这么多的地震,让我想起一首歌《团结就是力量》,这么多的地震,让我们每一天在提心吊胆的生活中度过。灾难,你是多么无情,你又没有想过人们的感受,灾难,你是多么残忍,使我们无家可归。灾难,为了让我们的祖国变得强大起来,变的富强起来,变的繁华起来,请你不要再来伤害人们了。一方有难,八方支援。雅安的同胞们,你们必须要坚强起来。我坚信你们必须会从阴影中走出来。我相信你们,加油!
I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
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