游记,是中学生感到最难写的一类,因为随着游程的行进,耳闻目睹的情景不胜枚举,很难将材料组织得当,往往写成流水账。如何将自己的游程清清楚楚、有详有略的记叙?如何避免将游记写成景点介绍?这些都是我们今天要谈的问题。
国庆长假你是否游历了祖国的名山大川?是否踏访了华夏的文明古迹?是否流连于桂林的山水中?是否沉醉在丽江的灯影里……旅游,丰富了我们的生活,增长了我们的见识。当我们结束愉快的旅程后,烦恼接踵而来。父母和老师往往不会让我们“白”游一场,写篇作文当作“总结”与“汇报”常常成了旅游的“附件”。
最让大家头疼的是旅游涉及的时间长,景点多,如何才能写得不像流水账,又有自己的特点呢?
首先是“舍”。只有学会舍弃,才能有重点的描写。景点太多,一一赘述很难做到详细、具体。只有突出最有特色的.地方才能写出特点,写清游历的情况。例如,你到云南旅游,一路走来,昆明的石林、大理的洱海、丽江的古城,还有玉龙雪山,处处皆景。你必须忍痛割爱,选择其中的一个作为写作的重点,其他最多用一两句话带过。只有这样你才能把游历的情况说清楚。
其次是“短”。这个“短”,不是指的篇幅短,而是指文章涉及的时间跨度要短。不要从出发开始写,一直写到全天的游程结束。这样无端生出的枝节会很多,烦扰了自己的思路。就从你到达这个景点写起,写到景点游览结束。时间的集中会有助于你更好地组织材料,突出景点的特色。
再次是“真”。这一点是同学们最容易忽略,也是最能体现写作水平的。很多人以为写游记就是把景点的情况告诉别人。其实不然。游记,就是游历的记录,更强调了自己独特的游览感受。游览同一个地方,大人和孩子的感受会不同,男生和女生游览的感觉也有差异。怎样将自己的独特感受表达出来呢?那就是将自己游览过程中的“发现”写出来。这些发现可以是“摸一摸”“闻一闻”“听一听”“找一找”,甚至是“猜一猜”,也就是把你游览时的所见、所做、所闻、所思写下来。游记最忌讳的就是通篇景物描写,有了自己的活动出现在游览的过程中那才是属于你自己的游览经历。
最后是“趣”。旅游之所以能吸引人,首先就是有趣味。那么,你的游记也要把你在游历过程中感受到的趣味表达出来。这种“趣味”的内涵很广:可以是放肆的玩耍,可以是悠闲的漫步,可以是滑稽的场面,亦可以是别样的风俗……只要是觉得有意思的就不妨多写两笔,把自己的快乐和大家分享!
掌握了以上“四字”要诀,估计再提笔写游记你就有了一些头绪了吧?
最后还有一个很重要的事情要交代:任何游记,对于景点的环境描写是必不可少的部分,这里可要写得细致生动哦。
【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
关正文说,筹备《见字如面》,最艰难的莫过于信件选择,最让人惊喜也是这些入选信件。几乎每一封信件都会让人感到意外,每一封信都有一种特殊的力量敲击人心。
数十位文化名人和信件收集家、多家信件博物馆和档案馆参与了节目所需的信件收集推荐工作。
节目入选的一百多封信件,跨越古今,涵盖中国历史的诸多阶段。从春秋时代的第一封私人家书,到魏晋唐宋,从晚晴民初一直到现在。
关正文介绍,最终入选信件强调了关涉历史的重要性、当事人的重要性和信件内容的有趣性。但所有标准最终其实只有一个:这封信值得更多人看到。
最终入选的信件,包括那些影响世界、影响中国的重大历史事件,也包括已成历史的社会生活的有趣片段和截面。
一百多封信件呈现出对应复杂历史的丰富的多样性。有求爱信也有分手信,有战争中敌对双方的平静通信,也有父子间唇枪舌剑的激越交锋,有名人不为人知的心事,也有荒唐年代的锥心往事。无论是情感状态、价值观念还是文字风格,都是多元呈现。
历史的不断重复,人性的善恶交织,让信中的生活跟今天的每个人都息息相关。所有的历史因此也都成了当代史,成了人们身边的历史。
入选的那封2249年前由秦国将士黑夫和惊两兄弟写的家书中,已然定型了今天信件的模样。
兄弟俩除了殷殷问候家人之外,也毫不隐晦地直接向家人要钱要新衣服,此外还告知,官府因为他俩卫国有功已经给家里授予爵位,文书应该已经送到。
这封信是黑夫和惊的大哥衷的陪葬品。用两封信陪葬,其中的兄弟情深可见一斑;此外,从信中也可看出:分封授爵光宗耀祖从来都是将士敢死的动力;即使强盛如秦,也管不起将士的衣服和零花钱。
记现场宣读的所有古代书信都被翻译成了生动的白话文。古文变得亲切,也变得陌生。
在关正文眼里,这是一个回到常识的过程。“中国几千年的文明是异常丰富的,不然也活不到今天。我们今天世界几乎所有的遭遇、所有的情感,古人全都经历过。大家未必要去爱古文,但通过读懂他们写的那些信,大家一定不会感觉那是发生在古代,一定会感同身受,也一定会爱上古人。”
读余秋雨的《文化苦旅》,我不禁想问什么是文化?我百度一下文化,各种各样的解释在网上流传,各种关于文化的词条相继排列。编辑词条的不是一个人,这导致了问题:各家观点杂糅组成一个定义,各种各样的定义解释着同一个名词,这些都是网上词条共有的问题。对于文化的解释,我更倾向文化是历史的沉淀。无论是包括宗教信仰、风俗习惯、文艺科学在内的意识形态,还是文化的物态、制度、行为、心态四层次,都是历史积累沉淀的结果。
既然是苦旅,旅途当然不能是欢乐的。文化的传承远比文化形成要艰难。比如四大文明中的埃及尼罗河流域文明、印度河流域文明和两河流域文明,都在传承过程中遭到毁灭,唯独中华文明一脉相承,绵延千年而不绝。即便如此,中华文明在传承的过程中也不是一帆风顺的,因为各种各样的原因,文化事物遭到破坏甚至是毁灭,这最好的例证是莫高窟了。当王圆箓一次次“整理”他的庭院的时,当外国“学者”一次次运走用低价购得的古籍时,当中国官吏一次次以资金不足拒绝保护石窟时,我想莫高窟肯定在西北凛冽的风中哭泣。落日染红了天,血色一般的晚霞犹如中国文化伤口正滴着血呢……
相对于文化遭到破坏感受到的这种痛苦,在旅途中所受到的舟车劳顿之苦更像是一种历练,一种在文化面前的虔诚仪式,余秋雨拜访过众多名山大川,不止一次谈到路途之苦,同时也引述了其他古人的路途之苦。相对于古人来说,现代人受的苦要少得多了,缆车汽车和沿途的旅馆酒店为游人打点好了吃住行的一切,而古人则是自备干粮,露宿山野,历经劳顿之苦才能看到期盼已久的山川景色。正是有了这样的旅行,山川变得不再是山川,而是在一次次迎接游客中不断沉淀下来文化。名山本只是山,有了文化积淀名气在大了起来。
《文化苦旅》尽管写出了文化传承的不易,但我们也应该看到文化也是具有顽强的生命力,当它鲜活地呈现在你面前时,你不会觉得那是文化,你会觉得那是你生命中的一部分而且是不可分割的。
人生处处有挫折,有挫折的人生才丰富多彩;人生处处有挫折,有挫折的人生才回味无穿;人生处处有挫折,有挫折的人生才充实饱满。
刚刚进入初中的我,是一个“老小孩”,对校园的一切都很生疏,似乎一切的一切都在改变,科目在变,老师在变,班级在变……走进陌生的班级,坐在陌生的座位,面对陌生的老师,社交陌生的同学,学习陌生的学科,使我不知所措。
由于我并不熟悉初中的生活,因此我把握不住重点,第一次考试就名落孙山。面对着这样的挫折,我心有余而力不从心。可我是一个执著而又不服输的一个人,从那以后,我艰苦奋斗,击败一个个挫折的堡垒,最后,我终于取得了“根据地”,获得了“胜利”。回首过去,我不禁为自己自豪。
挫折伴我成长,它就像是一条通向天边的路,等着我去走,我身边没有任何辅助工具,如果我坚持走下去,或许会成功,但我要是在中途放弃,那就只能失败。
挫折伴我成长,它可以让我的灵魂升华,似乎每战胜它一次,我就会觉得自己长大了许多。我常对自己说:“不要想走捷径,面对它没有任何捷径可走;不要想逃避,面对它只有努力向前冲;不要想放弃,面对它只有攥紧拳头咬紧牙关”。
挫折伴我成长,朋友,如果你现在是胆怯、懒惰,那么请你从它们的黑洞中爬出来,和我一起勇敢地踏上挫折的征途;如果你现在是坚定、不懈,那么希望你与我同行。
“就让暴风雨来得更猛烈些吧!”愿挫折伴我成长。
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