“自古逢秋悲寂寥,我言秋日胜春朝”。这句诗出自刘禹锡的《秋词》,他认为春天比不上秋天,而我也是这么认为的。
小学生涯的最后一次秋游终于来了。我们自己上了大巴车后,迅速进入了“状态”。有的掏出了零食,有的拿出了扑克,还有人变戏法似的迅速拿出手机,把我的囧样拍了下来。当然,他付出了“代价”。说笑中,目的地——小南湖到了。
刚进大门,一阵清爽的秋风卷着几片落叶拂过我的面颊,欢迎会开始啦!草儿向我们自己鞠躬;大树奏起了音乐;落叶跳起了舞蹈……我们自己早就按捺不住,欢呼着跑来跑去。
没走不远,前排某个班级同学大喊一声:“看!枫树!”我们自己“呼啦”一声围了过去。“哇!”我不禁感叹一声。原来那丛枫林十分茂密,此时正值深秋,枫林中的枫叶红得似火。远远望去,就好像熊熊燃烧的烈火。我捡起一片枫叶,细细观察,那枫叶好像小孩子的手掌,叶尖微微泛着水红,我当时诗兴大发,随口吟了两句:小手叶尖泛水红,沐光火焰更蓬勃。
激动人心的时刻到了。我们自己三五成群地聚在一起,倒出零食和伙伴们分享。瞧!王志涛一个劲往嘴里塞,脸都吃成了“大包子”,真不儒雅;而满庭轩也是个“狠角色”,个子小,身体机能却十分强大,只见他左右开弓,见好吃的就啃;李晨启可不是那样的人,他细嚼慢咽,十分有“贵族气质”;我的吃相也不好看,但“高手”太多,我不得不抢……
吃饱了当然要散散步,我撇下争食的二师弟们,来到了湖边。放眼望去,水天一色,波光粼粼,平静的湖面不时映出鸟儿的倒影。阳光洒在湖面上,好像碎金在随波逐流;又好像鱼鳞漂在水面上为太阳作镜子……真令人心旷神怡。
快乐的时光总是短暂的,我们自己会慢慢长大,这份美好的回忆会一直留在心底。
周五,是秋天里难得的好天气,我们自己生态园小学的师生们畅游了著名的5A级风景区——云龙湖之小南湖风景区。
置身于小南湖之中,更能亲身到它的美,它既有“北方园林”的粗狂豪迈,也有“江南园林”的精美别致。小南湖湖中有岛,岛上的亭台楼榭,曲径通幽,繁树与群花轻语,碧水与绿岸相视,让我不由的加快了脚步。来到了一处鲜花围成的花坛,只见大理石的墙上刻着“南湖景区”,分外引人注目。
那个小南湖的空气格外清新,天也格外的蓝,让人心旷神怡。眺望远处,如海水一样的蓝色湖面被一座“三孔”白云石桥一分为二,桥上点缀着四个青瓦红柱的古典亭台,两岸的无数条柔柳万条垂下绿丝绦,这众多自然景观与远处的电视塔、高层建筑交相呼应,让我们自己在现代与喧嚣的都市中,享受着静怡和美好,我不由自主的按下了快门。
顺着荷风岛往南走,我来到了岸边,远处阳光透过云层,均匀的播撒在蓝色的`湖面上,波光粼粼,一座玉石马鞍漫步桥在阳光的照耀下显得像雪一样洁白。近处,刚刚远看还显出深绿色的柳条,近看更显葱郁,柳叶缠着柳条,层层叠叠,十分繁茂。我不禁再次拿起相机,将这一切收入取景框,按下了第二次快门。
再向前步行,转过两个弯,终于来到了桥廊走道。我加快脚步,走到了廊道之下,不禁感到了建筑的精美与恢弘。这座廊道很别致,上面是可以遮风挡雨的长亭,脚下是汉白玉石走道桥,两边是石栏与亭柱的交错组合,白石栏与红漆木柱规则排列,一直延伸到桥那头。而头顶的彩绘更是色调古韵,图案精美,造型巧夺天工。横木梁以蓝绿色漆过渡为背景,每个梁中部都有一个画作,或是“松柏图”、或是“驯鹿图”、或是“山水图”、或是“奇石图”、或是“梅竹画”,千变万化,令人目不暇接,我第三次捧起了相机……
西湖的美人人皆知,但在我心底深处,家乡的小南湖甚美。我们自己不舍离开了小南湖,欢声笑语在这里回荡。
Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。
段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
统一性(unity:段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
连贯性(coherence:关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
完整性(completeness:以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。
再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。
1. It has been shown that … …
类似句型:It is known to us that … …
It is said that … …
It is reported that … …
It is controversial that … …
2. “… … Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities … …。”——并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。
3. enable v. 使…能够
I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.
4. in that = because
表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:
The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.
此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前改变句式,如:
Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。
最后,提纯范文“措辞”。
1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。
2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的
形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millions
a multitude of
a great deal of
a large amount of
plenty of
many a
3. “some people argued that … …”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。
I argue that … …
I maintain that … …
I claim that … …
I insist that … … = I think that … …
I hold that … …
I assert that … …
I assume that … …
4. negative adj. 否定的.,相反的
hold negative view = hold opposite opinions
5. phenomenon n. 现象
social phenomenon 社会现象
natural phenomenon 自然现象
6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever
(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual > intelligent > bright > clever
在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:
1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会
2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会
3. 我的看法
Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Year’s Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.
However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing to amuse the audience in that it is composed by a numerous adequate programs, such as the emotional song, the graceful dance, the funny short sketch, the amusing comic dialogue, the delightful magic, and the marvelous acrobatics and so on. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the Spring Festival Evening will have negative effect on the family harmony because it will not only do harm to having the talks between family members on the Spring Festival Eve but also to enjoying the gourmet meal in a fancy restaurant.
In my opinion, the Spring Festival Evening is a good thing. It may not remain a must for all people, but it can bring us a strong sense of festivity and serve as an alternative among the variety of holiday activities. With the increasing audience of the Spring Festival Evening, it will ruin a distinctive culture during the Spring Festival vacation.
思辨性差,不仅提炼的观点就没有深度,而且还会抓不准。所谓抓不准,就是指议论时不能反映事物的本质,对于提供的材料,究竟说明了什么,不能吃准,材料、命题、话题本身说明的问题,有着客观的规定性,是不以你的主观意志为转移的。只有当你的主观与客观相符合时,这个准字,才有可能保证。譬如有个成语叫做绳锯木断,水滴石穿,绳怎样才能把木锯断,水怎样才能把石滴穿呢?如果说:要坚持,持之以恒,对不对?对,但只对了一半。在这里,除了坚持以外,还应当专一;要一门心思在一个地方滴。这样,断与穿才有可能。如果只抓住一面,就说明你没有认识事物的全体和本质。要去论述,当然也就很难抓准了。要想抓准,就必须具备一定的思辨性。能够透过现象看本质,能够用全面的观点、一分为二的`观点、发展的观点去辨证地分析问题。
星期五,阳光明媚,万里无云。我们自己怀着激动的心情去小南湖秋游。
进入大门往前走,一片湖水便映入眼帘。湖面上波光粼粼,如同许多星星在闪烁。这时,一阵凉爽的秋风吹来,湖面上泛起了层层涟漪,仿佛老爷爷脸上的皱纹。风爷爷走了,湖面又平静下来,只留下我们自己的轻声细语。我看着岸边的柳树,只见它们的枝干下垂着,如同一位少女在梳理头发。我不由地啧啧赞叹:“这里的景色真美啊!”
接着向前走,我们自己来到了解忧桥。传说这是为了纪念刘解忧而命名的。在桥上望去,水天一色,湖面就像未打磨的铜镜。我不禁想起了“潭面无风镜未磨”。
咦?那边高高挺立着的是什么?我怀着好奇的心走了过去。噢,原来是一座亭子。亭子上面有许多壁画。它们栩栩如生,惟妙惟肖。我不禁看得入了迷,恍如身临其境。老师让我们自己继续向前走,我却仍在盯着画发呆。直到一位班级同学喊了我一下,我才回过神来,心想:哎,真是可惜,如果能多呆一会儿就好了!
漫步在石子铺成的小路上,我感到十分愉快。两旁的大树热情地伸出手臂,欢迎我们自己的到来。秋天就像一位亲切的服装设计师,为大树做好了许多漂亮又暖和的衣服。秋天,也是万物的知心朋友。她看起来冷漠,但在背后却藏着一张温馨的笑脸。你看,凉爽的秋风一吹,一片片叶子就掉落下来,像一只只飞翔的小鸟。树叶落到地上,又犹如草儿的被子,盖在草儿身上,给大地带来了秋日的温暖。
该回去了,我们自己只好依依不舍地离开小南湖。我想:小南湖真美!有机会我一定要再来一次。
to prevent H7N9 we should know some common sense. First of all, it is important for us to prevent H7N9 from ourselves. For example, clean our hands frequently.
Sencondly, do more exercises. Such as running. Lastly, change our diet to keep balence. For example, eat more types of vegetables and drink more water
很多学生觉得,只要脑袋里装满例子,写作时想要什么例子就有什么例子,就什么都不用愁了。其实,这是一种误解。议论文固然离不开例子,但例子并不能代替分析论证,议论文的力量,主要来源于作者丰富的生动的言之成理的思想,归根到底,要以说理取胜,并不是靠例子取胜。一篇八百字的议论文,你能举多少字的例子呢?例子多了,辨证分析的空间就小了,就很难把观点说透。许多学生就形成了一种强盗逻辑思维,不管三七二十一,叙完某人的成功之处就贴话题(命题),比如,在一次习作中,话题是尊重他人,有些学生就如此论证:李白之所以能够成为诗仙,能写出‘乘风破浪会有时,直挂云帆济沧海’的名句,就在于他能够尊重他人;鲁迅之所以能够成现代文学巨匠就因他能够尊重他人,这就是一种强加,前面没有事例证明,后面没有辨证分析,这些伟人之所以能够取得这些成就,就一定是他们能够尊重他人的结果吗?这就说明没有思辨能力就无法做到把理说透。
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