I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成"总—分—总"结构
这周星期二,体育考试,我紧张死了。老师按学号来考试,我们被分成了几个小组。一个个小组开始比了,慢慢的准备到我这小组了。
得知我这小组里有陈佳鑫,我很郁闷。本来就很怕了,有了他,我更怕了。他跑步那么快,我怎么办?我肯定跑不过他,若我输了,我就是他的手下败将了,我可不想。正在这时,他走过来,对我说:“你跑得这么慢,我k了你。”他说了这句话后,我刚才的想法全没了。我就算拼上哦命,也要跑过他。
开始考试了,老师说道;“备就位,预备,跑。”我在这一刹那冲了出去。我一想起陈佳鑫的那句话和那个表情(手指成个“V”字形,露出两个大板牙)就愤怒。我一愤怒起来,就猛得向前冲,超过了陈佳佳,接着超过了姜霖,再接着超过了吴浚峰。现在第二名,陈佳鑫遥遥领先。最后那100米。他没力气了。越跑越慢,我就开始冲刺上去,就超过了他。
考完试后,我真想对陈佳鑫说:“你还田径队呢!回家练一练你的跑步速度,再参加田径队吧!”
导入:
第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
我们班有个男孩儿,个子不高,瘦瘦的,爱留偏分头。他的方脸盘儿上脸蛋儿红扑扑的,眼睛、鼻子和嘴巴都不大,模样挺可爱的。夏天,他穿的短袖足球衫,不是印有“尤文图斯”队队标,就是印有“曼联”队队标。冬天,他很少穿棉袄,不是一身牛仔服,就是时髦的运动装。上体育课他最开心了,因为体育老师经常表扬他。开运动会是他最得意的时候,别看他个儿矮,但跑起来像个“小飞人”,大个子也能被他甩得老远,而且跳远、投掷、乒乓球、排球他样样拿得下。这不,今年冬季运动会他又得了一个“优秀”。
学校老师们举行排球、篮球比赛,他也显得特别高兴,咧着嘴儿,笑眯眯地站在场外,只要球儿飞出了赛场,他马上第一个冲上去把球抱住,乐滋滋地送到发球老师的手上。那得意的神气,比自己跑了个第一个名还开心呢!
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