地震发生时,阿曼达在教室的墙角,房顶塌下来架成个大三角。幸好,阿曼达没被砸着,他和同学躲在角落里。
当时四周一片漆黑,阿曼达想到:小时候,他打篮球时,腿不小心受伤了。需要做一次开刀手术,阿曼达非常害怕。这时,父亲为了鼓励他说:“阿曼达,不要害怕。不论发生什么,我总会跟你在一起。”阿曼达进了手术室。手术结束后,很成功。阿曼达也对父亲的话很信赖。
阿曼达心想:自己要坚强,勇敢的活下去,父亲在等我呢!我一定要活着离开这里,父亲一定会来救我的!
阿曼达大声对同学说:“大家不要怕。我父亲常说:“不论发生什么,他总会跟我在一起。所以,大家要等着我爸爸来就大家。”
时间在慢慢的流逝着……
“阿曼达,你爸爸真的会来救你,救我们吗?”同学们失落地望着阿曼达。
“会的,一定会的,再等等,可能他们正在挖掘,大家别怕!”阿曼达努力鼓舞自己,让自己的行动感染同学们。
同学们似信非信地低下了头,有的紧锁双眉,有的摇头叹息,有的'已经绝望得唉声叹气,索性嚷嚷道:“哎……他不会来救我们的,毕竟谁都不知道我们在哪,更不会知道我们还活着!我们没救了。”话音刚落,同学们都哇哇大哭起来,嘴里还不停地呼喊着:“爸爸、妈妈!”
“不会的。”阿曼达坚定地回道,将噙在眼里的苦涩的泪水挤了回去。心想:爸爸一定会来的,一定会的,因为他说过不论发生什么事,他都会和我在一起。爸爸,我会等你的。
时间慢慢地流动着,同学们对阿曼达与他爸爸的信心一击而溃,唯有阿曼达执着地挖着。因为他知道,如果爸爸活着,就一定会来救他的。事实最终也没有将这位了不起的儿子击倒。此时,他的心里只有一个念头:努力地挖。
人,终究会有求生的信念,大家在阿曼达的行动上受了感染,也帮着挖,在窘迫的环境下始终不向死亡低头,从而使得奇迹发生了……
突然,岩石缝里传出父亲急促的呼吸声与挖掘所产生的震耳欲聋的声音,渐渐交织在了一起。
“同伴们,我们有救了!”阿曼达欢呼起来。此时心中的一股暖流似潮水般涌上心头,伴随着一点点渗进来的亮光……
阿曼达走出废墟以后,紧紧地和父亲拥抱在了一起。阿曼达激动地说:“爸爸,我好想你啊!我被埋在废墟里的这38个小时里,不吃、不喝、不睡,我一开始有一点儿害怕,后来,我想起了您对我许下的诺言,我知道您不论什么时候,都是和我在一起的。所以我相信,这次我被埋在废墟里,您也一定会来找我的。”
父亲听着留下了眼泪,伤心地说:“阿曼达,就算没有这句诺言,我也一定会来找你的。你知道吗,我在废墟边挖了38个小时,才在瓦砾堆下找到
你,多么不容易啊,我的衣服破烂不堪,双眼布满血丝,手划破了,流血了,还是继续挖。有许多好心人都劝我回去了,可我没回去,一直在找你。
阿曼达忽然想起了妈妈:“妈妈怎么样了?”
“妈妈很好,只是受了一点小伤而已。”爸爸说。
“我们赶快去看妈妈吧!”
阿曼达和爸爸走进竹屋,“妈妈,妈妈!”阿曼达一头冲进了妈妈的怀抱。妈妈笑着说:“从此,我们又可以过上快乐幸福的日子了。”笑声充满了整个屋子。
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Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
地震中的父与子续写:我是阿曼达的父亲……
我的孩子,爸爸说过一定要和你在一起,我来了!
那个昔日充满孩子们欢声笑语的三层教学楼,已变成一片废墟。我知道儿子的教室在一层的左后角,便疾步走到那里,边挖边叫着儿子的名字。
还有许多父母也急匆匆地赶到这里,他们痛苦地大喊,之后便绝望地离开了。有的人还劝我,可我不甘心,只要没亲眼见到儿子的尸体,我是无论如何也不会放弃的。我知道,我的孩子需要我!
我向他们求助,可他们只是摇摇头,用充满怜悯和同情的目光看着我。我默默地独自一个人挖了起来。我用满是鲜血的手小心地翻动那些断裂的钢筋水泥。随着时间的流逝,我心里只剩下一个念头:儿子在等着我!我用沙哑的嗓音一遍又一遍呼唤着儿子的名字……
突然,瓦砾下传出一个熟悉的声音,是儿子,果然是儿子!他居然说下面还有十四个孩子,他们都没事!
我用兴奋得变了调的声音连忙喊:“来人啊,十五个孩子,他们都活着,活着……”
“在哪儿?在哪儿?”有个消防员最先赶过来,他急切地问。
“在那儿,那块水泥板下面!”
附近的人们都纷纷围拢过来,他们七手八脚地搬开了上面的杂物,又齐心合力掀动下面的水泥板。
“儿子,坚持住!”
“爸爸,我不怕!”
十五个孩子都被救出来了,阿曼达是最后一个。我把阿曼达揽进怀里,亲了又亲,将几滴热泪蹭到孩子脸上。上帝终于把我的宝贝还给了我——我亲爱的儿子!
他们将两只手插进衣兜,身子轻轻地倚在石头上,僵直地坐着,长长的睫毛遮住了昔日那充满稚气和快乐的'眼睛,开心的眼神没了,轮到失望的眼神“值日”了;他们红通通的脸颊,变成了灰扑扑的脸颊,他们的脸颊……他们脸色阴暗、铁青,沉默不语,仿佛变成了另外一个人,一个完全再也没有对生的希望渴望的人……
阿曼达的嘴唇微微地动了动,微微睁开了双眼,咽了一下口水,轻轻地说:“伙伴们,坚强点儿!”
没人理会他。都一声不吭,仍旧一动不动。
沉默了许久,一个女孩拍了拍身上的灰尘,慢慢地站起来,哽咽着说:“谁……谁?谁有东西吃?”阿曼达这下就机灵了,他像变戏法似地从石头底下抽出了一个书包。
“呵呵!你们知道我当初为何要拼命地将它顶在头上吗?这里面,有两块面包和三块口香糖!”阿曼达笑吟吟地将食物取出,将面包分为14块,将口香糖也分成14份,其中,他给自己分得最少。
几个伙伴们早就饥肠辘辘,他们像恶狼似地走过去,狼吞虎咽地吃着,灰色的脸上又有了光泽。
为了不让伙伴们恐惧,阿曼达又想方设法地逗同学们开心,尽管他喉咙干得冒烟,他还是给他们唱歌;尽管他疲惫不堪,他还是给他们讲笑话……
不一会,其他人也开始快乐起来,废墟中又开始欢声笑语,他们都有说有笑。快乐的眼神回来了,灵活的身子回来了,一切的苦恼,一切的疲惫,都灰飞烟灭了……
阿曼达为了更加让他们快乐,便说道:“伙伴们,别丧气,我爸爸如果还活着,就一定会来救我们,‘不论发生什么,我都会和你在一起’这可是他向我保证的!”说完,他自豪地拍拍胸膛。
不久,一缕充满爱的阳光射了进来,阿曼达抬头一望,“啊!爸爸!”他大叫道,父亲开心地望着他,他也快乐地望着父亲……
这对了不起的父子,又团聚了……
“呜呜……”早已成为一片废墟的学校角落里,不断传出哭声,阿曼达也是这14个7岁孩子大哭中的一员,他悲伤地想:我还能活着出去吗?我可能再也见不到爸爸妈妈了。突然,他想起父亲曾常对他说的话,不论发生什么,我总会和你在一起。这句话,仿佛让他在绝望中找到了一丝希望。他坚定地对同学们说:“大家请不要哭了。我爸爸曾对我说过,不论发生什么,总会和我在一起,所以,只要我爸爸活着就一定会来救我们。”同学们被他沉着的话所感染,也纷纷冷静下来,等待着他的父亲。
12小时过去了,24小时过去了,36小时过去了。同学一个劲儿追问他“你爸爸怎么还没来,我饿死了!”“你爸爸会不会不来了?”有些还偷偷啜泣起来,影响到了一大片人,都手抱双膝,害怕地哭起来。他也想哭,可一想到父亲对他的承诺,他就充满了生的希望。在暗无天日、又饿又渴的险境下,他安慰同学,给予鼓励,给了他们许多生的希望与信心。
38小时艰难地过去了,阿曼达与13位同学耐心等待38小时的父亲终于来了。等同学们陆陆续续地钻出黑暗的洞穴,刚出来的阿曼达与父亲紧紧拥抱在一起,使“冷漠”的废墟中弥漫着父爱的温暖。
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