初中英语作文评语结构【一】
Last autumn we took a trip to Qianshan by bus. It is about thirty miles from the city. We planned to put up in a hotel there in order to watch the sun rise the next morning.
As soon as we got there, we began to climb up the mountains. How great the sight is! We felt as if we had entered amother world full of beauty, peaeefulness and loveliness. There are hundreds of mountains, one after another. there are magnificent cliffs, one above another. We climbed up vigorously and breathed the fresh air greedily. As the sun was going down, we descended to a little hotel at the foot of the hill, where we had a big dinner, and then went to bed early so as to regain the energy ior the expedition next morning.
Before daybreak, we reached the peak of the highest mountain after a hard groping and climbing in the dark. Unaware of the cold wind, we stood motionlessly, with our eyes fixing at the hr end of the east. Suddenly thin ravs of red hue spread across the sky. As the redness deepened, some mysterious clouds moved across thc sky, dividing heaven from the earth. Just at this moment, up from the brightening far east rose the sun. It was so red and yet so tender that we could gaze at it with naked eyes. and a slight applause from us. the amazed spectators, rang through the peak. Up, up it rose, adding to itself strength and glory at every step. It dazzled with vigour, driving away darkness, cold, and misery from the earth, and bring light, warmth, and happiness to men.
We were completely amazed at the wonder and the greatness of nature. We jumped and shouted like innocent children and we bathed in the first rays of the sun with the peak till it was time for our return.
千山秋游
去年秋天我们乘公共汽车去千山游玩了一次。它距城市大约三十英里。为了第二天早晨看日出，我们计划住在那儿的旅馆里。
我们一到那里就开始爬山。那里的景色太美了!我们感到好像进入了另一个世界，一个充满美丽、和平和可爱的世界。那里有数百座山峰鳞次栉比：有壮观的悬崖层出不穷。我们精力充沛地向上攀登，贪婪地呼吸着新鲜空气。当太阳下落时，我们来到山下的一家小旅店，在那里美美地吃了一顿晚饭，然后早早地上床睡觉，以便恢复精力第二天早晨远征。
天亮前，我们经过在黑暗中艰难地摸索和爬行到达了最高的山峰。我们一动不动地站在那里，双眼凝视着远处的`东方，连寒风也没觉察到。突然间，薄薄的红光在天空中散开，随着红色加深，一些神奇的云朵在天空四散，把天地分开。正在这时，太阳从远处东方的光亮处升起。它是那样红，然而又那么娇嫩以致我们可以用肉眼来观察它。从我们吃惊的观赏者中发出的一阵轻微的欢呼划过山峰，太阳升得越来越高了，每升一步都给它本身增加了力量和光辉。它炫耀着威力，驱走了黑暗、寒冷和大地的苦难，并给人们带来光明、温暖和幸福。
这一奇观和大自然的伟大使我们完全惊愕了。我们像天真的孩子一样跳着、喊着，和山峰一起沐浴在太阳的晨曦中，流连忘返。
初中英语作文评语结构【二】
译文：今天，我在淘宝网看到很美味的草莓。我第一时间跟我自己最爱的人分享了。他很喜欢。可是他没有吃过这种草莓。这种草莓的\'味道是牛奶味的。他觉得这很奇怪。所以他想尝尝这种草莓。而且价格也不昂贵，还有5元的红包。我觉得很值得。所以，我打算给他买一箱的草莓。一共是5斤的草莓。我想他收到的时候一定会很开心吧。一定会感觉到很幸福，很惊喜吧！我觉得，花费一点点的钱就可以给自己最爱的人一个惊喜，这是很美好的事情。不过，草莓一定要尽快的吃完。5斤的草莓一共是100个左右，要看草莓的大小和它的重量。草莓是易腐蚀的食品，所以要放进冰箱里。但是在冰箱里的草莓也不能保存很长一段时间。
初中英语作文评语结构【三】
Last Saturday,with all my classmates and teachers,I went on a trip to the nature park .We departed from school at about half past seven and spent about 40 minutes travelling to our destination.When we first entered into the park,all of us were shocked by the natural beauty and the hamonized ecosystem of the park.Then,happily we were playing games on the sand; swimming in the pool and taking with our friends on the grassplot.After lunch break,our programs were continued with an contest of story narating held and each of us was immerging within the funny stories We left the part at about 5 o\'clock,and unitl now,most of us are still haunted by the beautiful memory of that trip.
初中英语作文评语结构【四】
全文语言朴实，结构自然。…文章结构严谨，首尾呼应。
语言诙谐有趣，情节安排曲折生动，开头与结尾的呼应巧妙。篇幅虽短，但内容生动具体，段落明确，语言朴实，通俗易懂。
文中一系列表现人物动作的动词运用得准确，衬托手法运用得好。
采用了第一人称的写法，使得…具有很大的优势，对于塑造人物，表现中心起到了良好的作用，读起来亲切自然可信。思路清晰，节奏明快。
事情过程写得具体，明晰，条理清楚。作者在叙事的同时加入了恰当的心理描写，充分表达了…
文章用孩子的`语言叙事，显得自然，朴素，犹如一股清泉。结尾点题，起到了画龙点睛的作用。
文章真实生动，情真意切，特别是…使用权文章极具感染力，发人深思。
叙述事情条理清晰，能正确地使用动词，运用比喻贴切，生动。献计献策读后能从中受到教育。
朴实自然的童心体现在文中，使文章散发着清新活泼的气息。
这篇文章以具体的事例，生动优美的语言，新颖别致的写法，表现了对美好心灵的由衷赞。
主要优点有三：
1、能紧扣题目要求，完整地写了…的过程。
2、结构严谨，重点突出。
3、语言朴实，简洁，流畅，开头和结尾都很自然，准确。
开头简洁自然，结构清晰，心理描写真实，体现出作者良好的语言驾驭能力。
这篇短文的特点可概括为亲切，温馨，隽永。
文中描绘的…清新活泼，欢快明朗。字里行间跳动着的童心，使文章也有了生命力。
文章凭着丰富的想象，凭着多彩的语言，将…呈现读者面前。
文章简洁明了，语言平淡朴实。
初中英语作文评语结构【五】
Green grasses，blue lakes and beautiful mountains are waiting for you!Welcome to colorful nature pare!
There is a clean river. There are some colorful flowers. There is a beautiful mountain near the nature park. The air is fresh. The sky is blue. The clouds are white. The tree is green. The bridge is tall. The grass is green. I can run on the grass. There is a path near the lake. There are many fish in the lake. There is a forest in the nature park. There are many trees on the mountains. There are many flowers near the path.
Look! There are some birds in the sky. One, two, three…… oh! So many!
初中英语作文评语结构【六】
We take out our kites, mine are butterfly, my friends are birds, all are so funny. I start to let my kite fly, but it could not, so I run faster and faster, then my kite flies, I go let go it gradually. A few minutes later, my friends’ kites are also flying.
Seeing our kites flying, I feel so free. Today, I have a great time.
现在我已经放寒假了，我很开心，可以和朋友们玩。朋友们和我约定风来了，我们就去公园放风筝。今天风终于来了，早饭过后，我和朋友们去公园。我们拿出自己的\'风筝，我的是蝴蝶样，朋友的是鸟的样子，都很有趣。我开始让风筝飞，但是飞不起来，因此我跑得越来越快，风筝终于飞起来了，我慢慢放飞。不一会儿，朋友们的风筝也飞起来了。看到我们的风筝飞着，我觉得很自由。今天，我玩得很开心。
初中英语作文评语结构【七】
In haimen there is a park. it’s a big and beautiful park. it has two gates. they are the north gate and the west gate. many people park their bikes in front of the gates.
There is a shop at the north gate. when you go into the park through the north gate, you will find a large square on your right and you will see lots of trees and flowers around you. in the west of the park, there is a playground.
Sometimes some children fly kites on it and some people sit on the grass and chat. in the middle of the park, there is a lake. there are many boats on it. there is a hill in the east of the park.
The park is very beautiful. i love it very much. will you come to visit it some day?
