我的家乡是北国的名城—长春。这里环境优美,物产丰富,有着许多的名胜古迹。但我最喜欢的还是座落在长春南部的南湖公园。它景色宜人,是人们休息和游览的好地方。
走进南湖公园的大门,就可以看到高大挺拔的白桦树,它们像哨兵一样矗立在路的两旁,欢迎着游人们的到来。沿着林荫路漫步,就可以来到湖边。远望南湖,湖水平静,阳光照射在湖面,发出耀眼的光芒。微风吹来,湖面上荡漾着轻柔的涟漪,就像有人在悄悄地抖动着绿色的绸缎。碧波荡漾的湖水清晰地倒映出蓝的天,白的云,红的花,绿的树。五颜六色的鱼儿在水中自由自在地游来游去。波光粼粼的湖面上,游人们划着小船,悠闲自在,色彩鲜艳的服装,好像是绽放在湖面上的朵朵鲜花。湖边的杨柳婀娜多姿,一株株柳树在微风中摆动着柔软的枝条,轻轻地擦过湖面,像美丽的少女对着镜子梳理头发。
坐落在湖边凉亭,精美别致,古色古香。红色的立柱上刻满了画,栩栩如生,活灵活现。凉亭中有供人乘凉和休息的石椅。站在凉亭边,就可以观赏到旁边的荷花池,郁郁葱葱的荷叶挤得满满的,像绿盘,像绿伞,像蒲扇,把湖面盖得严严实实的。荷花千姿百态,有的昂首挺胸,显得十分神气,有的低头藏身,像是害羞的小姑娘。有的正在怒放,开得又大又美,白里透粉的花瓣全部舒展开,有的却是含苞待放,像是一个个诱人的桃子。朵朵荷花亭亭玉立在荷叶之上,像是仙女在水面上翩翩起舞。这里的荷花大多数是粉红色的,也有白色的,美丽的花瓣包裹着绿莲蓬。多像是精美的摇篮。花瓣在荷叶的衬托下格外美丽,微风吹来,带来阵阵清香,沁人心脾。
南湖公园碧绿的湖水,岸边的杨柳,精美的凉亭,艳丽的荷花,构成了一幅美丽的山水画。南湖公园市场纯的明珠,没有去过南湖就等于没有来过长春。我为家乡的南湖而自豪,我想随着长春市的飞速发展,南湖公园会变得更加美丽。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
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