英语作文五要素【一】
初稿
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money -it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
自评
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
评分：23
互评（刘兴顺评）
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
评分：23
互评（战越评）
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
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互评（李春霞评）
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
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英语作文五要素【二】
这里我们说“有一点”“有机的联系”，这个“有一点”“有机”非常重要。写景文章，重头戏自然在写景物。我们写景，要铺开来写，要传神地写，要有层次地写，把景物写得“美”，写得“有气势”，写得“传神”，文章才能吸引人，才能让人身临其境。但我们在写的时候，要贯串一个“意”，要有一个“神”。这个“意”要蕴含在文中，有时只要“点一下”即可。我们不能把这个“意”当作重点铺开来写，那文章就不是写景文章了，成议论文了。
明确了“意”，写的时候就“心中有数”了。《那一片绿色》，如果写农村田野之绿，是不是可贯串“自然的\'生机离不开农人的辛勤劳作”之意。写春天田野麦苗之美，心中要有“农民播种”之意，写夏天麦浪翻滚，心中要有“农民耕耘灌溉”之意。这个“意”的点明只要一两句话，或者放在文章中间，或者放在文章末尾。这样就把写自然和写人生\"有机结合\"起来了。
同样是写《那一片绿色》，有的同学写“城市的那块地”，写退休的老人在那里散步，写孩子星期天在那儿活动，写傍晚时下了班的人们在那里伫立，就是不是可以点出这样一个“意”：一块绿地给城市中的人们带来欢欣，反衬出城市生活的喧嚣繁杂，呼吁人们更多地走向自然。
英语作文五要素【三】
叙述，描写，议论，说明，抒情。
英语作文五要素【四】
自然环境和社会环境描写。
英语作文五要素【五】
在记叙文里，除了记叙为主外，一定要以追求形象为目的，运用描写手法写好其中若干片段：比如人物的一连串动作，人物的神态变化，人物活动的场景等等。同时，必要时要运用议论抒情，通过以情点染，以议升华，达到画龙点睛的目的。这里，就要注意运用描写手法。在考场中恰当加入一些细腻的描写片断，可以收到于细微处展精神的写作效果。或动作逼真，可知可感;或景随情出，情因景生;或语言幽默，情趣盎然。中考满分作文《“东方之珠”是美丽的》中的一段景物描写，就状难写之景于眼前，含不尽之意于言外，展现了“东方之珠”的神奇魅力，道出了自己对上海的无限深情：
清晨，蓝色的云霞里出现了一道细小的抛物线，这线红得透亮，闪着金光，冲破云霞。不久，耀眼的光辉洒向东方明珠，使剔透的球体再次复苏，重现本色。渐渐地，红与白融为一体的巨型建筑物便占据了我的双眼。在她与我之间，浦江上仿佛铺出了一条碎光闪烁的路……
英语作文五要素【六】
外貌，语言，神态，动作和心理描写。
英语作文五要素【七】
Computer is a very useful machine. Some of them are big, but some of them are very small .Many people like playing computer. Computer has many functions, so that people can do a lot of things by computer, like watching movies, listening to the music or playing games. It can make our lives very colorful and convenient. Various people can make good use of computer. Children can use computer to learn and play games. Parents can use computers to work. I think computer is a kind of wonderful and interesting machine, so I like computer very much.
电脑是一种很有用的机器。有的电脑很大，但是有的\'很小。很多人喜欢玩电脑。电脑有很多功能，人们可以i用电脑做很多事情，比如说看电影，听音乐或者玩游戏。它可以使我们的生活充满色彩和便利。各种各样的人都可以好好利用电脑。小孩子可以用电脑来学习和玩游戏。父母可以用电脑来工作。我认为电脑是一种神奇有趣的机器，所以我很喜欢电脑。
